Poetry, Now it's my time to play
I remember well the many nights she left me all alone.
Flowers for a dead lover by The Examiner-1 A challenge by Frank Atancio's April poetry month.
Placing flowers on a headstone is eerie
' cause walking through a graveyard is lerry
You hear a noise and it sounds like a ' crack '
It was only a cat-but was it black?
You feel a breeze
It blows through the trees
You believe you saw a ghost
It was the shadow of a post
Suddenly you decide to leave
You do regret that you did not grieve,
My response, Now it's my time to play
How could i possibly grieve at my lover's grave
She treated me like dirt
Calling me her white trash slave
I remember well the nights she left me all alone
Dancing with the boys at the club
A dive where she was well known
I cooked and cleaned, watched the kids twenty four hours a day
When she finally decided to come home
She always refused to play
Saying, " I'm tired. I have a headache
Please just go away "
One fateful night she went too far
Caught her all cuddled up
With an old boy at the bar
Told her the kids were crying and needed their mother
She laughed and said,
" Who do you think you are, my brother? "
That's when i'd finally had enough. I shot her once right between her eyes
Her cheating day's were over
No more lies, no more guy's
I've been in prison for years for my crime, just got out today
When i placed the flowers on her grave
I whispered softly
Now it's my time to play.
Comments
AUTHORHello Harishprasad. so glad you enjoyed. I certainly do like a challenge, perhaps you would like to join in and write your version. Thank for a kind comment...
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Hello PADDYBOY, nice to meet you too. Happy you like my poetry. Thank you...
What a fantastic flow of the poem and a smart opening up of layers of the story ! Ruby, it's a wonderful poem. I relished every word of it. It is through you poem that I got to know this wonderful game of extending threads left behind a fellow poet. You played the game too good. Voted up.
Howdy Ma'am
Glad to meet you. I like your poems very much. I look forward to reading more.
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Hello Shyron. Happy you enjoyed this enough to come back for a second read. I sure changed it . Hee. I was hoping someone would add a different version. Thank you so much. Hugs and Blessings my friend...
I bookmarked this so I can come back and read it again and again.
I love this so much. I think this is one of the best ones from Frank's challenge.
Voted up, ABI and shared again.
Blessings and hugs
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Hello Elena. Thank you for an awesome comment. Cheers my friend..
Awesome, Ruby. That was a captivating read.
Thanks. :-)
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Hello Shyron. You are so generous with your comment's. Thank you. I am having a ball. I love a writing challenge.
Blessings and Hugs..
Ruby, you are a wonderful writer, I am truly enjoying the "In Honor April Poetry Month" This is such fun.
Blessings and Hugs
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Presetio, so good to see you on HP again. Thank you...
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Hello DDE so nice to see you again. Thank you for stopping by...
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Hello Thandi. Happy you thought i nailed this piece. Thank you. I know you will have a good one. ( challenge )
I like it. Good job and thumbs up for you. Cheers :-)
Great emotions here and so nicely thought of.
One can be pushed too far. But, no just that too far, Ruby.
sad though but you nailed this poem.
Lovely, though sad.
still cooking up my poem for the challenge - see y i hate challenges? I will deliver one at least. have a blessed day.
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Aha Epi, my poet friend, it's always so good to see you on my page. I miss you on hubpages, but i love your blog, your creativity amazes me. George is with us in spirit. Thank you for being my friend...Hugs..
And I always love when you play, Ruby my dear, poetically speaking of course, lol.
You have been a gift in my life and one of the best people I shall ever have the pleasure of meeting.
Thank you for standing by my side, your loyalty , your friendship , your love and of course our mutual appreciation of George Jones, lol.
Sending warm sincere wishes and good thoughts your way from Colin, Tiffy and Gabe man .....
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Hello Nell. I knew you would like the dark verson. Hee..I'm still waiting for yours....
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Hello Phyllis. Thank you for an awesome comment, so glad you liked it...
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Hello Genna. The Devil made me do it. lol..Thnk you for thinking it was powerful. I loved writing it....
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Hello Frank. My dark muse took me down a different path. Your comment is heartfelt. Thank you..I'm ready for another challenge from you....
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Prasetio, it's so good to see you back on hubpages. Thank you dear friend..
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Hello Rasma. Thank you for the incredible comment...
Woo Ruby! that was really great! love the dark side! and yes she got what she deserved! lol!
My gosh ! Yes, big WOW. This is awesome, Ruby.
Wow! I repeat, Wow! As Jodah commented, this is truly another dimension and a powerful one! voted up and beyond, and sharing.
exploring it amazingly.. I cant believe the many poets on Hubpages..:)
Beautiful and you always be the best here. Thanks for sharing, Ruby. My love and my pray always for you. Voted up and take care!
Prasetio
Voted up and beautiful. Incredible verse. Enjoyed.
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Thank's Vellur, glad to see you...
Great work!
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Hello Ann. Thank's for the wonderful compliment, so happy you enjoyed. Thank you for linking....
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Hello Kevin. Thank you for linking. I tried to link yours to this, but it would not paste. It copied ok. I have trouble with gadgets. Cheers..
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Hello Audrey. I think the dark side is my niche. I seem to be pulled in that direction. Thank you so much...
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Hello jo. HaHa...The true me had to come out. What a hoot..Thank you...
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Hello Jodah. I think my dark side emerged. Hee..Thank you so much.
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Hello Bill. I am thrilled. Thank you. Your approval means a lot to me....
This is brilliant! Revenge is sweet, eh? The rhythm is perfect and your choice of words spot on. It brought a wry smile to my face.
Well done! (Will add the link to my response to the challenge.) Ann
always exploring,
As soon as I finish my other Hub I will work on my second one for Frank's poem. By the way, I linked your site to mine.
Kevin
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Hello Mar. I guess i just got tired of writing fluffy..Heeee I know this started out as a somewhat religious piece. Do you think they'll kick me out of the club? lol..What a hoot! Thank you dear one. Love you too..
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Kevin, I'm glad you liked what i did to your poetry about taking flowers to your lover's grave. I don't know what happened to me, i went a little mad.Hee..I love having a prompt from which to write. I tend to write a dark side instead of the light. Maybe we will get to do this again...
Love this darker side of your work Ruby!
Oh Ruby, you certainly took your love to town. :) Loved it!!
Good job Ruby. You certainly added another interesting dimension here. Well done.
Look at you! Absolutely loved it. That will teach that two-timing lass. LOL Great job, Ruby!
Your muse is alive and well...
Ruby, you are a wonder! Love you and love this, mar
The above comment was made on HubPages, I did not know that it would show up here.
That definitely is - down there. (grin) You really put your heart into that and it came out both awesome and interesting. It gets a thumbs up in my, er, [poem] books.
Kevin
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Hello Kevin, You did pretty good not to think. I just took it in a different direction. I love to do that. Cheers my friend...
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HaHaHa Mike... It's the same ole me, just having fun on a cold and windy day. Happy you like it. I'm taking up Epi's thicks, writing as a man, Hee..My first...
I did not even think, I was only making a comment.
Wow, Ruby, who are you? LOL You certainly are contributing wonderful verse to Frank's poetry challenge. Congratulations.
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