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Should I Go Away

Updated on July 29, 2015

Should I go away
few would notice; fewer would understand
how long I kept the demons at bay.

Endless hours make up the day
how I wonder with helpless hands
should I go away.

With all my heart I want to stay
be a groupie for my favorite band
then out of the blue my mind will sway

back to that never, never land.
To my knees I do pray
should I go away.

Others will disagree with what I say
for them it’s nothing short of quicksand
because we’ve been trained to obey

the letter of the land.
Still I wonder when my mind’s gone astray
should I go away
few would notice; fewer would understand

© 2013 ocfireflies

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      ocfireflies 4 years ago from North Carolina

      sallybea,

      Greetings! Thank you for your kind comments. They are very much appreciated.

      Best Always,

      Kim

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      Sally Gulbrandsen 4 years ago from Norfolk

      Beautiful effortless piece of writing - it just flows and now that I have discovered it - definitely sorely missed! Best wishes.

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      ocfireflies 4 years ago from North Carolina

      Micky Dee,

      I feel that one continues to live as long as s/he is remembered.

      Thank You for your beautiful response.

      Best Always,

      Kim

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      Micky Dee 4 years ago

      When I go,

      Will I be missed?

      Will a tear be shed?

      Will my brow be kissed?

      Shall I die alone,

      As I've lived on this Earth?

      How will time value my worth?

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      ocfireflies 4 years ago from North Carolina

      Oh Max, you can tell

      Appa lah chian lady

      not

      Suh thern belle

      barefoot

      overalls

      bandana

      shirt made of plaid

      writing words

      playing catch up

      with poet

      wearing nice suit

      and heart of a lad

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      Max Havlick 4 years ago from Villa Park, Illinois

      My pleasure, simply put,

      North Carolina Kim (barefoot?).

      Through happy, mutu-al input

      we pace ourselves on steady foot,

      discretely far enough away,

      conveniently not underfoot,

      a formula for us to stay,

      perchance, together all the way.

      Max

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      ocfireflies 4 years ago from North Carolina

      My Dearest Max,

      How much I enjoy your poetic responses.

      You always give me more to turn and bend.

      Thanks for noticing I tried another form.

      Thanks for being you and most of all for being a friend.

      Kim

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      Max Havlick 4 years ago from Villa Park, Illinois

      I notice that the form inspires the poet's content here,

      and see the content cries aloud with this new format near.

      When reasons do arise to leave one's long-term friends,

      it is impossible to know how such a story ends.

      You trust what your experience tells you is true,

      and never let another person badger you.

      The road of life is long enough no matter what you do,

      but it gets worse when you do not insist it honor you.

      Max Havlick

      Villa Park, Illinois 60181-1938

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      ocfireflies 4 years ago from North Carolina

      tobusiness and Mhatter99,

      Thank you for comments and support.

      Yes, it is a hard form.

      Much Appreciated,

      Kim

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      Martin Kloess 4 years ago from San Francisco

      Hard form isn't it. Well done.

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      Jo Alexis-Hagues 4 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K

      Kim, beautifully done!....you've managed to capture the villanelle perfectly, the rhymes and refrains flow effortlessly. Voting up and sharing.

      Well actually....I can't share at the moment, no button on ipad, but I'll be back later. :)

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      ocfireflies 4 years ago from North Carolina

      Theater girl,

      Thanks for stopping by and giving me feedback.

      Kim

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      Thank you for sharing this. I can relate to the "demons" most definitely. You captured the feeling well.