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My first fun attempt at Flashfiction!

Updated on April 20, 2015

What do you think happened?

This is my first attempt at a flash fiction story - I don't know if it fits the format however I couldn't resist writing this:

Ernie turned the key in the door, and then after removing it rattled the handle to make sure it was locked. He put his keys in his pocket, turned and stepped down from the step and walked up the garden path. There was a damp breeze, and the dull cloudy sky only promised more rain. He put up his collar and stepped casually out on to the street. He lived on a quiet street, a quiet neighbourhood.

He walked slowly up the road and noticed the neighbour’s cat Flora – she was not a very nice cat, in fact Ernie was convinced she hated, just him even though some of the neighbours had insisted this was not the case. Flora watched him intently, her glaring eyes checking his every move – Ernie crossed the street. He walked a little further and noticed the postman coming up the street – this was a new guy- he wondered what had happened to the other postie – Harold?

Ernie just continued walking up the street; he just took things as they come, and never thought too much about anything. He hated drama, complications and had always been like that. Ernie stopped at the traffic lights, pushed the button and waited patiently for the lights even though there was not much traffic – he then ambled across the road and headed to the small corner store and entered. Just as he was about to bend and pick up some bread there was suddenly a huge bang, a sound that seemed to shake the whole world, his world, then everything seemed to go black……

So here we are wondering what happened to Ernie…who knows? What do you think happened?


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      Chris Mills 

      3 years ago from Flagstaff, AZ

      Hi Lorraine, I always welcome more flash fiction to HP. The secret, of course, is to keep writing them. It does get easier. You have begun well, so keep it up. If you haven't done this yet, I suggest reading the "How to write Flash Fiction" by other hubbers here on HP. There are several and you will find a good deal of insight this way. Good luck with it, and I look forward to more fine stories from you.

    • thetruanttrain profile imageAUTHOR


      3 years ago from Montreal

      Thanks so much! Your comment is appreciated!

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      3 years ago

      Interesting story! I really enjoyed it!

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      Aunty Margaret. 

      3 years ago

      Well done very good, i enjoyed reading your story, hope there is more to come, !!

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      Christos Antonaros 

      3 years ago from Athens, Greece

      Indeed. By the way I would appreciate your opinion on my stories too!

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      3 years ago

      Thanks a lot - You're right - trying to get a story with beginning, middle and end in only a certain amount of words is harder than one might think.

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      Christos Antonaros 

      3 years ago from Athens, Greece

      Nice first try! Flash Fiction is a difficult project and you did really good!


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