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A Warriors Winter Haiku

Updated on May 30, 2011

A Warriors Winter Garden


Snow falls in the Garden

I feel their Blood on my Soul

I watch Granite Grow


Heavy are the Flakes

I honor the Spirit of my Foe

I watch Granite Grow


Cold is the Blanket

Steadfast am I in Duty

I See Granite Grow

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      chris 7 years ago

      Nice Poem you could be Wordsworth if you keep it up

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      reconciled heart 7 years ago

      Beautiful. Powerful images and sentiments in few words. Thank you for sharing.

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      Hmrjmr1 7 years ago from Georgia, USA

      Thank you both for your kind words Chris I think that is a bar set too high..

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      tony0724 7 years ago from san diego calif

      Dude ! Nicely done . You have some good heart In there I can tell.

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      Jess Killmenow 7 years ago from Nowheresville, Eastern United States

      Good stuff. Thanks

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      Hmrjmr1 7 years ago from Georgia, USA

      Tony and Jeff Much Thanks Guys

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      Wealthmadehealthy 7 years ago from Somewhere in the Lone Star State

      This is excellent! To understand the imagery in these words...I see them as the coldness of the times, as granite is so very cold....and so much blood is being shed needlessly...Wonderful writing...

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      Hmrjmr1 7 years ago from Georgia, USA

      Wealthmadehealthey Thanks for your comment an interesting interpretation, but that is the greatness of haiku (and most poetry I would suppose) it opens the mind for such through the emotions the words bring forth. I take it as a high compliment that this poem has achieved that. Thanks again

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      maven101 7 years ago from Northern Arizona

      The frigid fields of granite...engraved with memories of times past, of times greatly struggled, times of our short-lived lives...

      Compelling imagery, Hmrjmr1...Thank you for this.

      They sleep a warriors sleep, God bless them all...Larry

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      Hmrjmr1 7 years ago from Georgia, USA

      Maven101 - Thank you sir! May they sleep well..GBY

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      Celia Myers 7 years ago from Canada

      Another excellent poem. I hope to read many more of yours. Please keep on writing!

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      Hmrjmr1 7 years ago from Georgia, USA

      Celia - So glad you liked it, I will Do So!

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      Holle Abee 7 years ago from Georgia

      Awesome! I love the "granite grow" part. I've never thought of headstones growing, but it's a great analogy.

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      Hmrjmr1 7 years ago from Georgia, USA

      Just an old soldier's twisted lens, Thanks Habee!

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      Hummingbird5356 7 years ago

      Good poem. I have never tried to write Haikus. They are not as easy as they look, you have to get so much information into a small space.

      Keep it up.

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      Hmrjmr1 7 years ago from Georgia, USA

      HB5356 - thank you glad you enjoyed it!

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