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_-Surrender-_

Updated on September 8, 2013
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Last night…

I watched her die

and she sits by my side

staring into hopelessness

…but her dress is still pretty

and I am dead too

sitting here

among our empty cans

and the bathtub is now dry

and we both take a deep sigh

as the orange glow

from the fire beyond the window

reflects off our defeated faces

…and the polished barrel

of my rifle

that rests across our laps

as we listen to the axes

taking out the last chunks

of the boarded up door

of my home sweet home




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    • wayne barrett profile imageAUTHOR

      Wayne Barrett 

      4 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Thank you for the visit, shanmarie.

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      Shannon Henry 

      4 years ago from Texas

      Wow. Not sure what to say to this. It keeps me on the edge, yet it is hauntingly beautiful, too.

    • wayne barrett profile imageAUTHOR

      Wayne Barrett 

      5 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Thank you jhamann.

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      Jamie Lee Hamann 

      5 years ago from Reno NV

      Well written poetry that left a shiver up my spine. Jamie

    • wayne barrett profile imageAUTHOR

      Wayne Barrett 

      5 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Thank you Rick.

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      Valleypoet 

      5 years ago

      I love reading poetry that leaves the reader to fill the gaps, and this does this very well. Great read Wayne thank you :-))

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      Nellieanna Hay 

      5 years ago from TEXAS

      Thank you, Wayne.

      Sometimes what's unsaid says the most.

    • wayne barrett profile imageAUTHOR

      Wayne Barrett 

      5 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Nellieanna, even when you are speechless, I am always happy to see you. : )

    • wayne barrett profile imageAUTHOR

      Wayne Barrett 

      5 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Anna, I appreciate the visit.

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      Nellieanna Hay 

      5 years ago from TEXAS

      It's the second time in 3 days that I've come and read " _-Surrender-_" and I'm still left speechless.

    • wayne barrett profile imageAUTHOR

      Wayne Barrett 

      5 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Thank you Deb.

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      Anna Haven 

      5 years ago from Scotland

      Tragic but interesting. You spun an intriguing web that left a lot of questions.

    • wayne barrett profile imageAUTHOR

      Wayne Barrett 

      5 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Thank you, Rasma.

    • wayne barrett profile imageAUTHOR

      Wayne Barrett 

      5 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      thank you, Eddy.

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      Deb Hirt 

      5 years ago from Stillwater, OK

      Being together with your significant other is very important to you, no matter what is dished out to you. I applause your beliefs.

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 

      5 years ago from Riga, Latvia

      Haunting. What came to mind was the old Bette Davis movie Hush, hush Sweet Charlotte.

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      Eiddwen 

      5 years ago from Wales

      Wonderful as always Wayne.

      eddy.

    • wayne barrett profile imageAUTHOR

      Wayne Barrett 

      5 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Good to see you, Romeo. Thanks for stopping by.

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      Wayne Barrett 

      5 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Thank you for the visit, manatita.

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      Wayne Barrett 

      5 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Thank you for the visit Kathryn.

    • wayne barrett profile imageAUTHOR

      Wayne Barrett 

      5 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Thank you Michael.

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      Romeos Quill 

      5 years ago from Lincolnshire, England

      Eviction and poverty of an honest, hard-working couple in their golden years, on the day of being ousted from their farmstead perhaps? Just an educated guess, but an interesting write Wayne.

      Best Wishes,

      R.Q.

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      Wayne Barrett 

      5 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Thank you Sha. I think dark and beautiful definitely can go together.

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      manatita44 

      5 years ago from london

      surrender indeed!! Loving thoughts.

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      Kathryn 

      5 years ago from Manchester, Connecticut

      That sounds like it would make a great piece for a dark horror movie.

      ~ Kathryn

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      cleaner3 

      5 years ago from Pueblo, Colorado

      Wayne .. this is deep .. won't try to know what you write about.. but it is dark and makes the reader think ..Awesome

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      Shauna L Bowling 

      5 years ago from Central Florida

      Wow, Wayne. I don't know what to say! This is dark, yet beautiful at the same time. Is that possible?

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