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The Woman on the Mountaintop (a Writing Challenge by Bill Holland)
The Challenge
Bill Holland(aka. billybuc) recently issued the following challenge in his hub "A Writing Challenge: The Woman on the Mountaintop":
"The photo you see is one I took several years back of my wife, Bev, standing on top of Pinnacle Peak in the Cascade Mountains. It is one of my favorite pictures of Bev because it perfectly captures her spirit and love of nature. I invite you to take part in the challenge and see what wondrous story or poem you can create based on this picture."
This hub is my response :)
The mountain seemed to sit apart from the Earth itself
The Woman on the Mountaintop
Brenda smiled as she gazed across the deep valley. It reminded her of a plunging cleavage separating two great breasts of some reclining giantess. Above and beyond where she stood beckoned a magnificent snow capped peak looking like a custard covered Christmas pudding surrounded by a sea of frothy whipped cream. The mountain seemed to sit apart from the Earth itself. She imagined that's how Heaven looked, floating on God's special clouds.
Stretching her arms above her head Brenda made her body as straight and tall as she could. She breathed deeply of the fresh clean mountain air free from smog and traffic and industrial fumes.
The Cascade Mountains, and Pinnacle Peak in particular, was her special place. The beautiful mountain she stood on was covered in a carpet of green and the Viagra coloured sky stretched out as far as the eye could see. She grinned again at the surprising metaphors her subconscious mind came up with.
all Brenda had to do was close her eyes and imagine her special mountaintop haven
When she returned home to her normal city life with its everyday stresses and frustrations, all Brenda had to do was close her eyes and imagine her special mountaintop haven. Then all her cares and troubles just evaporated. Not that she was a worrier.. far from it.
Her husband "Dutch" always said that Brenda was one of the most care-free and optimistic people he had ever known. It was what he loved most about her. He admitted thanking God every day that she saw something in him that appealed to her. They say opposites attract, like chalk and cheese. Maybe they complimented each other, the yin and yang so to speak, or so many other corny overused cliches.
It wasn't like they were made for each other and shared everything in common. They had both been married before and had their own children and had lived very different lives. In fact they possessed two very different personalities but were truly in love and made the effort to show an interest and join in each other's favourite activities.
His special name for her was "The Woman on the Mountaintop"
The environment and nature were very important in both their lives. Even at home in town they strived to live as self-sustainably as possible, growing their own vegetables and raising poultry for food, and recycling as much as they could. Another activity that Brenda and Dutch both truly enjoyed was hiking. They tried to spend every other available weekend trekking in the mountains or National Parks.
No matter how many times they hiked up the same mountain to the Pinnacle Peak summit there were new sights to see, creatures to encounter, strangers to befriend. Besides who could ever tire of the amazing views?
A few years back Dutch had taken a photo of Brenda standing on this exact same mountain peak and doing exactly as she was now. His special name for her was "The Woman on the Mountaintop", and she loved it.
The Woman on the Mountaintop (a poem)
The woman on the mountaintop
Surveys her distant realm.
The only crown upon her head,
A sprig of mountain flowers.
She stretches arms above her head
And wishes they were wings,
So she could spread them like a hawk
And soar from peak to peak.
Other Responses to Bill's Challenge
- Eric's Response to Bill's Challenge: Woman on the Mountaintop. Just What is a Mountaintop experience
Just what is a mountaintop experience anyway? Well here is one you will not soon forget. - The woman on the mountaintop ( A writing challenge by Billybuc. )
Bill Holland, ( Billybuc ) issued a writing challenge using his wife Bev's picture. This is my response. - The Woman on the Mountaintop (writing challenge)
Writing prompts are a great way of keeping your creativity alive. This story is in response to a fellow writer's challenge. I hope you enjoy it and take on the challenge yourself. - Beauty. Elegance. Vibrance.
This is my response to billybuc aka Bill Holland's challenge using the beautiful picture of his wife, Bev. - The Women on the Mountaintop (The Billybuc Challenge)
Show me women who deserve commendation in their natural roles as mothers, daughters, sisters, and wives; I will show you women who have secured their place on the mountaintops that matter most. - The Woman on the Mountain Top
She never knew she would be the woman on the mountain top. - Bill's Challenge: The Woman on the Mountaintop
The Woman on the Mountaintop is more than she appears to be. She is the past, the present, and the future. She's a little bit crazy. - Response to the WRITING CHALLENGE from Bill Holland: THE WOMAN ON THE MOUNTAINTOP; A Story of Ambiti
A response to a challenge laid down by billybuc (Bill Holland), to write a story inspired by a photo. A story of ambition and realisation.
