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When God Doesn't Answer: a short poem

Updated on June 3, 2014

Art & Poetry by Brian Loewer

A short poem

Cold steel and death

shoved against her flesh.

Dark devoured her screams,

as she pleaded with each breath.

Letting out 'No's!' and elbows,

she threw them from her back

with the fury of God!

She fought against the act,

but with wrists and movement

fastened in his grip,

she had not a chance

to grab the secret on her hip.

So she flailed,

face pale in despair.

Scratching concrete

with nobody there.

His glares of pure evil

slammed against her eyes

and with one last gasp

she tried...

to reach her piece,

remembering the words

the pastor preached,

"Thou shall not kill."

Thou kill she must.

Concealed carry,

she felt it,

a trigger's touch.

So, she prayed again,

but God had no reply.

With her hand full of led,

she shot the devil till he died.

© July 03, 2013 Brian M. Loewer All rights reserved.

More poetry by this author:

Footprints You've Made

Whiskey and a Bible

Behind the Reflection

Sunday Brunch


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      Jinet Marte 4 years ago from Providence, RI

      Wow this is so graphic but in such a poetic way. Kinda makes me feel like I was in the middle of it all!! Very intelligent use of the drama in all the vivid details.

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      Ausseye 4 years ago

      What the fuck ….justice served, oh so well

      Giving it’s rich reward for utter disrespect

      Lead, true to nature, in it’s fury flight

      One ape less in this small world

      And one more amendment to add to all humanity

      We are all born equal, deserving of respect

      Equal and free to choose our own unique individual path.

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      Lurana Brown 4 years ago from Chicagoland, Illinois

      Vivid and powerful and thought-provoking! ~Lurana

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      Brian Loewer 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon

      Hey Pamela- thanks for reading. I appreciate your insight on my poem. I always love hearing what others take from them. Enjoy your weekend!

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      Pamela Oglesby 4 years ago from United States

      This poem really tells the story of fear and the fight for survival. Even though she the brief thought of God's commandment, He did not say do not defend yourself. Well done!

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      Brian Loewer 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon

      No doubt about it xstatic. Thanks for the read and UP! Always greatly appreciated.

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      Jim Higgins 4 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

      And he richly deserved it. Up!

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      Brian Loewer 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon

      Thanks FitnezzJim! Glad you liked this one.

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      FitnezzJim 4 years ago from Fredericksburg, Virginia

      Well done. Under stress, the instict for survival ('I don't want to die') trumps higher principle ('Thou shall not kill').