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To Your Health - -A Short Story - Part one

Updated on June 29, 2012

To Your Health



(After the Supreme Court‘s decision this morning to grant government vast new powers over the people, I put on my magic future goggles, and this is what I saw in store for a “New“ America):


Part one


What’s your PICA rating sir?”

The middle-aged man stared at the wall.

The IRS Healthcare Administrator sighed.

“I can get it by scanning your implant, sir, but I prefer that my patients just admit their PICA themselves. That way, I don’t have to listen to their arguments.”

Silence.

She waved the reader wand, and Jerome’s PICA rating appeared on the reader wall.

“A lousy 3.6?” She smiled humorlessly. “Trying to pull a fast one. Mister Dreup? You know damn well that nobody below a 5.8 gets to the second care tier! Do you have any special talent that’s not listed? If not, your low PICA means you are well on your way to being made comfortable and good-drugs happy!” She chuckled at her own wit.

Jerome Dreup looked at the back of his hands as they rested on his knees. Special talent? He could shoot the eye out of a terrorist at one thousand yards, and often did so during the War with the Middle East, but who needed that now? He could kill a thousand different ways, but who would pay for skills like that? Who wanted someone like that? Ex-military was the lowest of the low in New America.

His Productivity/Intellect/Community/Age rating was a mere 3.6, far below the 5.8 he needed to even be considered for prostate cancer treatment, although it was highly curable. Under the Affordable Healthcare Act’s New America austerity plan, his 3.6 rating simply did not qualify him for treatment. The fact that he was a Medal of Honor winner during the ME War had no influence on the dispassionate IRS Administrators or his PICA rating. Whose stupid idea was it to make the IRS goons the final judges on life? Oh yeah, that too was The Leader’s idea.

There was no good way out now that Congress and the Supreme Court had been disbanded, and all New-Americans had been disarmed in the middle of the night. Well, most Americans that is. Suddenly, he made up his mind.

Food would be a problem. All food outlets were now under AHA control, and the Anti-obesity Act strictly regulated the diet of all New-Americans. A wave of the AHA implant got you a week’s rations, according to your body mass index, and being caught with extra food meant a stay in close confinement for a month, first offense, A second offense meant an excruciating bout with a Narco-PainTrain injection, and a third offense meant total elimination. AHA did not fool around with Health Care scofflaws.

But Jerome Dreup knew how to survive off the land, and he could make a deadly weapon out of virtually anything. Even that oversight was under consideration by the AHA, who had a mind-wipe scanner in the final stages of development. In fact, as a 3.6 in final stages, he could very well be ‘volunteered’ to submit to a mind-wipe test, removing all memory and reducing his brain to that of a newborn child. It was an open secret that ex-military types like Jerome were considered a threat to The Leader.

He had not read the IRS Healthcare Administrator name-badge, but he had named her Betty-Beastly in his mind. She was approaching with a syringe full of ‘happy-drugs’, and a sub-q dispenser. The drugs available in the syringe were a six months supply of painless serenity, and would be slowly meted out by the sub-q. A direct injection however, would be fatal in seconds.

“Roll up your sleeve, Mister Dreup. Time for happy days.”

Jerome rolled up his sleeve, and as she bent to administer the sub-q, Jerome grabbed the syringe and jammed it into the meaty part of her shoulder.

‘If you want to live for another day lady, you’ll get me out of here and to the lobby. Do you understand?”

She nodded, and he could smell her fear. They stood and walked to the locked door.

“Just do the retina scan and the palm print like always. One stupid mistake on your part and I push the plunger. Just keep in mind that I have absolutely nothing to lose.”

The retina reader scanned her right eye, and the palm reader confirmed that the shaking hand was hers. The latch actuated and they stepped into an empty hallway. The elevator also accepted her identity, and then they were in the lobby. All that remained was the street door.

“I lied to you Betty. You'll sound the alarm, and I need time. Just your bad luck that I can't let that happen, because my country needs me. Have a happy-drugs finale on me.”

He pushed the plunger all at once and Betty-Beastly sagged to the floor, her eyes wide open and unseeing. Jerome pulled his hidden ceramic J-knife from the hem seam of his shirt, and bent over the dead woman for a moment, working swiftly and expertly. Then he walked to the street door, where he held up her severed right eye up to the retina scanner. The buzzer sounded, and he tossed the eye back into the lobby as he stepped out into the streets of New America, free for the moment.


- To be continued



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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, femme!

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      femmeflashpoint 5 years ago

      Will,

      I couldn't drum up even an ounce of sympathy for Betty-Beastly. But, regarding Mr. Dreup .... OUTRAGEOUSLY LOUD APPLAUSE!!!!!

      Voted up, all the way, even funny, because yes, I grinned when Beastly bit the dust!

      I'm off to Part Dos!

      femme

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi sandyn,

      I think we are already in big trouble. We shall see in November.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Patriette!

      BTW, the true heroes are the ones who fight for our freedom. You might enjoy reading The Radio.

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      sandyn 5 years ago

      Love this story! Unfortunately, I can see this really happening in this new America in which we live. Well written.

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      Patriette 5 years ago from Las Vegas, NV

      Ooh, I'm lovin' this... Voting up, awesome and sharing! Btw, you are one terrific writer Will, and like everyone here, you always keep me coming back for more.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hey Mike!

      I finshed The Radio just for you! It has been published!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Pam!

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      Old Poolman 5 years ago

      WillStarr - I'll bet you are one heck of a fisherman. You sure know how to select the bait, set the hook, and reel us in. With everything you write I am hooked after the first paragraph.

