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The World behind Cold Empty Eyes- A Poem about seeing things from a broken soul

Updated on June 19, 2013

The World behind Cold Empty Eyes

It seems like only yesterday

But years have passed, and nothing’s changed

The secrets carried in the winds

Still spill on the streets like the next new fix

And still it’s so far away

And my eyes have lost their touch with life

You can’t read what’s been broken

And can’t look into a soul that’s chosen to give in

For every hope I’ve counted

Comes 5 wishes that never came to be

The center of it, the heart of me

Like a pin cushion, fixated with holes

Each one a symbol of a dream that’s come up empty

A prayer spoken into a pillow

Just fragments of faith, tears on a cloth

That never became more than a spoken whisper

Just wanting someone to hear it

Cause you can only fall down so many times

Until you forget how to get up

This weight is getting heavy

These limbs are growing tired

And these eyes are looking for new sights to see

So please just believe in me, while there’s time

Cause I feel so alone

I need a reason to see tomorrow

Cause all I see are reason’s to tune out

And tears wouldn’t be good enough

To absolve the things I’m feeling

Just counting on someone to understand

Cause I can’t be the only one

And if I am, I’m meant to be alone

So please take my heart

So I don’t have to feel this anymore

©Sean Monaghan 1/22/2013

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      epigramman 4 years ago

      Hi Sean - this is really heartfelt and sincere making you truly what I would call a poet's poet - but with my advice it's always essential I would say to find a title for your stirring piece because it's like a song without a title or a movie without a title - something just feels incomplete and in order to sell or promote your new poem at the Hub in the new releases I would say an eye catching title will secure you more readers, followers and fans ..... just saying - but so nice to meet you my friend and sending you warm wishes from lake erie time ontario canada 6:54pm

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      Sean 4 years ago from PA

      glad you enjoyed the poem...sometimes i like to give time before titling it cause it tends to be the strongest part/

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      Sean 4 years ago from PA

      there has a title now, was getting writers block during it

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      epigramman 4 years ago

      great title my friend - and that's a good point you made about it often being the strongest part -

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      Sean 4 years ago from PA

      Thank you sir, you are quite the writer yourself I see. :) I feel a title is the center piece, almost like the preview to the key message you're trying to show, or something you feel stands out a lot...maybe just my thoughts, it doesn't always work out that way...but sometimes a title sets the tone of the poem all together

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      epigramman 4 years ago

      Yes my friend it's true and once again I agree with what you said - and to use a hoary old analogy (lol) -a poem without a title is like giving birth to a baby and not giving he/she a name.

      Just arrived home in the dead of morning from work at lake erie time ontario canada 4:39am to some hot jazz, two well fed pussycats and a cold beer (or two) on one of the coldest nights of the year up here and yes the heat is blowing ....... I will drop by and read some more when I wake up with my coffee later on

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      Sean 4 years ago from PA

      Thank you sir... If you wouldn't mind if you could check out broken man without a name, alone, and puppet... I would like a fellow poets view point on them and critiques if you have any :) I value a skilled judgment... And sounds like a long night my friend. Born and raised in Canada? I ask because my wife has been interested in looking to relocate there, however, my concern is whether or not there is good job stability there, and by that I mean someone going and willing to work hard even just in a normal retail kind of setting, but if willing to work hard able to support themselves one way or another...that and the expense of living there high or low?

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      Fehl Dungo 4 years ago from close to you...

      This is so emotional and heartfelt. I can see now why Colin recommended you to me :) I will read your second hub now..

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      Sean 4 years ago from PA

      Thank you for the appreciative comment...It's nice to know that people can see the emotion behind the writing...and writing in itself is something that generates so many messages, each different toward each individual...glad you enjoyed it

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      Eric T. Shortridge 4 years ago from MidWest

      Great ink my friend... so glad I found your writings... you immerse yourself into the character so well, that the words become real... they FEEL real... and that's hard to fake... I've always said that I would rather feel 'something' than nothing... and this definatley made me feel... much respect!

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      Sean 4 years ago from PA

      Thank you, glad you could feel it :) And yes...feeling something is always better then nothing...cause it's a reminder you are still in tune with yourself...good or bad...it always grants that opportunity to pick yourself up or better yourself...glad you enjoyed...

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      epigramman 4 years ago

      Good evening gentlemen - so glad you both met. The epi-man aka Colin is a happy (hub) camper. lol

      Listening to some lovely new age variations of Mozart with a nice cuppa tea - but will get louder and uglier (lol) later on with red wine and some real crazy 'shite' ....... lol - lake erie time 6:59pm onward for a review or two of your hubs ..

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      Sean 4 years ago from PA

      Thank you Colin :) appreciate your support for my writing it means a lot to me

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      Michael Beskalis 4 years ago from San Francisco

      Soooo this beyond good. I can t even tell you how good this piece is. Wow. Its not too full of words but its so .... but its so deep and heartfelt. Great piece!

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      Sean 4 years ago from PA

      Thank you very much Michael I'm glad you enjoyed this :) I always love the support of those who enjoy my writing and feel it. I really appreciate it

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      Shannon 4 years ago from Texas

      How very heartfelt. You've given words to what so many do feel, but cannot express for themselves. It is hard to find words to describe a pain like that.

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      Sean 4 years ago from PA

      Thank you very much just got the internet back so I will be around more often and try to post more frequently. Your compliment is very much appreciated

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      Lillian K. Staats 4 years ago from Wasilla, Alaska

      JFC, has no one called you on your crap? Look, your talent is palpable, and I will be there for you, but you gotta stop sh**ing on my lawn, I'll take a chance on you, sans crap. You ready? It's a friggin' workout bitch!

      Plus, I'm going to write a welcoming poem for you.. Hope you don't like it, and respond in kind... your ally, lily

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      Annie 4 years ago from NewYork

      sad.. as one writer to another.... keep on writing.

      you capture your viewer attention

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      Sean 4 years ago from PA

      Thank you very much...a poem emits feeling, not what one is feeling inside :) Appreciate the kind words though

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