"Tintern Abbey" Revisited
With Apologies and Thanks To Mr. Wordsworth
Vision
Five weeks have passed, a drop of time that seems
To pass before eternity and weep.
I hear the echo of those promises
As benediction for a blessing past.
Now I reflect upon the hallowed heights
We scaled, attempting to connect the heavens
With harsh reality of Earth below.
Today frames my return, ah, but alone,
To this, once emerald pasture, turned to weed,
With eyes that view no more and lips that close,
Which at another season spoke of much,
As youth doth share insanity and thrives
‘Mid clouds and snowflakes. Once again I see
Those mountains, barely hillocks, merely mounds
Of smoke-filled air and dreams; those valleys veiled
In vapors of remorse, the mist of hope,
Slow-rising, then condensing with the clouds,
Unnoticed by the gods, who see them not
As falling leaves of chldhood in decay,
But as the seeds of yesterday gone home.
Caesura
The woods are silent once again. The night
Is blowing shadows, ghosts that dance and smile,
As dreams tempt just beyond the tangible,
Some shrouded in desire too old to grow,
Too young to die. The night is cold, and frost
Surrounds the moon, encasing all its light
In clouds and stopping all its rays by force...
Cold force, not cruel... just cold and damp
And apathetic towards a waft of air.
The shadows stop their sultry dance and lie
In graves dug long ago but filled too late.
The trees that blew in silence lose their leaves
And stand bare-chested, tortured by a wind
That blows in gusts untempered by the night.
An icy wall appears around the past,
And all that came before is closed within
A fairy castle left to stagnate now,
A smoke-filled, empty stage of yesterdays,
Illusion fractured by a night of frost,
A day of hope, an afternoon of dreams.
The woods are silent once again. The night
Is dark, and cold, and clothed in "could have been."
Revision
This is the season when the moon becomes
A beckoning plaything for each lonely child
Who silently has sat and sadly wept
For all that she has seen and could not have,
With only memory to serve as salve
To cool her heart, afire with fruitless prayer.
This is the dream which grows again each year,
When gray clouds turn to white and stars are dim.
The smoke is slowly filtered from he sky,
A smoldering ash which emphasized a lie,
Attempt to reach a moon that didn’t shine
For children who refused to see its light
Uncovered in a rude and wordly glare.
This is the day which follows all the nights
Of apathetic stars and alien lights,
Of tides which never whispered to the beach,
Of hopes that wrote a lovely story book,
And drreams that built their castles in the sand
To crumble from the crude light of the moon
Which bared itself too late, but much too soon
For children who had never walked outside
A home of paradox and fairy tales.
This is the here, this is the now, of time,
Anachronistic clock of yeterday.
The hands begin to move; they cannot stay
Beneath a sun burned out by too much
Force, an ugly ball formed from a lovely dream.
This is the season when the moon becomes
An ink blot on a night of chill and sorrow.
This is today, the half-moon of tomorrow.
I admired William Wordsworth’s effective use of blank verse (unrhymed iambic pentameter) in his poem “Tintern Abbey” and decided to try my hand at the technique, with some rhyme added to my version where I felt it would be appropriate.