© 2014 John Hansen
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Good to see you commenting on another of my hubs Linda. Yes Bill's challenges are always fun and encourage interesting responses. Glad you liked the "viagra coloured sky" and the poem too. Thanks for the vote up.
Another well written hub Jodah, I love reading your hubs. Especially your responses to Bill's challenges. I love the Viagra Sky and your lovely poem at the end. It is like the icing on your challenge. Voted up.
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I appreciate you're reading this Kevin. Glad you enjoyed the experience of freedom. Thanks for the vote up.
I really liked that John. It was both amazing and fascinating. At a couple of of parts I even felt as if I was flying like a bird. I voted up+++, shared, pinned and tweeted it.
Kevin
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Thank you Manatita for visiting this hub and for your kind comment. Paulo Coelho is a great inspiration to me. The Alchemist is one of my favourite books.
Well Judah,
The poem is exquisite and the hawk reminds me of the freedom of the Soul in flight. Excellent Hub with a great story of Brenda and Dutch. I like birds and Coelho is admirable. Great effort and a wonderful contribution to Billy's Challenge. Much Mehta
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Thank you as always Jackie, glad you enjoyed my contribution.
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Thank you Nell. I agree these challenges are great, especially at bringing the community together.
Very good and your poem a perfect cap. ^+
Hi Jodah, what a beautiful story and poem, loved the metaphors too, I am really enjoying these challenges, nell
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Thank you Audrey. Always great to get your comment.
Beautiful write John!
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Thank you for your knd comment Harish. Yes we all envy the birds don't we..it must be wnderful to have the freedom of flight. Glad you found the story believable and the poem lovely. Thanks for the vote up too.
" So she could spread them like a hawk, And soar from peak to peak". Isn't this feeling common in all of us ? Birds flying in the sky is something we all envy in one way or the other. John, this tiny poem about mountain woman is very lovely. I also loved reading the beautiful story of Brenda and Dutch. I love your beautiful narration that instills life in the characters and the events, making the story as if it had actually happened. A fantastic twin-one response ! Voted up.
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My pleasure Suzette, thank you for reading and commenting.
Beautiful response, John. I think you catch the essence of Bill and Bev. I also enjoyed the poem. Thanks for sharing this with us.
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Thank you btrbell, that was a wonderful comment. Much appreciated.
Great job! Loved it! It was lighthearted and playful, while still being intensely emotional! Thank you!
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So glad you enjoyed my take on the photo Faith. It was an interesting challenge and I enjoyed writing it. Hope your hubby recovers quickly. That's the second person I have heard of having a detached retina in the last two days. Thanks for the vote up, pin and share too. God bless.
What a wonderfully creative response to Bill's challenge! I am catching up reading. My hubby had emergency eye surgery yesterday due to a detached retina, so I am behind on all the great responses to all of the challenges. I am amazed had how very creative and unique each one's approach is to each challenge.
Loved your descriptive love story here and, especially, your poetry is always superb. It floats along like a cloud.
We can't ever beat God's views!
Voted up ++++ tweeting, pinning, G+ and sharing
Blessings
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Thanks Jo, Bill said this was an opportunity to try out your to experiment with your own similes/metaphors so I thought I' give it a go. Thanks for your kind comment and the vote up.
John, I was convinced that I'd read and commented on your response to Bill's challenge already. I almost missed this treat. Loved it, simply inspired. Bill wanted unique similes/metaphors and my word, You've certainly provided them. Well done. Up all the way.
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Haha Sunshine, glad the imagery worked for you. Thanks for reading.
Wow...makes me want to go climb atop a mountain just so I could see what this woman does! :)
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Why thank you lamb servant. Viagra is something that is so common and widely used now as a product, I just thought it may as well be used descriptively in writing as well.. :)
Thanks for reading and your kind comment.
Well done John. "Viagra colored sky" is probably the most unique way of using the word viagra, and the most unique way of describing the sky.
Dutch was a lucky man.
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I felt compelled to walk that "fine line" here Irc7815...and make it a little risque..haha. Bill said not to use the usual tired cliches so I tried to make up new ones. Glad you enjoyed and thanks for voting up and linking to your own great story.
