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Death Poetry: The Goodbye On the Mirror

Updated on June 18, 2013


As she wrote

“Goodbye”

On the bathroom mirror,

The memories,

Of every kick,

And every punch,

That caused the

Battered reflection

She saw.

Made her hand stop

In mid stride.


The spots of blood

On the white porcelain sink,

Reminded her

Of every sacrifice

She made

“To make it work”

And she wanted

To hit that reflection herself

For being so weak.


Here she was,

Writing “Goodbye”

Because she couldn’t bear the thought,

Of causing this man

Undue pain,

But was he ever once

So thoughtful

As he bruised his knuckles

Stealing the smile

That once lit up

A beautiful face


Why did she care?

Why did she love him?

Why was she still?

In the bathroom

When he could

Come back home

Any second

To say his apologies

And wheel her back in.


She stopped writing

“Goodbye”

Opened the medicine cabinet

Pulled out the little white pills

That helped relieve

Her pain

She emptied the whole jar

Into her mouth.

And decided to

Lay on the bed

And take a little nap


No “Goodbyes”

No regrets

No more pain

Just a peaceful sleep

Ending her misery

Once and for all.



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      Midnight Lights 5 years ago from USA

      Very moving. Never was I beat, but emotional abuse can also be devastating. Keep up the great work. Hopefully someone in this situation will see this scenario and decide against it.

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      Jose Velasquez 5 years ago from Lodi, New Jersey

      Thank you writer 20

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      Joyce Haragsim 5 years ago from Southern Nevada

      You are a great poet, this one is so sad.

      Voted up and interesting.

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      Jose Velasquez 5 years ago from Lodi, New Jersey

      I agree

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      Karen Silverman 5 years ago

      Grrrrrr!!!! Powerful stuff here, J! Super job getting the point across! Abusers..bullies..are the lowest, saddest example of mankind..and can also be the most charming..

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      Jose Velasquez 5 years ago from Lodi, New Jersey

      Thank you, I went for the shock factor to hopefully wake someone up, who is in this situation.

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      Ann-Christin 5 years ago from UK

      Excellent poem but so sad and unfortunately true for many.

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      Jose Velasquez 5 years ago from Lodi, New Jersey

      Thank you.

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      M K Paul 5 years ago from India

      Very good message ....good poetry :)

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      Jose Velasquez 5 years ago from Lodi, New Jersey

      Yes. It drives home the overall message,

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      Jose Velasquez 5 years ago from Lodi, New Jersey

      Yes it will. Its just some women in that situation fail to see that.

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      Jose Velasquez 5 years ago from Lodi, New Jersey

      Anytime, check out my poetry challenges and see if one inspires you.

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      DragonflyTreasure 5 years ago from on the breeze.........

      Philly, I think you made the right choice on the ending. Very climatic.

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      Hubert Williams 5 years ago

      Love can make you weak or love can make you strong.

      To inflict pain and call it love will forever be wrong.

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      John Crowley 5 years ago from Sheffield

      Well make sure you keep me in the loop. Always interested in a nice fat collaboration.

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      Jose Velasquez 5 years ago from Lodi, New Jersey

      Dragonfly, I contemplated writing the poem with the lady just leaving, but I figure it would have more impact with the tragic ending.

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      Jose Velasquez 5 years ago from Lodi, New Jersey

      Lizam1, thank you for the idea, I'll see what I can find.

      Writeyourwrongs- go ahead and stalk away, I'm slowly but surely discovering all the poets on HubPages. I would love to bring this group of people together.

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      DragonflyTreasure 5 years ago from on the breeze.........

      WOW We really on the same page today. I have felt that pain and desperateness. ...for 37 yrs. Why did I stay so long? who knows, maybe so my children wouldn't have any alone time during visitations. They are adults now and we ALL are trying to "make the pieces fit". I am glad I was able to hang on unlike your lady in the poem....but for what costs. We are going through the long process of trying to heal.

      Excellent poem, voted up

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      John Crowley 5 years ago from Sheffield

      Excellent poetry. I think I'll become a fan. Not much of a stalker usually, but I'll make an exception.

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      Lizam1 5 years ago from Victoria BC

      For so many women all around the world - I hope they see an alternative. Can I suggest you include a list of links to services for abused women. Well written and painful to read.

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      Jose Velasquez 5 years ago from Lodi, New Jersey

      If anything I hope this poem will serve as a what not to do example.

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      Audrey Howitt 5 years ago from California

      What a sad place to be---well portrayed in your verse--but such a desperate set of circumstances.