Poetry in its Infant Stage: A Moment with Bill Debacle

Billy, I see nothing wrong with either poem..After all, it was from the heart, and isn't that was REALLY matters?

haha! I like them!

I enjoyed your poems! You should do that more often. The supermarket one was really cute. :-)

Bill! you say you don't write poetry and you are not a poet, but you do, you are you have a poet's heart.

What is a poet?

Sometimes her words are singing birds

And sometimes deep still water

But her greatest work are not of words

But a lovely son and daughter

And so Bill, I really want to read

"I Cry Real Tears!"

Please, please publish it right here.

You did a wonderful job on the 2 above.

(((((Hugs)))))

Shyron

It looks like a poem, it smells like a poem, it tastes like a poem, it sounds like a poem, must be one then, oh actually two, good for you, never a doubt in my mind.

That's why I kept it simple!!

Thanks bill; it's good to be back. Don't worry, I will never put the words 'bill' and 'poetry' together again. I can feel your panic from here! I do so appreciate you writing a poem for me.

Back in France to see old friends, to collect our caravan and move it to a more accessible place, to celebrate a friend's 70th and to do a little sight-seeing. We're currently on a 'seniors club' coach trip - don't laugh! I love Brittany and am seeing places I used to visit for holidays when I was 10 - 15, just a little while ago. Will be back home around 20th May when my hubpage activity will get back to normal.

In the meantime, 'bon courage' for your writing, 'bon weekend' and 'à bientôt! Ann

There now, bill, that wasn't so bad was it? I told you you could do it! I like the second one especially; it flows!

Thank you so much for taking up the challenge. I could tell you didn't really want to do it - I could feel the blood trickling from the stone!

Mostly, though, huge apologies for not getting round to reading this sooner. I'm back in France and have up till now been unable to get wifi. This has been rectified, at least for a few days, so I'm trying to catch up.

I hope you had a blissful Easter with Bev and family. Now you can relax without the threat of poetry over your head! Sincerely, well done and I appreciate you rising to the challenge. I won't do that to you again - promise (not with poetry anyway!).

From the depths of South Brittany - have a wonderful evening and I'll catch up with the rest of your hubs soon. Ann

Well aren't you spreading your wings and flying!?! Congratulations on that. I like that you're giving poetry a try, Bill. Flap away, my friend.

Voted up. Bill I am delighted to see these small steps in poetry which you have taken. I will go on to say now that you have begun I would like to see you do a poem now and then and soon perhaps you'll have ten. Hugs.

Well, Bill, that's another thing we appear to agree on. I can't write poetry either, but on occasion, do manage to put a poem out there. You did most especially nice on the second one. Well done, but stick to prose, will you? We have enough poets on hubpages! lol

Hi Bill.

Appropriately, as any other poet, you've made it better and best. We are only responding to your challenge to love you even more my friend.

Up and beautiful.

Peace.

There was a lot of truth and belief in your second poem. A poet writes from the heart and spills his soul. Well guess what that makes you Bill?

"There are days of mass confusion

Encircling rare moments of

Intense clarity, a rarity, here then gone

Leaving us with more questions"

and you say you are not a poet...

Kim

Bill you have done it, and done it well! The feeling and ideas in a poem have intensity, rhyme and imagery and though it may not rhyme as much it certainly is not short on the other two.

Well done my friend!

I have to say this and I mean it...You are a fast learner. Your first poem made me smile and your second makes me want to vote it up and awesome!

Bill, your poetry is refreshing, great hub! :)

Thanks for sharing such excellent poems, Bill!

Maybe you're a poet and didn't know it? :)

I'm like you. I just don't get the whole poetry thing, though I do appreciate those who have the gift. Yet, I think you can agree that there are times in our daily writing when we use poetic elements without realizing it.

BTW, I'm all for more poems on pizza... or donuts. Happy Easter!

"I am not a poet"

I beg to differ. Voted up and excellent.

Bill I think as folks who call ourselves writers we have no choice but to try hard -- not just drive by -- but maintain continuous effort in areas we are uncomfortable in "not a poet say you", well then damn well become one!

You a hidden talent and now truly shown a great write here well done to your wonderful thoughts.

Well done ,Billy buc .It does't appear as your first attempt.Specially the second one is beautiful. It has all the qualities of a good poem. I would say it as"'pakka''poem,

(In Indian language it means, up to the mark)

Ah, Bill, the poet, there you are!

You do have it in you, and please never put yourself down when you always do your best, as your best is as good as it gets! You may even get hired to write commercials using your Meat Lovers' Pizza poem for a large pizza conglomerate! As you are always teaching us, spread you wings and fly, and don't forget to add veggie lovers' pizza too ... wise business practices : )

Love your "Resurrecting Tobias" poem. When you write from the heart, you can never go wrong.

Blessings to you and your family for a wonderful Easter weekend

Hi Bill. That wasn't so hard now, was it? I was actually impressed. I think you are too hard on yourself or extremely humble. Maybe this is the start of something new :)

Have a nice Easter.

Sir Bill, a poet in you can still spawn inspiring rhythmic incidentals, LOL! Poetry reading is very much popular here in the Philippines (mostly in our vernacular language).

I will agree, the first poem didn't make my heart flutter, but the second, ' Resurrecting Tabias ' Is beautiful. I knew you were a poet, you just won't admit it. Why is that? Poetry is so heartfelt if it's coming from within. Humorous poetry is just fun to write, but the words that come from your soul are precious. You get my vote as a reluctant poet. Hee.

