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Twisted Love Poems: Cool Breeze

Updated on June 9, 2013

They call you cool breeze
Cause you make hearts freeze
That blue-eyed stare
Will be the death of me

You look through my soul
Finding stories untold
Rip my mind to shreds
Damn, you're so cold

Still
Five minutes with you
Is like seven minutes in Heaven
And for seven minutes in Heaven
I'll burn in Hell for eleven

So don't be so cruel
I might be a fool
But every time you call
I'll come tripping back to you.

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      Romeos Quill 4 years ago from Lincolnshire, England

      A good, realistic read, PHILLYDREAMER. All the best with your new book.

      R.Q.

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      Tijani Achamlal 4 years ago from Morocco

      So cute and well-penned.You are very talented.Voted up.

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      frankieonfire 4 years ago from Eureka, CA

      Love the play on words - '...seven minutes in heaven - I'll burn in hell for 11. ' love this line. A repeatable dilly for sure.

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      Wayne Barrett 4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      I have to echo Martin. Very nice work, Jose!

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      Karen Silverman 4 years ago

      Booty call!!!!! lol

      Ahem...ok, all kidding aside - very adorable read, if sadly true!

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      Lurana Brown 4 years ago from Chicagoland, Illinois

      Very lyrical! A lot of meaning packed into tight, kind of playful rhymes. I like how "Still" stands out. ~Lurana

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      Martin Kloess 4 years ago from San Francisco

      I've been there... many-a-time. thanks