We ran!
Some ran for charity,
others just for clarity.
Some ran for a loved one long since passed,
others ran just for the chance.
Some ran to win the race,
others just in hopes to place.
The reasons they ran changed extremely fast,
as the excitement of finishing was interrupted with a blast.
Chaos and confusion as white smoke fills the sky,
screams of terror from were spectators lie.
We ran, yes we ran, but not away.
The strength of Bostonians is here to stay.
We ran through the streets to win a different race,
to bring back faith in the human race.
We ran toward the sound of the blast,
sheltering the wounded without being asked.
We bandaged limbs that had been torn apart,
carrying the wounded to a safer spot.
We ran, yes we ran, but not away.
The strength of Bostonians is here to stay.
We ran through the streets to win a different race,
to bring back faith in the human race.
Comments
AUTHORThank you Torry and Strength.
This is an amazing poem. Very touching and inspiring in the wake of such a tragedy.
Wow this poem was absolutely beautiful and speaks of the tragedy that happened to Boston. Voted up shared and pinned for others to see.
Erik,
I guess I was giving her more of a shout out then protecting her and I didn't mean to imply that you attacked her. I think constructive criticism is great and I certainly welcome it anytime, but as she said, her focus was on the tragedy not necessarily poem structure. Sorry, I couldn't leave it alone. :-)
once again I'm not a troll just trying to help, I loved the poem, Cat there's no need to protect anyone since no ones being attacked, wildove is being appreciated by me, I just don't wish her to fall into the traps that other writers fall into, where they ruin good poems by having bad structure and poor placement, anyways it was great to talk with both of you I don't think anymore needs stated, what a way to some up the event, as I stated earlier your poem was enjoyed by me to whatever effect you give my comments.
Amen.
wildove5,
...And emotions you captured beautiful! I think it served every bit of its purpose! Loved it, loved it, loved it!
- AUTHOR
We ran, is the title of the poem,,,, and I was writing with more focus on the event and emotions than being grammatically correct. Had this been an assignment, perhaps I would have dissected it and made changes. My emotions were raw at the time and I wrote more for therapeutic reasons. I value opinions and accept criticism, However, writing is also an art, and the beauty is in the eye of the beholder. Once again, thanks for the comments.
Erik,
I don't think that you were rude and actually I hope that I didn't offend you either. I know that each time we post a Hub, we expose ourselves to the community and await any criticism, it's a vulnerable place. Personally, I don't care if someone rips my hubs to shred, I'm just protecting my wildove5.
variety is the spice of life, every poet develops in their own way, i wasn't giving criticism persay, just wished for there not to be race twice in a row at the end of the poem and wished that some wasn't repeated three times at the beginning and we ran repeated 5 times, these things can be pareclled out and in my opinion dull down a very good poem
- AUTHOR
Well said Cat, well said!
One of the things that I love about this place is that everyone has their own writing style. Personally, I enjoy the different kinds of poetry that I find across the board from the light-hearted and simple to the deep, dark and dreary. Though some are long and some are short and some rhyme and some do not; I would rather have it this way then us all working from the same Literary How To book.
Cat
Well the poem itself was entriely unified, smooth flowing, and had proper rhyme, I guess my only contention point really was the use of language wasn't verbose enough, it is a great poem though, a unifying poem that only brings to mind happy feelings to what could've been a tragedy
- AUTHOR
Erik, thanks for the comments and constructive criticism. Did you feel the poem lacked flow or was too short? Please elaborate!
Thank you also to
GaPlumber
Fy
Sg brown
Petenali
and my gal, Cat.
Your kind comments and votes are greatly appreciated.
I couldn't help but like the phrase we ran but not away a poignant phrase to describe the marathon, while the whole of the poem wasn't all unified I still enjoyed it. Easy to relate to from anyones perspective.
This is great, I am glad you found your pencil. plumber
A wonderful poem that truly captures the human spirit. You can see it all over the world every night on the news. Sure, some run away. Self preservation is very strong as well as human nature...and at times a better choice. But the human spirit is to help others in need. Even in times when their own safety is not assured. I also agree with ImKarn. Kudos to them for their help and to you for writing this. Nicely done, and shared.
This is a beautiful tribute to to those at the marathon. I am like Karn, I wish they would find them and blow them to pieces right at the finish line of the race! What cowards they are! This is a wonderful piece! Up and awesome. :)
How wonderful is that beautiful part of the human spirit that rises up at times of crisis to overshadow that depraved part of a human that caused the crisis in the first place. Good DOES triumph over evil. First responders truly do run in when others are running away. I have done it myself and self-preservation is never considered at that moment in time.
Nicely written and poignant. Voted up.
wildove5,
This is beautiful! I could cry reading it. It hurts to read today and will still mean something years from now. You contributed to history with this one. I so love it!
Cat
- AUTHOR
Thank you ImKarn, I hope if they do catch the person/persons responsible and the media doesn't utter their name, organization or photo. Throw them in a cell of darkness with only bread and water until their true judgment day arrives. Forget about them and celebrate the victims and the heroic ones. Focusing only on the good may be the demise of all that is evil! Thanks for the share!
yes you certainly DID run directly into the war zone - noted and respected by the rest of a shocked and disgusted world (at least - the CIVILIZED WORLD - the one that doesn't need to hide bombs amidst women and children!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!)
i hope they execute every single person responsible, and - i believe a good spot would be the finish line of the B.M!
i don't see as how 3 hots and a cot - AND a cell phone - AND a martyrdom - is JUSTICE!
THIRTEEN people have lost limbs - some multiple - and TEN more are at risk to!
180 lives are changed forever - AND - the lives of their loved ones!
Happy Patriots Day?
If it weren't for those who ran towards - instead of away from - it would have turned out even more tragically!
Thank you!
voted/shared/ and posting on my fb page as FOTD!
- AUTHOR
Thank you Gypsy. For the share and the prayer!
Voted up and beautiful Wonderful tribute. We must go on. Have put my prayers in for everyone. Passing this on.
- AUTHOR
Thank you very much Faith, especially for the blessing!
What a profound write!!!! Just beautiful . . . .
Voted up ++++ and sharing
God bless you. In His Love, Faith Reaper
- AUTHOR
Thank you all, My heart was heavy with grief as I watched the news footage of the explosions, the longer I watched the more I realized the strength and true character of the people in this country. I only wish that it didn't take a tragedy for us to show it! Thanks for all your kind comments!
So good that you were able to write this lovely, determined little poem right after the awful event. These monsters are everywhere - insane, cruel, dreadful people. You really don't know what to say about them, just wish they could be more effectively deterred from their evil.
wildove5...beautifully written.. Isn't it a shame that we must endure these horrendous actions of mankind to make us stronger ? We had several friends that ran in Monday's race... and thankfully they are back home and unharmed...but for the awful memory...
Thank you for writing this story for all the victims of yesterday's race.
I appreciate that you acknowledged the EMT's and others running into
the mass of people trying to find a place of safety. Our First Responders
never get enough credit for their heroic actions.
Great work!!
DJ.
Thank you for writing this tribute. Tragedy most definitely brings out the best in all of us, and yesterday was a perfect example of that. Lovely work my friend.
- AUTHOR
The human spirit is amazing Wayne. It is sad that it sometimes take a tragedy for all to see it!
I heard many more stories this morning of the true hearts of Americans well done.
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