Bill, the poems (and all the apologies about not being a poet) make me smile. I smile even more when I think of Bev reading the first one. Got a serious message from the second. Thanks for sharing your skills in their infancy. Have a great Easter weekend!

Bill your second poem is incredibly beautiful! Indeed it is written as a poem. I say this because the first is different. Sweet and good fun, yes, but different. I felt your prose spirit all the way through it.

The second was definitely poetic to my feel and senses, and I do appreciate this immensely.

Kindly note that I am sending you my love in a spirit of service, and giving you a sincere view. It need not be others. Still, I have always felt that all good writers are poets. Strange that it's not so obvious in your first but definitely lofty in your second.

So there you are. I don't usually write that much. March on my brother, while following your heart.

Bill, there is poetry in everything you write, I totally agree with the person who commented that poetry doesn't have to do with rhymes and meter, it's about how you feel inside, how you are able to touch others with mere words. My friend, you've touch so many people through your words and emotion. Every heart sings a song, everyone becomes a poet. But hey.. you already knew that..right?

Your first poem made me laugh because it reminds me of how I feel when grocery shopping, LOL. I'm actually trying not to eat meat more than twice a week now but there's always a craving for it I can't turn off! Your second poem seemed to bring out your true poetry voice more, probably because it was something closer to you. Either way, they were both poems and great job accepting the challenge!

Bill, I've said it before and I'll say it again...You are a poet, you just don't know it....

You have a poetic voice in most of what you write, especially whern you are writing passionately (and that is often) In my opinion, poetry doesn't have to have an exact pattern. Yes, I know there are certain rules if you choose to write a certain type of poem. But aside from the formal, poetry comes out of your pen...

Have a great weekend!

Mmmmmm . . . Pizzaaaaa . . . Your poetry is inspiring, Billy.

You're an excellent writer. Even your poems are fantastic. I really enjoyed them.

LOL.....Well by God...this seals it, Bro! Ain't no way, no how we ain't bro & sis fer reel! Y'all got that dern Potree down pat!

Your Loyalty is priceless......taking a leap for your friends. You definitely landed on your feet! I love this....UP+++

Wow. "I Cry Real Tears" really moved me. Well done -- it speaks truthfully to the stark reality we face in this country. Thank you for sharing.

Congrats on putting your big toe in the water Bill!

I love this one Bill! You really have put a smile on my face today. And, yes you can write a poem! :)

Have a peaceful Good Friday!

Well, you are certainly better at poetry than I am. I think I had beans in my ears during poetry classes in school because I just couldn’t rake up the interest.

What’s that teacher/

Speak up/

We can’t hear you/

We have beans in our ears. (Remember that song?)

I do find limericks to be fun, and I’m developing a grudging interest in haiku, I guess because they are short and the writer doesn’t have to hold a thought for very long. I recently wrote my boss a haiku on his birthday card. He didn’t comment, so I guess I won’t do it again. Really, yours is much better than mine. Maybe you should keep at it. Give the teacher an “A” for effort!

Bill,

Keep writing poems and do a love poem about your first love. This will make you think real hard and it will bring back feelings left in a special place in your heart. I know it is there---we all have it.

I believe you can do it.

Your Friend,

Bobbi Purvis

You did very well as a poet, although, I don't know anything about poetry either but to me it was fantastic! Good for you for taking on the challenge!

Bill, you can write poetry and you have proved it, but you need to know all bit about the type of poetry you want to compose. Do you want to compose a sonnet, a ballad, a lyric, an epic, an elegy, or an ode? This is the most important thing. Then, have a cursory glance over stanza pattern, meter, rhyme scheme, free verse, blank verse, and figurative language. I am pretty sure that you would excel many amateur poets if you have know-how about these elements. Anyways, bold efforts on your part!

Whenever I read your any article, I always found a glimpse of poetry in it. I used to wonder why this wonderful writer has not ventured into the realm of poetry. Once I had pointed it out to you and I was convinced that someday a poet sitting in your heart would sit up and dazzle everyone. I loved reading both of your poems and " Resurrecting Tobias " is such a sweet one that I anticipate a third one from you. Since you have given birth to two poems, you are a poet as a woman giving birth to a baby is called a mother.:-)

Hi Bill, we can all be our harshest critics. 'Resurrecting Tobias' is a better than a lot of poetry I have read from people who call themselves 'poets'. Not bad for someone who has only written one or two poems before. 'A Day at Ralph's Supermarket' isn't the most polished, but it was a bit of light hearted fun and made me smile. Well done for taking up the challenge. I'd give you more than a pass.

Well Bill, you got my vote. It's amazing what comes from a challenge. You may have never you known you had it in you. Great stuff, my friend!

Hooray!! The poet raises his voice!

Resurrecting Tobias is quite good billybuc. No need to tuck away that emerging poetic voice!

I am a lover of poetry and have published two books of it. The latter of the two is wonderful. Poetry does not need to rhyme in any way. It comes from the heart and speaks truth. There are many great poets out there that never rhyme and I have written some myself. I think with a little fine tuning you could find a new nitch.

Great stuff ! I say damned to cholesterol often. I enjoyed your Tobias poem a lot. Good or bad it's fun! Jamie

Stop pouting Bill. It doesn't become you in the least. :-)

Lots of love to you and Bev,

Sha