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The color of rain-Senryu poetry

Updated on August 15, 2014
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I am a writer of poetry and fiction. I especially love flash fiction. My name is Ruby, and I live in Southern Illinois. I am a retired R.N.

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Raindrops falling against my window pane, rapidly then gradually slows to a trickle.

The color of rain

Crystal clear water moisture

Precipitation

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Vapor mist curtain

Raindrops splattering window

Trickling bubble burst

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Visibility

Intermittent patchy fog

Dissipating rain


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    • always exploring profile imageAUTHOR

      Ruby Jean Richert 

      17 months ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Tamara, So you like to write poetry too. GREAT...I will be over to see you. Thank you..

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      Tamara Moore 

      17 months ago

      Lovely! I love poetry, too. I also enjoy using metaphors, and rhymes ❤️. I will enjoy reading more of your writings!

      Tamara

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      20 months ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Nadine. This type of poetry used to be my favorite. I enjoy writing about nature. Happy you enjoyed the video. Sorry about you having a severe drought..Thank you..

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      Nadine May 

      20 months ago from Cape Town, Western Cape, South Africa

      Your words became very tangible for me, especially now that we are experiencing a severe drought in Cape Town. Loved the song raindrop's are falling on my head.

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      23 months ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Vellur. I love the rain splashing against the windowpane too. Thanks so much for coming to read my poetry...

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      Nithya Venkat 

      23 months ago from Dubai

      Beautifully written senryu about the rain, I love the sound of rain following on the windowpanes.

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      2 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Laurinzo. Sorry I'm late, had family visiting over the weekend. Thank you for the ' awesome comment ' So glad you liked it!

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      Live To Write 

      2 years ago from Phoenix, Az.

      I love this style of poetry and how you utilized it to paint a vivid word painting...Awesome!!!!

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      2 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Linda. I agree. Rain is wonderful. Thank you for coming by...

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      Linda Rogers 

      2 years ago from Minnesota

      A beautiful Senryu Ruby-there's nothing like a good rain to cleanse the soul.

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello DDE. I'm with you on watching a good movie when it's raining. Thank you...

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      Devika Primić 

      4 years ago from Dubrovnik, Croatia

      I like it when it rains to watch a good movie or read a book.

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Thandi. Nothing i like better than listening to the rain. Thank you for a beautiful comment....

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Elena. Thank's for the refreshing comment. I really like the song too..Thank you...

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      Alexander Thandi Ubani 

      4 years ago from Lagos

      Beautiful! Ya, I see all when it rains. :)

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      Elena 

      4 years ago from London, UK

      Thanks Ruby for a refreshing poem. The song fits in perfectly with it. I haven't heard that song for ages. :-)

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello manatita. I hope you are enjoying your stay in NY, missing your poetry. Thank you...

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      manatita44 

      4 years ago from london

      Short and sweet Ruby. Commendable.

      In NY, so sorry I cannot hear the video from my cafe.

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Peg, I've been hearing about your drought in Texas, glad you got rain. Thank's for the captivating comment...

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Audrey. It has rained here everyday for a week. Thank's for the lovely comment..

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello daydreamer. What a nice compliment! Thank you so much...

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Nell. It is 5-7-5 syllables, the same as haiku, no rhyming. It's just something different to try and it's fun. Thank's for the clever comment...

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Torris, nice to see you. Cuddling up in a warm blanket, listening to the rain sounds heavenly. Thank you for coming by....

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      Peg Cole 

      4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

      You say so much in so few words. Captivating imagery. We had a wonderful and much needed rain this weekend after a long drought.

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      Audrey Howitt 

      4 years ago from California

      Lovely Ruby!! I was just thinking about rain this morning!

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      daydreamer13 

      4 years ago

      Very interesting poem. You are very gifted when it comes to writing interesting pieces. No matter what form it takes, it keeps the mind moving. Well done!!

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      Nell Rose 

      4 years ago from England

      Love this Ruby! very clever, and I had never heard of Senryu before, I thought the 7 5 7 lines were haiku? shows what I know! lol! wonderful!

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      Tori Canonge 

      4 years ago from North Carolina

      Makes me want to cuddle up under a blanket and enjoy a good rainy day. Too bad it's warm and sunny here today. I guess I'll just have to wait until the next storm rolls through.

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello truthfornow. It's funny how words come and change your prospective about things. I really never thought about rain having color either. Thank you for a lovely read comment.

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Blossom. Thank you. It helps to write about rain when it's actually raining, which it's actually doing right now. Happy you thought it was a lovely read.....

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      truthfornow 

      4 years ago from New Orleans, LA

      Lovely read. It seems like it is about to rain over here. I never would have thought of rain having color.

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      Bronwen Scott-Branagan 

      4 years ago from Victoria, Australia

      Lovely! Soft and gentle as rain can sometimes be. The form you chose to write in suits the theme so well.

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Genna your comment is beautiful! Thank you for the complimentary comment. Thank you for gracing my page and sharing..Hugs my friend..

