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Amorphous as the clouds

Updated on August 15, 2009
Graphic by Chris A: http://hubpages.com/hub/for-inspiration-a-challenge-of-sort
Graphic by Chris A: http://hubpages.com/hub/for-inspiration-a-challenge-of-sort

Inspired by a Chris A graphic

Amorphous as the clouds above do seem,

their misty spirits rising bid us dream.

My love appears but when I reach for him

the glow that once was there begins to dim.

And as he disappears before my eyes

the wispy cirrus wraps him in disguise

and disappearing, circles round the moon

then carries him away, where cries the loon.

And as the day fades slowly into night

I'm left to long for what once brought delight.

As deafening silence sifts through lonely space

again I see his form, his darling face.

If only he would come and ease the pain

from weakened promises that cause disdain.

But no, I'm left in searing, boundless shock

of icy dark, which creeps inside to mock.

Copyright © 2009 All rights reserved


The poem refers to lost loves and how the memories of them creep into our dreams (day or night), sometimes taking shape, sometimes remaining merely impressions, fliting and fleeting like the clouds. And with the visions may come an old unconscious desire to have that love soothe away the pain or uncertainty present in our lives

Amorphous: lacking definite form; having no specific shape; formless. Also: of no particular kind or character; indeterminate; having no pattern or structure.


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      Nancy Hinchliff 7 years ago from Essex Junction, Vermont

      Thanks, Charlie, glad you liked it.

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      ralwus 7 years ago

      I could vividly feel the emotions and power in this darlin'. Good job.

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      Nancy Hinchliff 8 years ago from Essex Junction, Vermont

      Thanks for the kind words. Glad you enjoyed the poem.

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      Dame Scribe 8 years ago from Canada

      Beautifully done AH, there are moments that are wonderful to ponder. :)

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      Nancy Hinchliff 8 years ago from Essex Junction, Vermont

      aoiffe: So glad you stopped by. Was wondering if I was going to hear from you again. Thanks so much for the nice comments.

      Mirelli: Happy that you like the poem. I guess this kind of emotional experience hits home with most of us from time to time. So glad you stopped by. Thanks.

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      Mireille G 8 years ago from Kansas

      This is so beautiful. Thank you! I lost my love many years ago and even today I can relate.

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      aoiffe379 8 years ago

      The imagery was vivid and clear.Bravo! You have given a new meaning to poetry and the natural atmosphere. hats off to Chris A too for the inspirational art work.

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      Nancy Hinchliff 8 years ago from Essex Junction, Vermont

      I'm glad you enjoyed it Cris. Funny about the rhyming thing. I envy people who can write prose poetry. I can't seem to get it right. And it never feels natural to to me. I have to work and work to create a cadence without rhyming. Thanks for the comment. I may pick out another of your images and try for prose this time, for the challenge of it.

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      Cris A 8 years ago from Manila, Philippines

      Amorphous...I like the sound of that!

      I envy those who can rhyme because I can't! LOL Everytime I try, the poem ends up soundlng unnatural, coerced, forced. Oh well, at least I can derive pleasure from others who could and do it well! Thanks for sharing this wonderful read :D

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      Nancy Hinchliff 8 years ago from Essex Junction, Vermont

      Cindy,

      How well I know. And I'm a person who does not take criticism well. But I'm learning...still growing.

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      Nancy Hinchliff 8 years ago from Essex Junction, Vermont

      VioletSun: Yes, I have been enjoying the excitement and creativity Cris A has stirred up. He truly is a wonderful catalyst. Thank you for your kind comments. I must hurry over to your site now and take a look at your contribution. I'm dying to see it. I know it'll be good.

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      Cindy Vine 8 years ago from Cape Town

      Nope, not always easy, and sometimes criticism is hard to take when what you've written is so personal.

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      Nancy Hinchliff 8 years ago from Essex Junction, Vermont

      Thanks, Cindy, another hubber-writer I have a lot of respect for. I really appreciate the comment. But writing is such a personal thing. You have to lay yourself out there on the line and it aint always easy.

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      Cindy Vine 8 years ago from Cape Town

      Alekhouse, you are good and don't you dare doubt yourself!

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      Nancy Hinchliff 8 years ago from Essex Junction, Vermont

      Frieda: Thank you for such glowing comments. They really quell the small voice inside that isn't sure yet that she can do this well. I respect your opinion, as I have read so much of your poetry and know what a wonderful craftsman you are. You've made me very happy.

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      VioletSun 8 years ago from Oregon/ Name: Marie

      I picked the same graphics from Cris as did Ripplemaker, and its so awesome to see how it has stirred up the creative side in all of us! This poem is beautiful, blends in well with the movement of the graphics.

      Thumbs up!

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      Frieda Babbley 8 years ago from Saint Louis, MO

      First thing I read on HubPages today. This is so absolutely lovely! I KNOW these feelings. I can't even choose a favorite line they are all so beautiful, so full, flowing one into the next, such feelings and images. I feel like I feel the despaire. It is the absolute perfect match for Cris's graphic. I do love your writing. I do I do I do. Jeez I'm so lucky. I feel silly saying this, but what is actually going through my mind right now is, "Look what I get to read! How lucky am I?!" Clap Clap Clap!

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      Nancy Hinchliff 8 years ago from Essex Junction, Vermont

      Thanks, Austin TX. Glad you liked the poem.

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      Austin, TX 8 years ago

      wow...really good...like this one a lot.

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      \Brenda Scully 8 years ago

      very very good I am so impressed really wonderful...