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Crowd Noise

Updated on December 29, 2012
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Justin W. Price, AKA PDXKaraokeGuy, is a freelance writer, blogger, and award-nominated author based out of Juneau, Alaska.

Here's a short little poem I wrote today. It's best read out loud. Pay very close attention to the line breaks and punctuation, or you may lose something in the translation.






Crowd Noise



faceless

shapeless blobs


wordless

droning mobs


nameless

gathered globs


blahbuzz

blah bluh blahs






all rights reserved. copyright Justin W. Price Jan 31, 2012.

Thanks for Reading.

PDXKaraokeGuy, also known as Justin W. Price, is an author with Sweatshoppe Publications, which will soon re-release his poetry collection, Digging to China. Additionally, the managing editor at eFiction horror and The New Bridge online newspaper.. Husband to Andrea, father to two dogs. writer.poet.baseball fan. tattooed. He is am amateur theologian with a rabid sweet tooth. He resides in a suburb of Portland, Oregon.He has a poetry book available for Amazon Kindle, and also maintains a blog, FirstBlog. His work has been featured in the Crisis Chronicles, efiction Magazine, The Hellroaring Review, the Bellwether Review, eFiction Humor, and the Rusty Nail. Please visit his profile page for more information. Thanks!


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      Justin W Price 4 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Thanks a lot Till. I appreciate it. This one is fun to read out loud :-)

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      Mary Craig 4 years ago from New York

      "Droning mobs" and "gathered globs"! It was fun to read as well. This one's worth making everybody lose their way .... verbally of course!

      Voted up, awesome, and shared.

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Thanks, Vellur. I certainly had fun with this piece!

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      Nithya Venkat 5 years ago from Dubai

      Verbally tongue twisting!!!

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Thanks Aurelio.. most poems have layers... no reason this one can't :-) I like your interpretation

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      That's ardie. That's funny. I'm glad you can follow instructions!

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      alocsin 5 years ago from Orange County, CA

      "Shapeless blobs" is a particularly apt description of the typical American due to lack of diet and exercise. I know, your beautiful poem wasn't about that, but that's the first thing that popped into my head. Voting this Up and Beautiful.

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      Sondra 5 years ago from Neverland

      Thats a cute little poem! I read it out loud and giggled at the end because I got all tongue-tied :) So then it really did sound like crowd noise. Blihuahdkbuhblub

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      b. malin, thanks so much and yes it is :-)

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      racini, thanks so much. The older I get, the less interested I am in crowds

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      thanks drtruthman. I'm glad this makes sense to you now :-)

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      ruby, i agree. people lose individuality in a crowd

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      b. Malin 5 years ago

      But isn''t that Life, KaraokeGuy, "BLAH, BLAH, with a few more words mixed in? Especially in a Crowded room. Interesting Concept my friend, Interesting...

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      raciniwa 5 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

      i share your misgiving about going in public places, it's really difficult to be heard...too short yet impressive...

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      Drtruthman 5 years ago from Harlingen, Texas

      You are so right as more people have commented I read, it does make more sense. Thanks for the come back. Good job.

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 5 years ago from Southern Illinois

      I have been there and done that, voices all around, not understanding a word spoken, all sounding like Blah, Blah, Blah. Hum Drum, Ho Hum...

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Drtruthman, maybe read some of the comments it'll help clear it up :-) Thanks for reading and commenting!

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Yes, frank. Sometimes I think I'm agoraphobic!

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Gypsy, thanks for reading and comment. I like your interpretation

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      rosemay, you hit the nail on the head. Thanks for commenting!

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      Drtruthman 5 years ago from Harlingen, Texas

      Funny and interesting but with the others, I don't really get it.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton

      effective... blah blah bluh blah and just like a loud crowd you can't even hear yourself think PDX

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 5 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      At least made me think of those times when a crowd of people become as if one giant face from which utter different sounds but you can't pinpoint where they or who they come from.

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      Rosemary Sadler 5 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

      Yeah I get it. Such noisy crowds but you could not pick a word out that they are saying or be able to descibe one person in the mob

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Kelly, that's actually a pretty brilliant statement :-)

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      Vincent Moore 5 years ago

      It reminded me of a poem I wrote back a few months ago. "Rippled Faces" Faces always have plenty of words to describe them, well done my poetic friend.

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      Kelly Umphenour 5 years ago from St. Louis, MO

      Oh PDX - I was thinking of a collage of photographs - and how loud the silence can be - yeah I am weird:) lol

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      linda and tara, i changed the name. I want my readers to think, but not be utterly confused :-)

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      tarajeyaram 5 years ago from Wonderland

      Very creative. I only got it after reading the comments. Voted up.

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      Linda Bilyeu 5 years ago from Orlando, FL

      I got it now!! Woot!! Come on Audrey you can do it!:)

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      Justin W Price 5 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      Linda and Audrey, I was trying capture that sound and the sights when you see a crowd. You don't words and you don't see bodies or faces. I've made some revisions. Hopefully its clearer now :-)

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      Linda Bilyeu 5 years ago from Orlando, FL

      You lost me at caca!! lol

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      Audrey Howitt 5 years ago from California

      I didn't get it! I am so sad!