The Snake and the Girl
The Beginning...
The snake seemed so beautiful
With his vibrant colors
And his empowering strength
The girl could not resist him
He had charmed her with his ways
His coils ravaged her and gave
Her the excitement that she was missing
He told her that he loved her
That he would take care of her
And never let her go
The Beginning of the End
She loved bathing in the love of the snake
Every day she would wait for him
Then the snake started changing
He started manipulating her
Making her believe she was someone she wasn't
She loved the snake so much that she wanted to believe him
Even though it was against what she believed
He started taking a piece of her everyday
Hurting her everyday
Each day that he did
He would become stronger
While he was killing her slowly
She was in this deep trance for awhile
Unaware of what was happening
The whole time becoming weaker
Dying slowly from within
The End
Then one day
She snapped out of it
A rage came over her
She was almost too weak to get up
She left the snake
But he found her again
The snake crept in
Took her away again
She tried to hide
But he knew every corner
He knew where to find her
She could not stay away
The snake could always
Sense her innocence
Of the girl when she hid
She almost became mad
From trying to run away
He would always find her
And slowly start killing her again
She decided to kill the snake
That was the only way to get away
She had to be more clever than the snake
She waited for him that day
She would cut off his head
So he couldn't hurt her anymore
But he never came back that day
He found someone else to slowly kill
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AUTHORThank you services4 all!
Its really nice post, I like it. Keep on posting.
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- AUTHOR
@ Stessily thank you so much for your constant support. You are like my hub sister. :) I always look forward to your insightful comments.
@ Hi Cathy! thanks for reading and commenting. It's a good thing you've never run into a snake. Love your new poems! :)
@ Thank you so much Eddy. You are a terrific writer yourself.
@ Tom thanks for the compliment on the pic. I thought I kinda looked mean in the other one so I changed it. :)
@ Hi Larry thank you!
@ April thank you. I am glad you liked it. :)
wonderful, well done. A good warning.
very crisp and cool...succinct and direct...bueno
C21,
the happy caroline pic you have now is the best yet-A happy caroline is a better Caroline,vampy Caroline was too intimidating...*hehe*
TH
Very powerful and cleverly written Caroline;up up and away here my friend.
I hope that now it is a matter of what doesn't kill us makes us stronger!!
You are an amazing writer and here's to along time to come of many more to share o here.
take-care
Eddy.
I love how easy the analogy of the snake fits the human equivalent. In fact it fits almost too well. LOL. But it underscores the behavior of the snake. I have never experienced a snake before but my heart goes out to any woman who experiences it. Ridding oneself of a snake sounds like it is not easy.
Cathy.
Caroline, Very powerfully presented! That "snake" might have pulled a no-show because he thought that she was pretty close to being finished off. Those human "snakes" don't always stay around for the final curtain; instead they often move on for the thrill of sinking their fangs into another unassuming victim. I think that the lady in this poem pulls herself together; sad lesson to learn but she triumphed in the end.
Excellent poem which effectively illustrates that what doesn't kill you makes you stronger.
Kind regards, Stessily
- AUTHOR
Hi Sam thank you! Glad you like it.
LOL T you better be nice to the wife! It's a good thing men age faster than women. It's a beautiful thing. :) (Just kidding) Alleged flecks of grey or bald some women think both can be hot so I wouldn't worry if I were you! And Dr. Phil think he's pretty hot himself too. lol
c21,
I better not I have a full head of hair thick and just dandy its a dark auburn with alleged flecks of grey but thats just my wife trying to make me older Ive told her I'll never catch up to her...
HA
TH/Phil
Hi there Caroline! Beautiful poem!
- AUTHOR
@ Michael read it was gorgeous. Don't worry will go through more of your stuff. :)
@ Hi Rusticliving thank you so much for the compliment!
@ Hi T well this is based on past situations but I thank you for your concerns. :) Nice analyzation about the tingling happening again. LOL Maybe you're turning into Dr. Phil.
C21,
You see I dont think that snake was a snake-snake- but a metaphor for an evil user person who was mean-manipulative and deceitful...It too bad you keep getting mixed up with these fellas that dontsee your worth and value you for you ... As such the snake is a metaphor for
a bad character who stole your heart but more importantly he gurt you and his "bite wounds " ran deep and tingle on occassion maybe when things get too serious you get the feeling all over again...
Well done nicely written...
Hopefully some day you will get a dose of "antivenom"...sometime soon...
Although maybe I am reading WAAAYYYY to much into tis...
Who do I think I am Dr Phil??
TH
Wow! Very well done and thought out. Beautiful. Voted up!
Caroline, you haven't read my LYRICAL POETRY
I have busy writing
You better catch up on a couple, Im sure you will like them
- AUTHOR
@ Hi Sky thank you for your constant support and words of encouragement. You are a great friend. I write about experiences that have happened to all of us in time. I love for people to learn from the things I share. Thanks again for taking the time out to comment and share. :)
@ SubRon yes I have. There are always lessons in life that we have to learn from. Thank you for your comments.
@ Always thank you for stopping by and commenting. I always appreciate your warm hearted comments and support.
@ Hi Debbie thank you for all of your support! Have a wonderful day as well.
@ Hi Michael thank you. You are too much. :)
caroline , beautiful write. You are the creative one.
I just TRY to follow in your footsteps.
I hate snakes and people that are snakes.. great piece of writing. and so true to form. real scary I agree with SubRon real scary.
I am so glad you write hubs like this. It is wonderful teaching for the world.
Voted up my dear
have a wonderful day
Debbie
This is a chilling read. Many of us have known that kind of man. Thankfully he didn't win our souls. Thank goodness you are free, many are still there..Thank you for shedding light on this important matter...
A scary piece, Caroline, but I got into it from the first line. Yes, I was pretty sure you were talking about a human snake, and I hope now you are truly safe from him.
A beautifully written piece I understand word for word . I hear you.
And it's from those seemingly unstoppable advances to either take over your body mind and spirit , should in each incident bring forth the best in you , that is the time the difference in every individual it shown some will the the easy way out and there is not, they have simply thrown themselves in the dungeon of surrender. While some will set out to kill that which cannot die , we as humans cannot battle with God himself , and some would rnot end that easily , they would remember that original battle in the Garden , it was with that same snake he never died there those men are simply the everyday solders.
As said in the Bible , in the book of Ephesians 6:12.For our struggle is not against flesh and blood, but against the rulers, against the powers, against the world forces of this darkness, against the spiritual forces of wickedness in the heavenly places.
Just read to understand , don't let anything invade your mind,while you read, it will try.
Imagine a book which tells you of your life your every problem and solution, created and written long before you were even born. If it was for those people in that day, why is it's manifestations so predominant today . I did not need a church for my research , it was in me to find out. Now I know I can't fool myself.
You are a great person Caroline , this is an incredible life we are living in , you must trust in someone who will never fail, put on the armor that would put you in charge of those dirty snakes. Set yourself free.
This is a principle that anyone can use and they will all see that there is nothing like it.
In John 14:2 Jesus said: In my Father's house are many mansions: if it were not so, I would have told you.
I go to prepare a place for you. That where I am there yee may be also.
Bless Dear Caroline.
- AUTHOR
Hi Gypsy Rose thank you for the comment and read! I'm glad you liked this one. Yeah it's about a human snake. Great to always see you!
LOL I assume we're talking human snakes. Don't know which I despise more the poisonous real ones or the despicable human ones. You got me all shook up. Great way with words and brought on the shivers.
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