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Rictameter poetry, Alone

Updated on June 16, 2012
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I am a writer of poetry and fiction. I especially love flash fiction. My name is Ruby, and I live in Southern Illinois. I am a retired R.N.

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Hopefull invitation

Alone

Walls closing in

Listening for a sound

The telephone, the door buzzer

Automobile honking loudly next door

Excited happiness erupts

Hopeful invitation

Unneighborly

Alone.









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      Shining Irish Eyes 4 years ago from Upstate, New York

      Great write, also caught that the shape of the words forms an arrow. Creative and written well. Great choice of video!

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      Bill Holland 4 years ago from Olympia, WA

      I told myself I would only read ten hubs today and then I would go out to play....yours, of course, had to be one of the ten. Great job as always; I am always amazed at how much emotion you squeeze into so few words.

      Have a wonderful weekend Ruby!

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      LABrashear 4 years ago from My Perfect Place, USA

      Wonderful! I had to go back and see the arrow shape - very cool - because I was too intent on the words. I agree with Billybuc - lots of emotion in so few words. Voted up!

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      Vincent Moore 4 years ago

      Simply beautiful and tender, I loved it. Brilliant. Hugs and the video a favorite song of mine by the late Marvin Gaye.

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      Joyce Haragsim 4 years ago from Southern Nevada

      Brillian poem, loved it.

      Voted up beautiful and interesting.

      Have you heard from our Welsh Eddiwen at all recently?

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      Terry.Hirneisen 4 years ago from Shenandoah Valley

      Voted up and beautiful!

      Sacky & Terry

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      mckbirdbks 4 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

      I told myself I would only read five hubs today and then I would go back to working ....yours, of course, had to be one of the five. LOL The Rictameter, is very tricky poetry, it takes a lot of thought. Well done Always, as always. Tomorrow is Speakeasy Night.

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      Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO

      Incredibly creatively original, always exploring, yet very realistically hopeful and sad. Extraordinarily executed and equally moving.

      When I checked out your video, I mistakenly yet gladly thought about John Travolta in Michael and his fantastic line dance, as I somehow connected it to "Heard it through the Grapevine", when it was actually danced to Aretha Franklin's "Chain of Fools". So, your piece brought me the enjoyment of your video and sent me to check of Chain of Fools and that fantastic dance scene in Michael. Thank you

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      drbj and sherry 4 years ago from south Florida

      You did not miss a thing, Ruby, at that wild party next door.

      They were doing drugs and now face a sentence of two to four ...

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      Maria Jordan 4 years ago from Jeffersonville PA

      "I HEARD IT THROUGH THE GRAPEVINE..."

      that Ruby had a new poem out... and was not at all disappointed!

      Love this, perfectly polished... voted UP & AB. Hugs, Maria

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      Martin Kloess 4 years ago from San Francisco

      really good job

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Shiningirisheyes, Thank you so much, not only are you a great story teller, you're very observant. ( Arrow ) Happy you liked the video...Cheers

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Bill, Thank's for coming by my page. I love writing Rictameter poetry. Happy you enjoyed, now go out and have fun..Cheers

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello LABrashear, Happy to see you. Thankful you thought it was an emotional piece, that's the effect i was going for. Thank's so much for coming by..Cheers

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Vincent, I'm so glad you enjoyed my poetry and the video. Marvin Gaye is another one of my many favorites..Hugs bachatcha

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Joyce.. Thank you..I'm thrilled you liked it...No I haven't heard from Eddy, I really miss her. I don't know where she went. I know she left Hubpages...Cheers

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Sacky and Terry. Good to see you both, thank's for the up vote..Cheers

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Mike, I don't see how you have time to read any hubs, the cafe is a 24 hour job..Yea ,Speakeasy night coming tomorrow. Great! See you there my friend..Thank you..Cheers

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Amy, Thank you for your heartfelt comment. I am a BIG fan of John and Marvin, so happy you enjoyed the video..Cheers my friend..

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello drbj, I'm so glad i didn't get invited. I would be doing time in the hoosegow, HaHa..Thank's for coming by my poetic friend...

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Mar, I bet you heard it Through the grapevine at our little cafe. Thank you for thinking it was perfectly polished. ( Love your comment ) Hugs backatcha...

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Mhatter99, Happy to see you. Thank you for coming by my place..Cheers

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      Rosemary Sadler 4 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

      Awesome rictameter Ruby. The neighbours party wasn't all it was cracked up to be Lol

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Rosemary, I'm cracking up here. You made my evening..HaHaHa..Cheers my friend..

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      Richard Ricky Hale 4 years ago from West Virginia

      Not a great way to feel, but a great poem AE. As for the party next door, they never are:) Another deep rictameter Ruby. Best wishes and take care.

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Ricky. It didn't happen, just a poem I thought of from seeing a picture. Best wishes to you my loyal friend.. Cheers..

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      Voted up. You expressed the feeling of loneliness very well. However there are days which I love when everything is completely quiet all around.

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      BeyondMax 4 years ago from Sydney, Australia

      What a truly beautiful craftsmanship! Emotional poem, very expressive, I felt it very much.

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Gypsy, Thank you for coming by..I agree with you about being alone. There are days when it's nice..Cheers

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      Movie Master 4 years ago from United Kingdom

      Beautiful poetry Ruby and a great rictameter!

      Voting up

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Max, Your complimentary remarks are heartfelt..Thank you so much. Happy you enjoyed...Cheers

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Lesley, Good to see you. Thank you..Glad you enjoyed..Cheers

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      BobbiRant 4 years ago from New York

      Very nice description of alone. Very nice and very nice pictures painted with words. Quite moving. A wonderful write.

