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The Coffee Shop Spirit

Updated on September 5, 2015

CamsCoffee shop and cane flash fiction challenge

This is my response to Cams (Chris Mills, flash fiction challenge requiring a coffee shop and a cane


They let Samuel Jones bring his dog, a pure white German Shepherd, into the coffee shop. The dog was a newly acquired guide dog, which had a legal right to go where his master went. The dog's owner directed him to to a table.and then took out a folding, white cane which he used to guide himself to the serving bar of the shop.

“Glad to see you getting around,” the blonde, young woman said.

“You can just call me Sam,” he said.

“Sure Sam. I am glad to see you getting around. And please call me, Kim.”

It's a nice name. Short for Kimberly?”

“Yes, it is. Sam. Anyhow, you seem to get around OK.”

“I've learned to use the cane and the guide dog is patient.

White German Shepherd


White Cane


Haunted Shop

“Kim, is it true what the papers say—that you shop is haunted.”

“We don't know that for sure, Sam. There have been some unusual things going on, mostly since your accident. Like sometimes I'll feel a chill like a door was left open, but there is nothing out of place.”

The reports of the shop being haunted is what brought Sam back, well maybe not the only thing. He wanted to see Kim and thank her for giving aid to an injured man. Or maybe he just wanted to see Kim because she was kind and beautiful. He could see that much, anyhow.

He had been driving a restored vintage Ford Mustang by the Coffee shop When a large SUV went out of control, hit the Mustang just ahead of the driver's front door. He heard that the SUV driver had a heart attack and had died in the impact. His Mustang was pushed into the display window of the Coffee Shop.

The doctors were not able to tell Sam if the blindness was permanent or not but he was sent for training to use a cane and then qualified for a guide dog. The blindness might have been from injuries in the accident, or the trauma of the accident. Kim, the owner and primary server at the shop was quick to help him until an ambulance and the paramedics arrived.

“I came over to see you, Kim, as soon as I could get around on my own. I am really grateful for the help you gave me and sorry for all the damage the accident caused.”

Sam could not see that Kim was blushing. She tried not to be emotional and told him that his insurance more than compensated for the damages to the shop. She was touched that he seemed more concerned about the inconvenience to her than to his being blind and the things he might have to give up, like driving a Mustang.

Kim, I am grateful to be alive and able to do things, like talking to a beautiful woman like you. “

Kim was glad that he could not see her blush. “I appreciate the compliment, Sam, but how do you know if I am beautiful or not. You're blind.” She immediately regretted the reference to his blindness.

“When you were tending my injuries I could still see your beautiful face. I can still see enough to know you are very attractive. Anyhow, Kim thank you for helping me when I'm sure you had worries of your own. I 'm grateful to be alive and that you were here and helped. me.”

It was true that Sam still had some vision. Total blindness is less common than most people think. Still it is an impairment compared to normal persons' vision. Sam sat down and soon was aware of a young blond woman coming his way. “Did you bring the coffee, Kim?”

“I'm not Kim,” she said and sat down beside him.

“Who are you?'

“My name is Sharon.”

“Nice to meet you, Sharon.”

“I like your dog. May I pet him/”

“I'll let him know it's OK.”

While Sharon hunkered down down by the dog, Kim cam over with two cups of Espresso.”

“Kim, do you want to meet Sharon?”

“Who's Sharon?”

“I think she might be your ghost. She is over here, petting my guide dog.”

“I don't see anyone Sam. Who is she?”

“It's only a guess but I think she was in the truck that hit me.”

Coffee shops


“Should I get more coffee?”

“Sharon,” Sam said “would you like to have coffee with Kim and me?”

Sharon nodded and sat next to Sam. Kim set the cups by Sharon and Sam. “I'll get another cup,” Kim said.

“Can Kim see me, Sam? I think you can.”

“We'll find out when she gets back. Did you die in the crash Sharon?”

“I guess I must have. I was thrown against the dashboard and the door flew open, My seat belt got undone and I half-fell and sort of stumbled from the cab.”

Kim came back with another coffee. “Is this your friend Sharon, Sam?” Kim smiled at Sharon.

“Can you see her, Kim?” Sam asked.

“Yes, in a rather hazy way.”

“I think I'm ready to leave now,” Sharon said. “Thanks for letting me talk to your dog. And Sam, will you feel my face with your fingers. I would like you to remember me apart from getting hurt in an accident. Will you remember me in a good way.”

Sam put his cane on the table, gave Sharon a light hug and with his fingers he memorized her facial features. “Farewell Sharon, rest in peace.”

Sharon smiled at Kim and said, “I think he loves you.”I'm ready to go now. Have a joyful life.”

