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The Cry of the Loon

Updated on April 2, 2013
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Audrey is a poet, classical singer and voice teacher, recovering attorney and licensed psychotherapist.

Zhu Ta  1650-1705
Zhu Ta 1650-1705 | Source

lonely Loon

cries

above the desolate shore

for its own sake

alone

it knows

its voice


the surf,

an echo.


copyright/all rights reserved Audrey Howitt 2013


One of my shorter pieces, inspired by the Japanese forms. Not exactly Tanka, but perhaps, reminiscent of the form.

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      drbj and sherry 4 years ago from south Florida

      You made me think, Audrey, with this clever short piece, that perhaps the loon is delivering a very important message. We are just too dense to understand it!

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      What a wonderful little piece Audrey...

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      whonunuwho 4 years ago from United States

      Haunting and well done my friend. whonu

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      Jim Higgins 4 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

      Beautiful, Audrey! The cry of the loon is so evocative for humans as is your poem about it.

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      Susan Zutautas 4 years ago from Ontario, Canada

      Lovely!

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      KrisL 4 years ago from S. Florida

      Thanks for this! I like how "alone" can be read with the line before or the line after with slightly different meanings, and also how the last two lines brings in another sound.

      Shared . . .

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      Clark Cook 4 years ago from Rural BC (Canada) & N of Puerto Vallarta (Mexico)

      Admirable--tho a wee bit off ree: the cry itself. We live on q 4-mile-long lake in a semi-remote area of BC. Fi've mating pairs of loons "divide" the lake into five sections of absolute fishing rights. The crys are WARNINGS to neighbouring loons, esp. the males. The cries vary in tone and complexity on this graduated scale:

      1. Hey Buddy -- just lettin' ya know I'm here.

      2. Ahh! little stronger reminder here, Friend!

      3. Hey! Now you're pissin' me off!

      4. Okay, Jerkface--here we go!

      5. WAR!!!

      Stage 5 is always accompanied by wild splashing and physical contact. Rare and brief. During the mating season ND WHILE THE CHICKS ARE VERY SMALL, THIS CACOPHONY GOES ON 24-7.

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      Jo Alexis-Hagues 4 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K

      Wow...and I thought they were just loud clumsy looking birds...a beautiful poem cleverly done.

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      Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California)

      Audrey,

      Your poem is wonderful! As I was reading it, the thought came into my mind "This sounds Japanese," and then I read your comment.

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      Suzanne Ridgeway 4 years ago from Dublin, Ireland

      Hi Audrey,

      Lovely wee piece and very clever. Good job!

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      Thomas Silvia 4 years ago from Massachusetts

      So beautiful which made it a pleasure to read !

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      WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      One of your best, Audrey!

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      Suzette Walker 4 years ago from Taos, NM

      Beautiful poem! And I love the illustration that goes with it. Just a sublime piece of work.

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      Jamie Lee Hamann 4 years ago from Reno NV

      Well done Audrey. Jamie

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      wetnosedogs 4 years ago from Alabama

      Fantastic.

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      LKMore01 4 years ago

      Beautiful, Audrey. Direct and complex.

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Beautiful!!

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      Voted up and beautiful. This was just lovely. I love the cries of loons. Passing this on.

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      Martin Kloess 4 years ago from San Francisco

      Nice reflection. A world of possibilities. Thank you

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      Nellieanna Hay 4 years ago from TEXAS

      How fascinating. The loon is aware of its voice, yet the entire surf echoes it. The space between almost suggests that, perhaps, it realizes the larger effect of its cries expressing its own message. This is profound.

      Thought-provoking and so beautifully written, Audrey.

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you so much drbj!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you Frank! Hope all is well in your world!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you so much whonu!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you xstatic!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you Susan. I hope you are well--

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you so much KrisL!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you moonfroth! I think I will try to avoid state 5!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you so much tobusiness!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you for reading this one Daisy!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Hi Suzie HQ! Thank you! Thank you!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Hi Tom!! Thank you so much!!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Hello WillStarr! Thank you!!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you Suzette!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you Jamie!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Hello wetnosedogs!! Thank you!--Just about time to take my wetnose out for a walk!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you so much for reading this one LKMore01

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you Ruby!! So glad you enjoyed this piece!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you so much Gypsy Rose Lee--and thank you so much for sharing!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you Martin! Hope all is well with you!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Hi Nellieanna! Thank you--as always you look beneath the surface of the words and find things underneath! Thank you for your thoughtful comments!

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      Peggy Woods 4 years ago from Houston, Texas

      I used to have a friend who originally came from Canada and she used to replicate the sound of loons. She loved them obviously. Your poem reminded me of her. Thanks! They do have a distinctive sound.

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      Lurana Brown 4 years ago from Chicagoland, Illinois

      Haunting, with clarity and resonance.

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you Peggy W!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you for reading this one MrsBrownsParlour--and for your kind words!

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      Kathi 4 years ago from Saugatuck Michigan

      Oh, I can hear the echo of the loon! Loved it

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you Fossillady!!

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      TurtleDog 4 years ago

      Well done. I love the power of sparse verse (shame I'm too windy to wield it myself :-)

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Thank you TurtleDog!!

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      AAW9 3 years ago

      Short & sweet Audrey; thought engaging piece. Nice work.

      Anthony

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      Audrey Howitt 3 years ago from California

      Thank you Anthony!

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      Shyron E Shenko 3 years ago from Texas

      Excellent how like the loon, it can be seen in your poem.

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      Audrey Howitt 3 years ago from California

      Thank you so much Shyron!

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