      PS: Don't forget to write Chapter II of Radio boy.

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      Pamela Oglesby 5 years ago from United States

      I think I was hooked after the first word. This is a very exciting story and I voted you up across the board.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Pop!

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      breakfastpop 5 years ago

      Your piece will stay with me forever. I'ts haunting, amazing and you are so talented. I am voting you up all the way.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      I think you're right, Nan. The only way to get rid of it now is to elect Romney and a Republican Congress.

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      Nan Mynatt 5 years ago from Illinois

      Chief Justice Roberts really surprised me! Obama may not get elected again because of his healthcare bill. People around my state don't want his healthcare bill.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Glad you like it, Chris!

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      Chris Merritt 5 years ago from Pendleton, Indiana

      (Pumping my fist with excitement!)

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi Don,

      I'll write about anything, if a story hits me!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Johan Smulders!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi, shiningirisheyes!

      We are always just a disaster away from a dictator. That's how Hitler came to power.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Will do, Mike.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi Bob, and thanks for the heads-up!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Beth!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi James!

      Robert's narrow definition was disappointing, but he also remarked that this is what happens when we vote in someone like Obama.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thank you, Conservative Lady!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thanks Mike!

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      Don A. Hoglund 5 years ago from Wisconsin Rapids

      Hi Will, you too seem to have an ability to write about a variety of things and styles. Hope your brave new world comes out well.

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      Johan Smulders 5 years ago from East London, South Africa

      Here we go again, hooked after one episode!

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      Shining Irish Eyes 5 years ago from Upstate, New York

      Wow - So scar to think how out of hand and out of controll this all can spin, so fast. Great writing and kept me on the edge of my seat.

      I look forward to the rest. P.D. Glad Beastie Betty got hers.

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      Old Poolman 5 years ago

      Will - give me a call or shoot me an email when you are headed to Florence and we will do that long overdue lunch and beer meeting.

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      diogenes 5 years ago from UK and Mexico

      You and George Orwell, Will. As you are doing stories in sequels, it may be a good idea to do a small summary of the last chapter as you continue...so many hubbers miss the first instalments and have to hunt around for them, as well as looky-loos online who won't bother and might just dump the story if they don't have a clue whats going on.

      Ominously prophetic I am sure!

      Bob

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      Beth Perry 5 years ago from Tennesee

      Ah Will, shades of Twilight Zone but with a new sheen on the pumpkin. I like. Looking forward to more in the story!

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      James W. Nelson 5 years ago from eastern North Dakota

      Wow! Kick butt, Will. I missed hearing the news this morning, and missed the evening news. What I got was from Facebook listing the five justices who disbanded the Constitution. I knew we had at least four liberals but was surprised to see Justice Roberts vote with them. I thought he was dependably conservative, and by the way, my friend, You have the beginning of a mighty novel here. No way it should remain just a short story. I hope you run with it, and I hope I haven't spilled the beans.

      Your friend, James W. Nelson

      Oh, yes, and I do agree with Conservative Lady right above me!

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      Sheila 5 years ago from Surprise Arizona - formerly resided in Washington State

      Fabulous - I couldn't stop reading and now I just want MORE!!!!!

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      mckbirdbks 5 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

      Great Fiction Will, some of your best.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hey Mike. Will a beer do for 'happy juice'? I'll buy.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thanks, drbj, and the IRS really is the enforcing agency for Obamacare!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thanks Dex...waiting to see how this all plays out in the WH kitchen!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      It really is happening, Deborah Brooks!

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Hi Angela,

      I have the feeling that this stupid decison to call it a tax after all the denials that it was a tax is just what we need to anger and energize conservatives. I think Obama will rue the day Obamacare was upheld. Over half of American voters want this repealed, and they will vote in November.

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Never fear, Mikey! Are you about ready for lunch? Maybe next week?

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      WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

      Thanks Becky...two at once is a new challenge!

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      Old Poolman 5 years ago

      Will - After reading this story all I can say is "Thank god I am getting old and wont have to see this become reality." I could use a little squirt of that happy juice though after hearing about the courts ruling on Obamacare.

      Mike

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      drbj and sherry 5 years ago from south Florida

      Betty was a beast and deserved what she got. Senor Dreup is my hero. Impatiently waiting for the next exciting and much too true to life chapter.

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      Dexter Yarbrough 5 years ago from United States

      Hi Will! I'm looking forward to the continuation of this story.

      Voted up, up and away!

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      Deborah Brooks Langford 5 years ago from Brownsville,TX

      Oh WOW!1 I love this story.. I cant wait to read the next chapter. sounds like something that is rally happening in the America or could.. Sci fy.

      voted up

      Debbie

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      Angela Blair 5 years ago from Central Texas

      Will -- this one is a winner even though it's only begun and to be cont... I can't believe there's not a bunch of folks as disappointed and disheartened as I am on this day who won't enjoy some semblance of "getting even" with what's going to befall us in the very near future -- even if it's a work of fiction. The Supreme Court upholding this Obamanation, as far as I'm concerned, is a terrible blow to our freedoms -- our decisions are obviously now being made for us. Looking forward to the "continuance"...Best/Sis

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      Old Poolman 5 years ago

      Darn good start to a new series, but where is the next chapter to the Radio story? Please don't leave us hanging on that one. Unless Jerome is going to build a crystal radio to listen in on top secret government transmissions. Or could this be the kid in the Radio story all grown up?

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      Becky Katz 5 years ago from Hereford, AZ

      Wow, we have an adventure story now. Two series at once, you better get writing. I love it.