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The Second Man

Updated on June 25, 2013

The second men who came to trim my lawn
did a neat job
all grass looked equal
like a comb teeth
then took me inside
to teach me a real respect
after standing over him a long time
do this,do that


He was obedient,
Nice
Good arguer
and importantly very generous :
He left me with
sheets full of grass clippings
and
two hundred bucks
-that I paid him in advance -
under my pillow.

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      Anna Haven 4 years ago from Scotland

      Humourous work and conveyed believably from a different gender than your own. Voted up.

      Anna

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      epigramman 4 years ago

      Sir James - you can be my 'woman' anytime , lol lol lol lol lol lol

      I love when you change gears, tempos, moods and themes and do something a little different - that is the hallmark of any great writer to move around, be bold and try something a little different and also to write in the voice of a woman or perhaps another man, lol, either way - just keep pushing the envelope and be yourself as a writer - 'cos I love your nerve, verve, swerve, pananche and style - just go for it Bro - like dat guy from lake erie, lol

      Sending you a high five from 2 human hands and four feline paws for this classic at lake erie time ontario canada 10:55am

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      Tijani Achamlal 4 years ago from Morocco

      Sweetest Cat in the world:)

      Thanks for the insight.I just wanted to deal with some issues from different point of view.It appears so strange but I think my explanation in that comment has ousting some ambiguities:)I gave some clues lol

      Have a wonderful week!

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      Cat 4 years ago from New York

      James,

      Wow, is this different from what I'm used to lately, though I loved it! I am glad I caught some of the comments though as I admit, I was a bit confused with the gender thing. I was thinking 'to each his own'... lol. I'd love you anyway. I actually really like the tone and subtlety to this though.

      Voted all kinds of things and sharing too!

      Hugs,

      Cat

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      Tijani Achamlal 4 years ago from Morocco

      Hey Debbie.Nice to see you here.It s been long time since we talked.Sorry I didnt open FB to check your messages.

      Many blessings to you too!

      James

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 4 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      James.. I l.love your emotion my friend.. I love how you can write under different points of views.. sometimes you throw me for a loop..lol,, I love it.. so good to see you.. many blessings to you my friend

      Debbie

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      Tijani Achamlal 4 years ago from Morocco

      Joanne,

      when writing, become the object you are writing about " great words.That was what I meant in my previous comment .

      I think my scribble is not ambiguous ,if you focus on" sheets full of grass .."you will get the point.It implies that both of them had a love affair.I think 2 hundred bucks too much for mowing the yard.She gave that amount of money so as to tempt him to come over home.As he is generous haha he gave her that money.Now let s count the benefits they get:

      Woman: grass mowed ,her se..x..ual desire accomplished ,money returned back.

      Guy: love affair.

      So who is clever hahaha

      Thanks for the insight.

      James

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      Joanne M Olivieri 4 years ago

      It is a true talent to write from another perspective and I think you did a great job on this. My high school creative writing teacher always told us, "when writing, become the object you are writing about." Personally, I've not yet been able to master it but many can. I have a dear friend who is a jazz singer and her husband writes all the original music and lyrics for her. He always writes from the perspective of a woman and his lyrics are amazing.

      I enjoyed this and hope to see more.

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      Tijani Achamlal 4 years ago from Morocco

      lol I like to expand and take roles.This is not the first time I speak from woman s perspective.Before I published photo,some hubbers thought that I am a woman hiding behind a male s name.I am very emotional.The reason behind my oddity is my mom was a victim of domestic violence and as a man ,I am against male s dominance in male female relationship.

      Besides ,creativity for me involves breaking out of established patterns in order to look at things in a different way.

      Thanks for your sincerity and constructive criticism.That s what I want from my readers.

      James

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      cleaner3 4 years ago from Pueblo, Colorado

      James .. a very strange topic to write about , but i would say you have some kind of issues with betrayal whether you experienced them from someone else or you did this to yourself. Your new voice of writing from a womans perspective doesn't fit your style .. but that is just my opinion.