Time Of Call Was 0300
He took a chance,
and knew it was a bad one,
he turned the corner
and saw the ambulance,
the street was a light show,
time of call was 0300,
and that was a half an hour ago,
he pulled up behind the red glow,
then stared for a moment
at the frenzied paramedics in the rear,
worried looks on their faces,
made it clear,
and that just brought on the fear,
his eyes would twitch,
when he realized it was his paid informant,
his snitch,
he didn’t look so hot,
a clear head shot,
the snitch was writhing on his litter,
moaning,
his legs buckling back and forth,
groaning,
life would linger, but death grows,
his legs would kick for the last time,
outward at the knees,
inward at the toes,
he needed to find
someone else to drop the dime,
the involuntary movement
told the homicide detective to post
the help wanted sign.
© 2012 Frank Atanacio
Comments
- AUTHOR
thank you pegcole :)
You threw a little humor into this one at the end, Frank. I like it.
- AUTHOR
Our Ms Brooks.. if I were just half as talented as you.. then I'd be good :) LOL you are tops in my book
Frank... I agree with Dawn where do you come up with this stuff?. this is so good.. THE HELP WANTED SIGN.. LOL
so good.
voted up
Debbie
- AUTHOR
thank you for stopping by Blossom and Shim-Dawn have a blessed day Frank
Frank how do you dream up such stuff... Does it come off the newspapers?? I am curious! Have a blessed day! Peace!
Brusque and to the point. You built the scene beautifully without wasting words. Enjoyed it immensely.
- AUTHOR
thank you so much writer20 and of course you to you Poetic Vix :) bless you both
Frank, this one was so edgy, so real, so brutal and yet strangely detached from the detective it seemed. I suppose they have to be that way to do their jobs. You sure can get in to a character's head! Bravo.
Wow! Frank my friend, this is so very good and I enjoyed reading it. Voted up and awesome, Joyce.
- AUTHOR
lol.. you're right Sky
Se where he ended up I am also learning from those that have passed. Never! For the Bible says : What will it profit a man to gain the whole world and suffer the lost of his own soul.
A servant for the Most High Yes!
Bless day brethren.
- AUTHOR
lol so you want the job as the snitch?
Ha Ha! Post the help wanted sigh! Wow! Filled with clarity and decent flow, and our true detective
Frank ANTANACIO knew the exact way to go.
I enjoy this one more than many , It's real and it's live from start to finish. You have captured this position so well no help wanted signs here , you appoint your successor.It's your world brethren Frank!
Bless.
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