When Sharon had left, Sam said “Kim, will you go out to dinner with me?”

“I'd like that. When?”

“How about when you close shop for the day?”

“I like that too. Do you think Sharon was here to help us get together?”

“I like that idea, we'll be back,” Sam said, slipped his cane into its holder and called his Dog.


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      Don A. Hoglund 2 years ago from Wisconsin Rapids

      Hi RJ. Thanks for reading and commenting. These writing challenges are interesting. I never know what I might come up with.

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      Reynold Jay 2 years ago from Saginaw, Michigan

      Hi Don,, Getting back with a few of my old HUB friends now. Nice story with great ending. well done.

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      Don A. Hoglund 2 years ago from Wisconsin Rapids

      ps, thanks for reading the story and glad you liked it.

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      Patricia Scott 2 years ago from sunny Florida

      An interesting twist you put on this story.

      So happy to read a story that has a happy ending!!!

      Angels are on the way to you this evening ps

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      Don A. Hoglund 2 years ago from Wisconsin Rapids

      Brian, thanks you for reading and commenting on the story. I do like these challenges by other writers as it triggers my imagination.

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      B Brian Hill 2 years ago

      Great combination of mystery and love in this well-crafted story. Looking forward to reading more!

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      Don A. Hoglund 2 years ago from Wisconsin Rapids

      Ms Dora,

      The plot twist you suggest would be interesting. The truth of the matter is that the story was just to fit the requirement of a coffee shop and a cane. You

      I have more imagination than I do, I believe.

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      Don A. Hoglund 2 years ago from Wisconsin Rapids

      Genna, thank you for the comment. I'm glad you enjoyed the story.

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      Don A. Hoglund 2 years ago from Wisconsin Rapids

      Stella, thanks for reading my story. Glad you liked it.

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      Don A. Hoglund 2 years ago from Wisconsin Rapids

      I did write flash fiction on hubpages some time ago but I abandoned it hen they wanted more content.

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      Dora Weithers 2 years ago from The Caribbean

      What a beautiful touching storyline! Could it be that Sam invented Sharon to give him the courage to ask out Kim? No matter, you did a great job, Don.

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      Genna East 2 years ago from Massachusetts, USA

      This is so well written, and with just the right elements that we don't expect, but are surprised and fascinated with, which keeps us reading with interest. Nicely done. :-)

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      stella vadakin 2 years ago from 3460NW 50 St Bell, Fl32619

      Don, your story was just the way I like them. I like how everything necessary fit in your story. It kept me interested all the way. Thanks

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      John Hansen 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Interesting and enjoyable story Don..and they all lived happily ever after, except for Sharon who at least found peace after getting Kim and Sam together. Good response to the challenge.

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      Don A. Hoglund 2 years ago from Wisconsin Rapids

      Thanks Ruby, you comment is appreciated. These writing challenges are a good way to exercise some creativity, thus everyone sees it a bit differntly.

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      Don A. Hoglund 2 years ago from Wisconsin Rapids

      Thank you for commenting ,dr. I try not to speculate on what characters might do as they seldom do what I think is best. Howver I can hope that things turn out as you suggest.

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      Ruby Jean Richert 2 years ago from Southern Illinois

      I loved your story. Romantic with an unexpected twist. You are a good writer! Thank you...

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      drbj and sherry 2 years ago from south Florida

      Your version of the challenge kept me interested all the way, Don. I have a feeling that Sam will regain his sight, Kim will begin to like him more and more, Sharon will find a male member of the spirit kingdom ... and the handsome shepherd dog will also find a 'friend.'

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      Don A. Hoglund 2 years ago from Wisconsin Rapids

      Thanks Bill. A ghost story once in awhile can be fun to write. You opinion is valued.

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      WillStarr 2 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Whoa! You tied it all together neatly and then wrapped it up! Great story, Don!

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      Don A. Hoglund 2 years ago from Wisconsin Rapids

      Chris, this was a bit of a challenge and I discarded two stories that I started to write using former characters. I'm glad you like the way it worked out. I do find it challenging to make a ghost believable. I'm glad you like it and thanks for the first comment.

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      Chris Mills 2 years ago from Missoula, Montana at least until August 2018

      Don, a ghost story, a love story and a drama all rolled into one neat, 1,000 word (or fewer) flash fiction story. In such a short story it is difficult to build characters, but you've given your readers enough information so that they can fill in the rest, and that is just how it should be done. In spite of the ghost, this story came alive as I read it. Your style builds characters with personality and warmth. Thank you, Don, for adding another fantastic story to this collection. It truly is an honor to have you participate.