Good golly, "cleavage". "Viagra colored sky", ...what's a good love story without a little heat? lol Great response to Bill's challenge and the poem was the icing on that dish of pudding. This was infused with so many elements of emotion that I just couldn't stop reading. I'm adding a link to my own response to the challenge. Voted up, awesome, and beautifuol.
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Haha, thanks Kim. Glad to know my hubs have educational content. I much appreciate your kind comment and vote up. Blessings.
First, of all, I learned something I did not know: viagra is blue. Smiles.
Secondly, a fun response to the challenge and a beautiful poem to boot.
Nice work. V+/S for sure.
Blessings,
Kim
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Haha thanks Will, got to take a risk sometimes. It seems to have been popular, maybe it will become a famous cliché.
Viagra colored sky? Boy, I wouldn't touch that one with a six inch pole! Well done, John!
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Thank you Cam. That positive and encouraging comment means a lot coming from a wonderful writer like yourself. I did put more effort into my descriptions because of Bill's challenge.
John, your descriptive wording hopped up a notch in this one. From cleavage to viagra colored sky and on to custard covered Christmas pudding. Excellent job. And the outstanding poem capped it all off.
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Hey Bill, I greatly appreciate your positive response. It is great getting praise for your work from one's fellow hubbers but having that confirmed by the person who issued the challenge is the greatest compliment. Glad you liked the "viagra coloured sky" :)
Thanks for the info on 'callout', John. I'll have a good look at that.
Ann
You are so good! I smiled all the way through this, John. "Viagra coloured sky".....what a great line....a great line. Thank you for taking part in this. I've been looking forward to your response and you didn't let me down.
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Thanks for all those kind words Ruby. As you say, I don't really know Bev.. only through Bill's writing, but I hope I did her justice and captured a little of what she may be like. Glad you saw those things too, and liked the poem. I appreciate the vote up, share and tweet too.
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Yes exactly word, God first, then your woman and family. I think Bill and Bev are an amazing couple and I hope this did them, especially Bev justice. I will always be a John Denver fan too.
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I am glad you enjoyed this Shauna. By all means check out the others..there are some great stories and poems among them.
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Thank you for your kind comments Mary. i thought the viagra coloured sky was a bit of a humorous touch. Glad it didn't go unnoticed. :)Thanks for the vote up and link too.
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Thanks for the "awesome" vote Frank. I can't ask for much more than that. :)
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Thanks for your generous comment Anne. In the content capsules we now have a new one called "Callout". This is what you select to get the coloured quote backgrounds. You get three choices 'colorbox', "classic' and 'quote'. It is one of the good things that came across from Squidoo.
Withour really knowing Bev, I think you've got her pegged perfectly. Her love of the mountain and growing her own veggies and loving her husband, although they are different. The viagra metaphor was brilliant and after looking deeply at the picture I saw the cleavage and pudding with whipped cream. Voted up and away! Shared on Twitter...Oh I forgot to say, " I love the poem. "
Simply beautiful of Billybuc, What a way to consider and worship your woman. Every woman should be worshiped by her man especially. Women who do for their children, family, friends, church family and co-workers should be also, as long as it is remembered that All Mighty God should be worshipped above all. Will always love that John Denver song too. Thanks Jodah
I love this! It's amusing, beautiful and wonderfully illustrated. So well put together; extremely professional.
How do you get the coloured backgrounds to such things as quotes or snippets or your story? I've tried to work that out but haven't succeeded. I know my hubs lack that sort of expertise and I'd love to make them look more professional. This one is so good.
Great response to Bill's challenge and your poetry always excels.
Ann
Beautiful story, John. Thanx for including links to the others who accepted Bill's challenge. I haven't yet read them all.
Metaphorically speaking this sounds a lot like Bev and Bill. What a wonderful, fun read especially with your viagra sky! I think that's the one that will certainly stand out in this great work!
Voted up, awesome, beautiful and added to my hub.
a wonderful guide through that photo of a woman on the mountain.. everything feels right and the poem was just frosting on the cake voted awesome my friend :) Frank...
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Haha Eric, thanks for reading. Bill said to make up new metaphors rather than use old cliches... :)
Well there I was hanging out with Brenda and Dutch just enchanted with their life and love. I would never have thought of a Viagra Sky but I could see the colors.
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Thank you for your kind and wise words DDE, and for reading my hub.
The beautiful thought of beautiful woman if not from the outside then definitely from the inside. The finest do belong right up there. Another wonderful thought from you.
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