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When The Demons Come

Updated on November 26, 2013

The Beast

Crawling inside

a scavenger sits.

Lurking,

it waits.

sleeping

until it sees

prey to feed on.

Quietly it stays

under the surface.

When its prey

is weak enough,

it begins to feed.

It grows,

the host now a shell.

The parasite creates a new home.

in what was never alive.


"The Lonely"

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      Romeos Quill 4 years ago from Lincolnshire, England

      A macabre picture, slightly reminiscent of the ' Alien ' movies, but with the host of the parasite, not really being alive to begin with, makes it mysteriously less of a horror, although I still wouldn't want to give it a man-hug lol! Very descriptive!

      Sincerely,

      R.Q.

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      Very creative interpretation! Thanks for visiting again! I like the comparison to horror or science fiction.

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      dreamseeker2 4 years ago

      Scarey thought, isn't it? But so real, for so many who suffer with it...depression is an evident evil to ones soul. Voted it up and interesting.

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      Jose Velasquez 4 years ago from Lodi, New Jersey

      I know depression all to well because its the most common emotion I feel being Bi-polar. I have to fight through it every day, because it really does try to take over.

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      Martin Kloess 4 years ago from San Francisco

      Thank you for this journey into your imagination.

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      Wayne Barrett 4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Very profound, Jennifer.there are a lot of empty lives out there with no will to care. These are minds that can be easily consumed.

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      Thank you Wayne! Yes, there are so many suffering out there. Thankfully, there is also a great deal of help. It's still a struggle everyday. I am happy that you liked the piece. Thanks for the read and the encouragement! It is always appreciated!

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      Mhatter, I am not sure you want to spend too much time in my brain.....but I thank you for visiting!!!

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      I feel for you Phillydreamer. May your struggle be easier. And I thank you for visiting!

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      So many people suffer in silence. The more we talk about it the less stigma will there be! I thank you for the kindness of your comment!

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      Sunny River 4 years ago from A Place Without A Name which resides somewhere between Fantasy and Belief, just north of Reality

      Powerful and so beautifully said. The metaphor is perfect.

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      Thank you Sunny River! I very much appreciate you saying so and stopping by !

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      Theresa Ast 4 years ago from Atlanta, Georgia

      Well, I feel shallow and a little dumb. I took the poem literally and was thinking of physical parasites. Oh, well. Good poem nevertheless. :)

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      Oh phdast! Don't feel dumb! I am just sorry I may have not achieved that level that you have commented on other of my poems! I am sure it is my fault and not yours !

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      Cat 4 years ago from New York

      Theater girl,

      Wow, this is deep and powerful! Isn't it hard to die when you're already not living? This is a little different than what I've seen of yours so far, but proof that you are not restricted in any way! Excellent!

      Tons of votes and sharing!

      Cat

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      Cat, thank you so much! Yes I have a dark side....thankfully, I have learned how to not spend much time there anymore. But I do always fight the demon in the corner! Thanks for the votes and unbelievable encouragement! You are very kind!

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      Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton

      oh I like this...

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      I am so happy you stopped by Frank! And thank you!

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      Eiddwen 4 years ago from Wales

      Brilliant and voted up.

      Eddy.

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      Eddy,

      Brilliant?! oh my hat a wonderful thing to say! Thanks for the visit and for stopping by!

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      Tijani Achamlal 4 years ago from Morocco

      Excellent job here.You describe the moment of weakness in a beautiful way .I think the dark thoughts pounce on us when we give it a chance or when we are in a deep abyss of sadness and we think there is no way out.

      Voted up

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      Thank you James. I agree. I view it now as something I can control....but it was not always the case, as this poem describes! I appreciate the votes up!

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      epigramman 4 years ago

      Hello and good afternoon dear Jennifer - well I suffer from depression, anxiety and high blood pressure so I could relate to this very well, unfortunately, but the fortunate part is you are such a wonderfully inventive writer that I thought I was watching a David Cronenberg film in my cinematic mind - and that is always the work of a special writer and that special writer is you.

      Sending warm wishes from Colin and his cats at lake erie time ontario canada 1:54pm

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      Colin, I am so sorry that you suffer. Depression has been a part of my life since I was very young. I have learned many lessons about myself in learning how to deal with it. Writing has always been a way out, even when nobody ever saw it. So for someone such as yourself, to leave a compliment like this....well it is overwhelming and humblingly. Be well, take care of yourself, thank you and blessings on your journey!

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      Cat 4 years ago from New York

      Theater girl,

      I guess we probably all have a dark side; it's just a matter of how much time we spend over there... I'm trying to stay away from mine as best I can :-) Writing like this probably helps to release some of the negativity within our dark side... very much appreciated!

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      Go towards the light Cat! Thanks for the visit!

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      Jim Higgins 4 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

      As seen from the comments, this is a multi-layered and very well-written poem!

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      Thank You xstatic. I always enjoy the reader's take on something I have written and it always surprises me! I am happy you think it is well done!

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      Lurana Brown 4 years ago from Chicagoland, Illinois

      I love that this one can be interpreted on different levels. I have suffered from depression my whole life and can see that interpretation very well. I really like the dark, symbolic voice here.

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      Thank you so much! I think the interpretation is very important. And I am glad you enjoyed the piece! Thanks for visiting and commenting!

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      ocfireflies 4 years ago from North Carolina

      I think you described the demon so well. I especially like how you show how one's state of mind can turn on him/her so quickly. Excellent job.

      Best Always,

      Kim

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      Thank you Kim! I am glad that you enjoyed this. And yes, it can. Thank you for reading!

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      Escobana 4 years ago from Valencia

      As I can relate to the feeling or shall we say non-feeling of depression, your poem absolutely expresses the empty whole it leaves in a persons body and mind.

      Excellent poem! Very strong!

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      Thank you very much! I like your work as well, thank you for stopping by and reading some of mine !

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      Jim Higgins 4 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

      Really interesting reading the poem and comments here. My mind was going the literal way with the parasite inhabiting and eventually devouring its host, but it works so well too on other levels as show by the comments.

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      Thanks xstatic! Yes, I knew how I meant the poem....but it is interesting that others have constructed an entirely different meaning! Thanks as always for reading and your generous comments! ;)

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      QudsiaP1 4 years ago

      Deeply profound!

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      Thanks QudsiaP1! That is a wonderful thing to say! Thanks for the comment and for stopping by!

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      Shannon 4 years ago from Texas

      Very. . well. . . as so many others have said. . .profound. Hope that came purely from imagination and not from feeling that way long.

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      Thank you shanmarie,

      Unfortunately, it does come from life. But luckily I am very well past this place! Writing about it helps as does the encouragment of comments like yours!

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      Sueswan 4 years ago

      Hi Theater girl

      "When its prey

      is weak enough,

      it begins to feed."

      Vivid imagery of depression.

      Voted up and awesome

      Take care

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      Jennifer 4 years ago from New Jersey

      Thanks so much sueswan! I appreciate the compliments and the votes! Thanks for stopping by!

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      Dragisa 3 years ago from Branicevo

      Great work . I can't believe I didn't found this sooner .

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      Jennifer 3 years ago from New Jersey

      Thank you Angel! And nice to have you here! I am glad you found it. I appreciate the complaint and the visit!

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      Bill Holland 3 years ago from Olympia, WA

      I've been there my friend and you captured it perfectly. Such darkness of the soul...and so happy I no longer visit the demons. :)

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      Jennifer 3 years ago from New Jersey

      Thank you also my friend! I am honored that someone who has had the experience sees this as well done and evocative of the emotions involved. Thanks as always for the visit and your generous words. You are too kind!

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