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blunt force trauma

Updated on November 26, 2013

blunt force trauma


Why do I grieve in the wake and the language of dreams?

My images do not reveal the world.

They are memories; I am scarred

By the words let loose and unfurled.


Though why should I grieve, night time thoughts will disappear.

My hurts will linger but for however long it’s hard to say

Not because I am special, unique or spectacular

Just lacking distinction and revealing dismay.


If I should grieve, what good would it do?

No matter how many books I read,

I am me and you are you.

No need for flower gardens planted with one seed.


Like Professor Higgins and Colonel Pickering,

Eliza’s country girl’s charm failed your tests.

We would’ve never made it for all the dickering.

Maybe next dame will carry tune that keeps you interested.


“The rain in Spain stays mainly in the plain!”

A fair lady I am not.

Nothing new I am afraid,

If I am anything, I am insane.


So no need to grieve on this day or the next

Because no matter how hard I try

I’ll never pass your tests

And while I’m stronger, tears I will cry


And if I could change my sensitive sensibilities,

So I could meet your ever-growing expectations,

Nothing would change the real you I have seen:

The things you called me created a great awakening.


Maybe you were tired and sleep-deprived.

You really did not mean to be cruel and incredibly snide,

But you promoted yourself as a spiritual guide -

one who is cool, calm and on my side.


Of course, I should have remembered times before

When people came into my life liking me for me

Only to learn later that could only be

If I changed into the vision they devised for me.

"By George she's got it!"

Eliza

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      Sally Gulbrandsen 3 years ago from Norfolk

      ocfireflies - My feeling is that we are all special and unique in our own way and if people don't like us you for who we are then there should be no space in our life for them. Pretty deep poem - I always find myself trying to look behind the words .......

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      Max Havlick 3 years ago from Villa Park, Illinois

      WHERE IS ANOTHER POETESS IN VIEW?

      An American Sonnet

      -

      Where is another poetess in view

      illuminating others more than you?

      But not because you are insane, my dear,

      because it's plain for all to see you're not:

      you cry what life is all about, or not;

      you're right, awakening brings life to life,

      the bitter strife redeeming bitter strife.

      -

      It seems you’ve now perfected your first act,

      “I feel so sorry for myself, in fact,

      what awful people I seem to attract!”

      Because it’s never good to overact,

      and second act does not from first detract.

      Awakening your sunny side with tact

      will give perspective to your other act.

      -

      Your talent and your growing point of view

      continues to make wonderment of you.

      -

      Best wishes to you and your readers,

      Your drama teacher

      Monday, November 18, 2013

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      Jamie Lee Hamann 3 years ago from Reno NV

      Kim, two things here. One, I was in musical theatre in High School (A Drama Nerd through and through) and I appreciate the Pygmalion/My Fair Lady references. Two, you have hit the nail on the head, for the reasons you have pointed out I have difficulty with people (and other deeper rooted issues) thank you for this poem and keep them coming. Jamie

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      cleaner3 3 years ago from Pueblo, Colorado

      I like this Kim..

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      ocfireflies 3 years ago from North Carolina

      sallybea,

      Poetry should be about deeper meanings, and yet I believe you understood completely what I was thinking. Will be over shortly to read about how to create edible bread frogs.

      Max,

      Interesting comments per usual.

      Jamie,

      Is it not wild how bonds can be made with just words? While we have never met face to face, you make me feel welcome, and that's something I really appreciate. And if you are a nerd, then I am one, too. Thanks for being you.

      Michael,

      Thank you for saying you "like this."

      Many Blessings to all and continued thanks for reading my work,

      Kim

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      Kathryn S. Carrington 3 years ago from Maryland

      Very nicely done and we are only human after-all. Perfection in any person or thing is only as we see it; for even the creation of man proved to be an imperfection for God, no matter what religion suggest or we would not need forgiveness. Faith is something attained from peace within and never in any person. That's just the way it is. Thanks for sharing such a wonderful play with words and a beautiful poem.

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      ocfireflies 3 years ago from North Carolina

      Authorkat,

      We are indeed human after all, and I agree we must find our peace within. Thanks for reading and leaving such lovely comments.

      Many Blessings,

      Kim

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      wetnosedogs 3 years ago from Alabama

      Very well said.

      Enjoyed this.

