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Rate My Pain

Updated on March 3, 2015
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ocfireflies is a retired teacher. She graduated from Appalachian State University with a B.S. in English/Secondary Education.

Rate your pain

On a scale of zero to 10!

How do you feel?


Compartmentalize!

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Where do YOU hurt?

Is it your head,

your stomach?

What happens if I do this?

Does this make it better or worse?

Observation!

Receive “amount [I] pay” statement

From insurance cops

For one night stay in hospital

Insurance Cops claim I owe over $2,000-They’ve paid over $7,000!

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Rate my pain

On a scale of freaking out to refluxing acid

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Thoughts and feelings

What good am I?

If I cost more than I am worth


An irony for sure

Not that I am saying

Anything I didn’t already know


I have trouble with

Compartmentalization!

Somehow -Somebody-


Has decided

I am no different from A machine:

A set of parts In total dismay


How Real is My Pain?

Is it all in my head?

Or did I fall

When I opened the door to the shed?


Spring! Spring! Spring!

Sunshine

Skies Carolina Blue

Get outside

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Put on tank dress and wader boots

Mow the lawn

But by all means

“Curb your enthusiasm!”

There could be danger

There could be a sawhorse in the way

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How real is my pain?


I don’t know


I am not sure I am even alive


I am lying on the ground

Looking up at the sky


Not sure how to move-Thinking I am the only person I know


who has ever hit the ground this hard

when all she wanted to do

was feel the sunshine on her shoulders

while mowing her yard

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© 2015 ocfireflies

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      ocfireflies 2 years ago from North Carolina

      Suzette,

      Thank you for your enthusiasm. I hope it is contagious. Smiles. I love your response: " I rate my pain low on the scale, but then I'm on meds. "

      Thank you for your ongoing support with votes and shares. So nice when someone else gets my weird sense of humor.

      Jo,

      If your patients rate their pain has bad, you can always tell them "just wait until you get your bill..." Smiles... You may see lots of miraculous recoveries. "Quirky" is a great way to describe this one. And if I have created a way for you to think of me, I hope it makes you smile.

      Many Blessing to you Both,

      Kim

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      Jo Alexis-Hagues 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K

      Kim, a thoroughly good read. I'll never again ask a patient to score their pain, without remembering this delightfully quirky poem with a serious message. My best to you always.

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      Suzette Walker 2 years ago from Taos, NM

      Oh, Kim, just another stellar poem from you. You have such a unique way of looking at the world. I love your vision. My favorite line: "If I cost more than I'm worth." lol! How true. Hospital bills are out of this world today. I rate my pain low on the scale, but then I'm on meds. LOL! Voted up + and shared.

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      ocfireflies 2 years ago from North Carolina

      Kevin,

      Thank you for always showing me support with your votes and shares. Thank you for finding the piece "interesting and funny."

      Audrey,

      Thank you for feeling this one.

      Jamie,

      Thank you for finding the humor in this poem and for acknowledging my attempt at using visuals to help tell the story.

      Tami,

      I am so sorry to hear about your sister. It sounds as if you are there for her and that is the best way to help her. Thank you for your vote and follow. Note that I will be doing the same in turn.

      CrisSp,

      Thank you for calling the piece, "Fun." This is the first year I do not have any children I can claim so I am understanding the Tax Pain as well.

      Blessings to all for taking a look at this one and leaving such nice comments.

      Kim

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      CrisSp 2 years ago from Sky Is The Limit Adventure

      Terrible pain comes to me every fiscal year...tax season. CRA is all ready to suck up my hard earned money ...my hubby call it anal pain, irreversible and no cure. On the brighter side, there is something in there for us when we retire. :)

      What fun read!

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      Tami Rogers 2 years ago from Seattle, Washington

      I particularily enjoyed this now. My sister is in the hospital. She has neurophibomatosis, a horrific disease where tumors are growing up and down her spinal cord. She has been on meds like methadone for over 15 years and it is getting worse. I am having such a hard time trying to figure out how to help. Thanks for

      this poem. Voting up and following you! Tami

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      Jamie Lee Hamann 2 years ago from Reno NV

      Awesome Kim! The poetry mixed perfectly with the photo's made for a complete visual experience. Pain may not be fun at all, nor having to pay hospital bills, but this poem is fun. Jamie

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      Audrey Howitt 2 years ago from California

      I just feel this on all kinds of levels Kim--felt piece

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      The Examiner-1 2 years ago

      I do not know what to say first Kim, that it was funny or that it was interesting but it was both. I voted it up++, shared and Tweeted it.

      Kevin

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      ocfireflies 2 years ago from North Carolina

      Catherine,

      Thank you for calling my little attempt "interesting."

      I think it is cool that you have an exercise routine. Girlfriend, that is awesome. And yes, the real painful part of the piece was how medical expenses create a whole new level of pain.

      Blessings,

      Kim

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      Catherine Giordano 2 years ago from Orlando Florida

      Interesting. I'm about to go do my exercise routine and then I will rate my pain. I feel you pain vis a vis medical expenses. Ouch!

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      ocfireflies 2 years ago from North Carolina

      John,

      Thanks for the vote. "One" is awesome! I do plan on enjoying the sunshine because the weather for tonight is to go back to cold and snow showers. That is pretty common for mountain weather this time of year. Not unusual to have blooming flowers with several inches of snow on the ground.

      Faith,

      Thanks for reading and for the up and more and away. Even with insurance, medical expenses are unreal. Hugs to you, too.

      Blessings to you both,

      Kim

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      Faith Reaper 2 years ago from southern USA

      Ouch, medical bills hurt a lot!!! The hospital is supposed to make you feel better not worse.

      I enjoyed this read!

      Up and more and away

      Hugs

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      A wonderful hub Kim...I feel your pain, those medical bills would hurt. Enjoy that sunshine...no I definitely don't dress like that when mowing the yard either :) Luckily my physical pain would be about a "one" on that scale at the moment...touch wood. Voted up.

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      ocfireflies 2 years ago from North Carolina

      Jackie,

      Not in physical pain-just shell shock from medical bills. I did break several ribs getting my lawn mower out of the shed, but that was many years ago. I did not spend the night in the hospital for that fall. But the bill is correct for a recent stay not related to breaking any bones. The weather forecasters are saying we may reach 60° tomorrow. Thank you for your votes and sharing. I will be thinking of you tomorrow when I am out under that sunny sky. Smiles...

      Bill,

      You don't wear a tank dress and waders when you mow your lawn? : )

      Audrey,

      So glad to hear I am stylish and interesting...especially since I am wearing my old sweat pants and t-shirt. Smiles. Thank you for your kind words, votes and willingness to pass this one on.

      Blessings to All,

      Kim

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      Audrey Hunt 2 years ago from Nashville Tn.

      Very clever poem my friend. Just my style! Voted up, awesome, interesting and will pass this on.

      Wonderful!

      Audrey

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      Bill Holland 2 years ago from Olympia, WA

      I love the boots and sundress. Great fashion statement....and of course I always love your poetry and humor.

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      Jackie Lynnley 2 years ago from The Beautiful South

      Hope you are not in pain! My Carolina tomorrow is going to be 76!!! I will for sure get out in it whether the sun shines or not...but I do hope it does! Voted all across and sharing.