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Beautifully done Ruby--evocative and vulnerable--just lovely!

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Bobbi, Thank you for a wonderful comment. Happy to see you again..

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Audrey, What a lovely comment. Always happy to see you...Cheers

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      Caroline Marie 4 years ago from Close to Heaven

      Beautiful poem Ruby. Love it. :)

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Caroline, Thank you. Glad you enjoyed..Cheers

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      Cathy Nerujen 4 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space

      Nice Rictameter poem Ruby. Nice build up of anticipation in here. You are an ace poet and writer. :)

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      Vinaya Ghimire 4 years ago from Nepal

      Ruby, every line is so expressive, the poem in entirety tells about lots of things.

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Astra, Geez your comment is so nice. Thank you. I appreciate you...Cheers

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Vinaya, Your comment makes me happy. You are always able to see layers in my poetry. Thank you so much..Cheers

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      Erin LeFey 4 years ago from Maryland

      Sweet sister Ruby, I love how you are 'always exploring' different forms of writing - its always so provocative and genuine. This one caught me deeply in my heart. I know all too well about those evenings alone without the t.v. in the apartment when you can hear everything. I love how you throw in the invitation in one word, and leave so much to the imagination. Voted up and awesome. Love ya!

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      epigramman 4 years ago

      ...sad ....because it reminds me of my life - but happy ..... because I am here with one of my best gals and I brought Mr. Jones of George along to sing you a song on this Saturday night - always love your writing Ruby but then again I love you too Ruby - lake erie time ontario canada 11:12pm sending you warm wishes and good energy

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Erin, I am always so happy when you visit my page. You leave such beautiful comments. I too know the feeling of loneliness when everyone around is having a good time and you feel left out. I am thrilled that you connected, you always do my sweet Sister. I love you too my friend..

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Epi, Please don't be sad. you have the heart of a poet and i love everything you pen. I do get a little upset when George visits you more than me. I guess your lake is so peaceful, And i'm sure he's hoping i'll show up. Like i always say, " My bags are packed, I'm on my way. I really don't know which one i'd like to see the most, you both are great and i love you both.. Cheers my friend..

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      Martie Coetser 4 years ago from South Africa

      Perfect!

      Unbelievable how alone we can be while we are surrounded by people.

      Voted up and really impressive.

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Martie, I was really feeling the loneliness when i wrote this. I am glad you could see. Thank you for an impressive comment..Cheers my frend

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      Pastor Dr. Carlotta Boles 4 years ago from BREAKOUT MINISTRIES, INC. KC

      I agree lots of feeling in a few words. And then you had to go there with Marvin Gaye, lol, lol, that's what's up! VOTED-UP! I pray things are going well and when you have a chance, come visit me. God Bless you!

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello drpastorcarlotta, I knew you couldn't resist...Marvin Gaye..Yea.. Good to see you my friend..God Bless You..

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      50 Caliber 4 years ago from Arizona

      Aye Ms. Ruby, truly always exploring, a new form of poetry that I'll completely unfamiliar with. Heck is don't need no fancy name as is always good coming from your pen to my page. I had to vote this one up and awesome. Thanks for the great entertainment.

      Peace and blessings,

      dust

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Dust, This kind of poetry is new to me too. It's done by counting syllables..First line two-second line four-third line six- fourth line eight- fifth line ten-sixth line eight-seventh line six-eighth line four-ninth line two---first and last line, same word--No rhyming.. A lot of counting syllables. I'm happy you liked it. Thank you..

      Peace and blessings

      Ruby.

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      Mohan Kumar 4 years ago from UK

      The poem and the video go so well together. You've captured that mood and moment really well here, Ruby, my talented friend.

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      raciniwa 4 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

      oh, i hope you're not feeling lonely out there Ruby...we are here for you...

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      50 Caliber 4 years ago from Arizona

      Ruby, that is definitely a mind twister, I copy and paste the section that you described it in. I'll have to get out my pencil and paper and play with that little bit, heck I might accidentally be able to do something the right way.

      You definitely did, I hope you enjoy your day.

      Blessings,

      dust

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Docmo, Thank you for encouragement. Happy you enjoyed. I love doing Rictameter poetry. Cheers my friend..

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello riciniwa, I have been feeling a bit lonely since my sister Virgie passed away, but i'm feeling better. Thank you Dear one for being here for me. Cheers my friend...

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Dusty, I know it sounds complicated, but once you do it, you will love it..Really it grows on you. I catch myself counting syllables when i'm not writing Rictameter. I'll be waiting to see yours. Thank's for a return visit.

      Blessings and hugs..

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      Lisa Williams 4 years ago

      This poem was amazing. I can't even imagine how hard it must of been, to provoke emotion and paint a picture with words ,in such a disciplined manner. You did great , I voted up and beautiful!

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Lisa, Good to see you again. I love doing this genre in poetry. Really it's not that difficult. I'm so glad you liked it. Thank you for an amazing comment...Cheers

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      IntegrityYes 4 years ago

      You know that you are magnificent. Enjoy your night.

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      IntegrityYes, Your comment is delightful. Thank you so much. Take care..Cheers

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      LaThing 4 years ago from From a World Within, USA

      You painted a beautiful picture of loneliness!! Wonderfully written....

      Awesome!

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello La Thing, I am thrilled with your comment. Thank you..Cheers

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