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Without thy hand...

Updated on September 9, 2012

It is the wild whistling wind that blows from the West

Which brings to mind thoughts of yesteryear

When I first met thee on the highest of cliffs

Back home in Scotland, core of my heart so dear


Ever so sweetly I set my eyes upon thee

Watching thy long flowing gown being swept about

And beaten at the wind’s command

With thy long fiery locks brushing defiantly

Against firmly pressed lips

Seducing me as they dance on thy countenance


That day of many blessings is why I now sigh

For it was then that I became who I am as a man

And it is fitting that I be grateful and not deny

Thy splendid youthful love I did receive so kind

And all that you made me feel deep down inside


I never did return to the land of my birth

Since that day in May when I was cursed

By a rival who I did cut with my sword

And thereafter had to flee on ship aboard


I sailed across the sea to No Man's Land

Without thy hand

Oh Lord!

Without thy hand

I have forsaken thee and thy love forever more

With thy memory as all I have to hold

I love thee!

“And I love thee in return,” I hear thy voice say

From whence you now reside

In the windy chambers of my mind.


© Copyright Maria D'Alessandro 2012. All Rights Reserved.

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      Graham Lee 3 years ago from Lancashire. England.

      Hi scrittobene. An absolute delight. I read it three times. Tip Top.

      voted up all and following.

      Graham.

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      Maria D'Alessandro 4 years ago from Melbourne Australia

      @ AudreyHowitt - Many thanks for dropping by. Cheers.

      @Swati17 - Glad you appreciated my imagery. Cheers.

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      Swati Chandiramani 4 years ago from India

      Loved it !!!! It converts to a perfect picture as I read each line!!! Happy Hubbing!! Voted up !!

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      Audrey Howitt 4 years ago from California

      Beautiful write--such fluidity in the lines---

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      Maria D'Alessandro 4 years ago from Melbourne Australia

      @Vincent - Thanks so much for appreciating those earlier times in human history where as you say, love was sweet and chivalry was synonymous with a gentleman's character. It is I believe, our privilege as poets and writers to share the grace and beauty of such noble times both in our language and imagery. Thank you for joining me as a writer on Hubpages who feels an affinity for the old world and is keen to keep it alive for a little while longer.

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      Vincent Moore 4 years ago

      Your thee's and thou's are a throw back to earlier times, how sweet their sound. Your absolutely correct in your thinking about sentimental times and expressions from the heart and soul of lovers. Poetry was made from the tenderness that came from lovers hearts and souls. It took on a beautiful texture and meaning by the scribe and it showed in his/her verse. Oh to be back in time when LOVE was so sweet and chivalry was dominant in a man's character and stature. Well done my poet.

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      Tom Balunis 4 years ago

      Very nicely written. Nice poem.

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      Maria D'Alessandro 4 years ago from Melbourne Australia

      @Laurinzo / @ Gypsy Rose Lee - To me it is sometimes more poetic to write about days of old when there seemed to be more intense sentiment and life was not dominated by material pursuits as it is today. In those more noble and romantic times, a simple kiss would be earth shattering and a lover's gaze filled with desire, would most certainly light up the world like a summer sunrise. Thank you for commenting dear colleagues.

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      Maria D'Alessandro 4 years ago from Melbourne Australia

      @ xstatic /@ always exploring / @girishpuri / @Mhatter99

      Thank you all so very much for dropping by and commenting

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      Voted up and awesome. This is so lovely Maria. The images of a lovely country like Scotland, true love parted just fantastic. Reminds me of a lovely old musical with Gene Kelly called Brigadoon. Passing this on.

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      Martin Kloess 4 years ago from San Francisco

      Someone was touched with the spirit! Thank you for taking us on this flight with you.

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      Girish puri 4 years ago from NCR , INDIA

      Outstanding, good flow, the words, and the emotions, well done.

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      Live To Write 4 years ago from Phoenix, Az.

      I agree with always exploring... an incredible journey to a more noble (at least it seems) time, and definitely more romantic one. It is the style of that sense that you have channeled "something" from that distant time and place. I loved it!!!

      Just as you did with some of your other poetry... another voice indeed!

      Laurinzo

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

      I agree. The language used was in era of swash buckling. I loved it..Thank you.

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      Jim Higgins 4 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

      Beautiful poem about a soul thought lost, set in a time when the language used was appropriate. Up!

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      Maria D'Alessandro 4 years ago from Melbourne Australia

      @Senoritaa - thank you much for dropping by and commenting.

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      Maria D'Alessandro 4 years ago from Melbourne Australia

      @ beardsiolli - yea!!! Thank you Col. You're opinion means a lot to me - and I'm lucky because you're my very own private English tutor. :) LOL

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      Senoritaa 4 years ago

      Very good indeed. The language, the flow, the emotions, all come together in this beautiful piece of art.

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      beardsiolli 4 years ago

      Of course Maria, a very big YES.

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      Maria D'Alessandro 4 years ago from Melbourne Australia

      @ beardsiolli - Thank you Col - I need you to keep me in check ha ha ha - Well, in Literature I studied the old English poets and I sometimes like to employ some good old English expressions. I didn't mean for this poem to be a modern poem as such. I wanted it to be archaic in style and language. I think it flows nicely using "thy" and "thee" etc. There seems to be more poetic flow as such and I hope it doesn't sound too stuffy. I was in an 1800's kind of mood I guess :) The question remains, after setting aside the literary technicalities here, did you like the story Col? LOL (please say yes).

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      beardsiolli 4 years ago

      scrittobene.

      Very good example of first person narrative, where you have inhabited the mind of the person telling his thoughts. I know you are using an historical perspective but you should beware of using archaic words in modern poetry. Words such as 'thee' and 'thy' are really outdated and have no place in contemporary language. Having said that, in Yorkshire where I live people still used 'thee', 'thy' and 'tha' even today. Some might say "Tha't a reight un thee." which translates as "You are a right one you".

      Not a criticism, but merely passing on advice given to me while at University. I hope this is helpful scrittobene.

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      Maria D'Alessandro 4 years ago from Melbourne Australia

      @ Epi - thank you buddy - always a treat when you're first to comment. Glad you liked it and thanks for sharing.

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      epigramman 4 years ago

      ......conjures up cinematic images of Bronte's Wuthering Heights and the Kate Bush adaptation of Wuthering Heights also ......the brooding fatalistic romance of Nick Cave's writing also .....love your storytelling sensibilities here Maria - it has such a pleasing lyrical flow and it transpired to my mind with soundtrack music courtesy of your evocative images and your alluring but ultimately chilling words - hubbravo from the epi-man and sharing this with the Hubpages FB group and the Creative Writing FB group as well - lake erie time 8:44am