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Who Is Our Most Dangerous Enemy?

Updated on March 31, 2013

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What is it that we struggle against,
What causes our hurt what gives us pain;
Is it someone else attacking me,
Or is it my own heart or my own brain?


Is that callous force I feel upon me,
The grip of an enemy's assault;
Or is it only what I give in to feel,
Is my hurt my own f*cking fault?


I'm not afraid of any man,
But exactly what do I resist;
When I permit the strike to hurt?
I suppose that's why I'm pissed.

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original sketch my me

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      MickeySr 4 years ago from Hershey, Pa.

      tillsontitan ~ thank you so much for your favorable review . . . but, I am feeling a bit embarrassed.

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      Mary Craig 4 years ago from New York

      This wonderful poem can be interpreted in so many ways, some of which are already mentioned here. I see it as becoming aware of yourself and your own faults and learning its not the end of the world to have problems...of course that probably has nothing to do with why you wrote this, but that's the sign of a great poem....one that makes people think and lets them interpret the words in the way the words touch their heart.

      Voted up, awesome, and beautiful.

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      MickeySr 4 years ago from Hershey, Pa.

      lone77star ~ you say "to me . . ." but you 'get' exactly my thoughts and intention behind this piece - thanks for the encouraging comment.

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      epigramman 5 years ago

      ......love this form of poetic catharsis in which you write ....normally I stay away from profanity in my own writing because there are other effective and creative ways to get one's point across but that said - sometimes ya just gotta let it fly - and you fly with the best of them!!!!

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      kimberlyslyrics 5 years ago

      mickey

      have now combined all blogs to

      http://unnecessarypoetry.wordpress.com/

      so your work is there

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      kimberlyslyrics 5 years ago

      lone, great comment, wish I could articulate such ways. Thank you, loved this too!

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      Rod Martin Jr 5 years ago from Cebu, Philippines

      Mickey, amen to that! Wow, powerful piece--full of searching, passion and profundity. And I have to agree, you are one in-control dude. I keep learning from you.

      To me (and this is only my meager interpretation), this piece talks of ego--the source of all hurt, anguish, violence, rage, sensitivity to perceived insults, vulnerability, victim and an army of other ills.

      The struggle is so pervasive, many do not even realize it exists. Those who truly seek Christ know of it. The feel the salve of His love, healing us from the hurt.

      I agree with Kimberly. Very healing poem. That such a topic could touch so deeply in a gentle manner is true art. I suppose such art depends a lot on what the viewer brings to it. I suppose they have to be hungry for the message.

      Love you, bro

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      MickeySr 5 years ago from Hershey, Pa.

      bbnix, I'm so happy to have come here to find this, and delighted to let you know that you can relax your vigilant mania aimed at me. When you charge me with seeking after too much of Kimberly's attention I pause and consider if that may be the case (as I've said before, my genuine interest is not to cause her any distress whatsoever) . . . I honestly don't know if you may be seeing something legitimately out-of-line in me that I myself am blind to, or not. Now, I'm happy to report "not".

      If you can read some dumb poem and imagine that you see in me some impulse for violence and potential to hurt others, then you not only don't 'get' poetry but you observably don't 'get' me . . . and, when you attach the notion of "out of control" to me, you evidence a ludicrous lack of insight - I may just be the single most 'in control' individual on the face of the planet, and I have objective professional evaluations a court testimony to substantiate what everyone who actually knows not only knows but is regularly flustered by . . . bbnix, sorry but, I am 'Mickey "in control" Sr'.

      So, as I said, you can abandon your vendetta against me, you've made it apparent that you don't know what you're talking about, there's no real problem here at all, you were just confused at bit.

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      bbnix 5 years ago from Southern California

      Lovely violent theme you have here...seek medical help before someone really gets hurt by you...and you really want these to be the thoughts and images you conjure up in people's minds you care about...dude, you're out of control...seek professional help....

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      MickeySr 5 years ago from Hershey, Pa.

      Thank you, always.

      (did you get my reply?)

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      kimberlyslyrics 5 years ago

      writing is so healing. Keep em coming k?

      love the sketch too.

      kimberly