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      Genna East 

      4 years ago from Massachusetts, USA

      You have given rain life, a character of nature with its own movement and reflection of color as it, in turn, gives us sustenance in many ways. Beautifully done, Ruby! You are a true artist with Senryu. Voted up and shared.

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello btrbell. Small world, seems everyone is getting summer rain. Happy you enjoyed and yes, a blast from the past, raindrops was a big hit for BJ Thomas. Thank you...

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Dear Martie, so good to see you and happy you enjoyed my senryu poetry. I used to do this type of poetry and loved the challenge. This was fun to do, watching the rain. Happy you got your first rain. We have gotten more rain this year, really i only had to water my garden once. Take care and thank you...

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Frank. Thank you for the awesome comment....

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Theresa, your comment made me smile and your reaction to my senryu is what i hoped for. Thank you for sharing and blessings to you..

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Bill, i do believe your teaching about creativity has given me new ways to express my feelings. Thank you so much...

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Mar. I have always loved to watch the rain, and you're right, it is cleansing and uplifting. Glad you felt that dear one. Love you too. Hugs..

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello lisa vanvorst. I love to watch and listen to the rain too. Happy you came to visit. Thank you.

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      Randi Benlulu 

      4 years ago from Mesa, AZ

      Love! I am sitting here on a rainy morning and reading your beautiful words! Thanks for the "blast from the past" music! Up+

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      Martie Coetser 

      4 years ago from South Africa

      Dear Ruby, indulging in Japanese forms of poetry is such an enjoyable challenge. These are truly thought-provoking senryu. I could see and hear those raindrops falling against your window pane.

      Raindrops indeed fell on my head this morning - our first rain of the season and the ideal opportunity to fertilise my garden with artificial manure.

      Voted up and awesome :)

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      Frank Atanacio 

      4 years ago from Shelton

      rain.. briskly paced in soft words...voted awesome :)

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      Faith Reaper 

      4 years ago from southern USA

      Oh, this is beautiful, Ruby! Wow, you are amazing at writing the Senryu poetry, as it is not easy. You words painted the picture in my mind without any need of an image here. That is great writing.

      Up +++ tweeting and pinning

      Blessings for a lovely weekend

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      Bill Holland 

      4 years ago from Olympia, WA

      See, that's the kind of creativity that makes writing such a remarkable craft. The color of rain...right there you established your creativity. Excellent write, Ruby!

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      Maria Jordan 

      4 years ago from Jeffersonville PA

      Cleansing, healing and uplifting, Ruby... I love the rain and love your take on it.

      Have a great weekend, my dear. Love, Maria

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      Lisa VanVorst 

      4 years ago from New Jersey

      Short, sweet and beautiful. I love when it rains. I find the sound of rain very relaxing.

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Audrey. Invites me to inhale the kind of nuturing only a rain like this can give..Beautiful..Thank you for your lovely comment and for sharing..

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      Audrey Hunt 

      4 years ago from Idyllwild Ca.

      Ruby -

      Your lovely poetry invites me to inhale the kind of nurturing only a rain like this can give.

      So beautiful. Thank you and sharing. Audrey

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello rebeccamealey. Thank you. Happy you enjoyed the poetry and the video. Cheers..

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      Rebecca Mealey 

      4 years ago from Northeastern Georgia, USA

      New to me.I love it! And you did a good job presenting it and adding the right video.

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Mike. Your comment is poetry to my ears. Thank you my friend..

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      mckbirdbks 

      4 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

      Hello Ruby, How gentle and soothing, this poetry conveys the softness of the lite rain and the tempo of the escaping drops.

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Kevin. That's how the words came to me, by watching the rain splashing on my window. Senryu poetry is done in syllables, see above. You can make it short or long, it's fun to do, give it a try. Thank you for sharing..

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Sam Tumblin. As i watched the rain on my window pane, it seemed to burst as it hit. I'm thrilled that you could see it in your mind. Thank you for coming to read and comment...

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      Ruby Jean Richert 

      4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      Shauna, senryu poetry is done by syllables- first line 5 syllables- second line 7 syllables- third line 5 syllables. You can do as many sets ( three lines ) as you want to. I used to do this kind of poetry a lot. I enjoy doing it. I'm so glad you like it and the video. Thank you so much...

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      The Examiner-1 

      4 years ago

      Interesting Deb, it sure was short and brief. Though I could create mental pictures as I read it. It was wonderful for a light rain shower. I voted it up+, shared it and pinned it.

      Kevin

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      Sam Tumblin 

      4 years ago from Eunice, La.

      Personally I like the verse from the "color of rain to.. Trickling bubble burst" In my mind I can see the color of the rain as well hear the bubble burst on the window pane.

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      Shauna L Bowling 

      4 years ago from Central Florida

      I've never heard of this kind of poetry. I love it and love the video, too. Butch Cassidy and the Sundance Kid. Good memories!

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