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      Bill Holland 3 years ago from Olympia, WA

      Oddly I am writing about this subject tomorrow....or a related subject anyway. Not as beautifully as you have done, Kim, but what can you expect? :) Beautiful work.

      bill

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      Vincent Moore 3 years ago

      Words can destroy us mentally or lift us up to the stars. I have seen both the good, bad and ugly in people who use them for their gain, belittling others to boost themselves up. Your words are very poignant and hit a nerve. why do we expect so much from one another. My mother was always brought down by my father, she was imperfect in his eyes, we all paid the price of subjugation.This piece is beautiful, although numbing in some ways, I enjoyed the brilliance of your chosen words.

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      Wayne Barrett 3 years ago from Clearwater Florida

      Beautiful work Kim. Your poetry is top notch.

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      Jackie Lynnley 3 years ago from The Beautiful South

      Well kindred spirit, we speak the same language even if we use different words and we both possess a woman's heart. ^

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      ocfireflies 3 years ago from North Carolina

      wetnosedogs,

      Thanks for the kind words and support.

      Bill,

      Creative minds think alike. : )

      Vincent,

      I am sad for anyone who is called names that are mean and hurtful. I agree that there is so much power in words. And we are lifted by them, it can make us feel as if we can touch the stars. I appreciate the kind words you used to describe my poem.

      Wayne,

      Calling my poetry "Top-notch" from you is a huge compliment.

      Jackie,

      Thank you for being a kindred and woman with a beautiful heart. I appreciate the vote as well.

      Thanks to all for letting my day begin with your kind words,

      Kim

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      Mike Robbers 3 years ago from London

      Very nice hub Kim,made my day :)

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      Suzette Walker suzettetaos 3 years ago from Taos, NM

      Really insightful poem, Kim. I can relate to this one, sadly. Some people claim to like, love, and support us - but their love is only conditional. Your worlds are soft and gentle but speak a truth. Excellent poem and I love the photo - I am a big fan of the musical "My Fair Lady."

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      ocfireflies 3 years ago from North Carolina

      Mike,

      Nice to see you. So glad to have made someone's day.

      Suzette,

      I appreciate you for noting the attempt at using soft and gentle language and for calling the poem, "Excellent." I, too am a big fan of "My Fair Lady."

      Blessings to you both for starting my day off with nice comments,

      Kim

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      Dee aka Nonna 3 years ago

      You have a new fan. I love poetry in all its forms. Have always wanted to be able to write it but doesn't work when I try. Voted up and beautiful.

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      ocfireflies 3 years ago from North Carolina

      Please consider me one of your fans. I love poetry as well. It is rare when I feel like anything I write works, but when it does feel right, it is a great sort of high. I would encourage you to keep searching for that feel right. Thank you for the vote and kind comments.

      Wishing you a wonderful day,

      Kim

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      John Hansen 3 years ago from Queensland Australia

      Well My Fair Lady Kim, you certainly excelled with this wonderful poem. We always expect others to be or act a certain way, instead of celebrating their uniqueness and individuality. You my friend have a special talent and always exceed my expectations. Well done, voted up.

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      ocfireflies 3 years ago from North Carolina

      Well Jodah, My Fine Sir, your wonderful words always make my day. Thank you for saying I have a "special talent" and for the vote.

      Thank you friend for being YOU!

      Kim

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      Faith Reaper 3 years ago from southern USA

      Stellar write dearest Kim! Really fine writing. Bravo! Yes, we are all who we are, unique, and that is what makes us so beautiful in my eyes. You are a beautiful woman and gifted writer. This one is my new favorite for now : )

      Up and more and sharing

      Blessings,

      Faith Reaper

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      ocfireflies 3 years ago from North Carolina

      Faith,

      Just one word from you and I am smiling. You are the gifted one for you bring warmth with you and kindness. I appreciate you so much and your continued support is what is truly stellar.

      Many Blessings to You,

      Kim

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      Eiddwen 3 years ago from Wales

      Wonderful as always Kim and voting up for sure. Have a great day.

      Eddy.

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      ocfireflies 3 years ago from North Carolina

      Eddy,

      You always make my day, not just with your hubs, but with your kind words and support.

      Blessings,

      Kim

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      Audrey Howitt 3 years ago from California

      Somehow I missed this piece when you posted it originally. I enjoyed the juxtaposition here between the lighter Pygmalian references and the deeper very real hurt here

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