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Man Meets Former Lover to Find Both Unmarried Ten Years After Affair

Updated on June 13, 2017
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2 stars for Late by Ten Years

Genre: Contemporary, Romance

Word Count: 2,510

Average Smashwords Rating: 5 stars

Ten years after Avantika turned down his marriage proposal, Vikash found her again. Neither of them had married and it wasn't long before things picked up where they had left off. But unfortunately, tragedy will keep them apart anyway.

Short Length, Dense Content

This is not the first of Borah's stories I've reviewed, and it is definitely not the best. It's poorly formatted and awkwardly written. The paragraphs were dense and the sentences were long and hard to get through.The tone was usually formal but with casual phrases like "pep talk" and "keep mum" sprinkled in, creating disjointed sentences that read like a first draft.

While Borah's writing style has improved over time, it's still difficult to understand. He would be much better off writing only a few stories and editing them more thoroughly than the hundreds of stories he's written.

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Pancake Characters Makes for Indifferent Reading

There is not a single developed character in this story. Granted, it is hard to develop complex characters in a story such as think but these characters as flat as a pancake. They're practically the written version of stock photo people.

The narrator is in the story while being absolutely unnecessary. All he does is sit and listen as Vikhash tells his story. I don't even know why he's there in the first place.

Vikhash and Avantika are not much better. Vikhash is a heartbroken man on the eve of his wedding, pining after Avantika despite her rejection ten years ago.

Avantika is a single woman, now without family and now indifferent to society norms.

Maybe it was the length of the story or the dense writing style, but I couldn't care about the characters at all. I felt completely indifferent to them when tragedy struck and when they were telling their stories. So even though nothing was wrong with the plot as far as I could tell, I wasn't impressed with this story when I was finished and it was incredibly forgettable.

You can find Late by Ten Years on Smashwords.

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    • Kara Skinner profile image
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      Kara Skinner 3 months ago from Maine

      Larry, perhaps you could provide examples where the main characters are better off flat? For many side characters, I can definitely see that. But not for main characters.

    • Larry Rankin profile image

      Larry Rankin 3 months ago from Oklahoma

      The type of characters you use are contingent on the desired effect. I find that in certain situations flat characters are essential.

      The problem with inexperienced writers is that they employ flat characters when they need a complex one.

      Great read.