Can't Pin These Wings
The songs that inspired the poem:
I once had a bird
But she flew away
I thought I'd clipped her wings
I thought that she would stay
Her cage was safe and warm
But never had much seed
And when I opened it's doors
She flew away from me
She never did come back
But I saw her in the trees
She looked so safe and warm
So happy to be free
And if she ever comes
And flies back towards her cage
I'd quickly shut the door
And shoo that bird away
'Cause birds were made for flight
Not meant to be locked up
And it's not up to me
To take away her cup
all rights reserved. copyright Justin W. Price 2009
I don't typically write rhyming poetry. But, the rhythm of this poem was inspired by two songs (above), requiring a rhyming, ABAB scheme. The lyrics were inspired by a failed relationship where I had to let the person go in order to be kind, because this person did not like being trapped in a monogamous relationship. The poem was written several years after the dissolution of that relationship and I would like to think it has a kindness to it, rather than some of the angrier poems I wrote in the immediate aftermath. Thank you for reading!
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AUTHORHi Audrey. Thanks for stopping by. All is well here in Juneau. How are things with you?
Saw this on my feed and thought I would say hi! Hope you are doing well!
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Thanks newusedcar
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thanks for stopping by dghbrh!
Beautiful poem I must say...voted up!
Justin....its a beautiful poem...thanks for sharing. Very simple way you portrayed a strong massage here. Well job done...all votes upward and shares.
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Thanks Cyndi. I believe so, yes.
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Thanks Till... it's whatever you want it to be :-) Whatever speaks to your spirit
Neat poem. What we all want, right? Freedom. Well done.
This poem is beautiful and so open to interpretation; literal or figurative? What of the bird? Really thought provoking.
Voted up, awesome and interesting.
Like bravewarrior, I thought as each sentence unfolded that you might be expressing something different than the words imply; something about a woman. It reminded me of the 1970's saying, 'If you love something, set it free. If it comes back to you, it is yours. If it doesn't, it never was.'
Great work. I have not shared my poetry, but if I ever do, I will be like you and not divulge my inner meanings. It is in the act of writing the poetry that we heal, breathe and grow.
Voting up and awesome.
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thanks so much, Ziyena!
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Beautiful :)
Voting UP
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Thanks a lot alur. Will do!
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Thanks a lot ana
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Thanks Victoria!
Simple, yet elegant. I like it and voted up. I often write of romance but take a more fatalic approach...tis a reflection of my life I suppose.
You're welcome to visit my versatile hubs as well:)
Touching and beautiful! Voted up.
Nice message about setting things we love free...if that's the way it needs to be. Beautiful.
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saddlerider, that was not my intention when I wrote this poem, but I'm so happy that you interpreted it that way. I love how poetry can be translated in so many ways!
Audrey, I'm glad this made your heart sing! That pleases me
Beautiful job Justin--made my heart sing!
I agree nothing should be locked up in a cage. We humans seem to require to be on the other side of the bars, but who's looking at who? Ah the planet of the Apes. Well expressed my friend, I am happy that you set the bird free in your mind. Imagery is a strength who have honed well in your work, Bravo. Up and Awesome...
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Raak, I appreciate your interpretation and your comment. Thanks so much!
Chris, thank you for your read and comment as well!
Very lovely and sweet sentiment.
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A nice poem that reveals that bird and the nest are compared to the 'Soul' and our identity respectively. when our identity has been dissolved (here-cage opened),our soul reaches and mingles with the 'Almighty'. Once, having merged with one, it would never return back. Thanks for sharing. Voted as beautiful!.
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bravewarrior, I generally don't reveal the meaning of my poms because I want my readers to enjoy the experience without my influence, but, you are not off base at all :-)
Thanks for reading and commenting!
My interpretation of this poem is of love lost and what caused it to fly away. I love the fact that you realize people and love cannot be confined to perameters. If peramaters are needed to keep that "bird" in your life, that "bird" has not found the nurturing environment, nor have you found your companion. Birds mate for life.
Very well presented. I like that you invoke thought from the reader, with ease, in order for us to understand what you're really saying.
Or am I totally offbase????
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@ Miss Olive- Thanks
@ Sonia- Can you PM me a link? I'll post it to my HUB!
@ Crescent Moon- Free them!
@ Jackie- Thanks. I've posted the videos to the two songs that influenced the feel of this poem
Very beautiful with a lot of meaning! I like it.
Wonderful poem. It makes me want to release my birds, though I don't think they would survive in the wild.
My hub is "snatched dreams" and it is about a bird who is happy and free but ultimately ends up in captivity.
Very nice - great images and symbolism
Thank you for sharing
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Sure. What's the name? Thanks for stopping by!
very nice poem with a lovely message! I,too,wrote something similar to this,feel free to check it out.
thanks for sharing! voted up!
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