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Shattered Ideas
I've been here before not sure not knowing revealing what I don't know what I'd like to know, I think.
I'm not sure which way to go I hate not knowing which way to go to the old or to the new?
I don't mind asking help me tell me But when you do I wont want to accept it.
It doesn't feel right like a coat that's too tight too constricted Or one that's too big too heavy cumbersome.
So I creep into a corner and it gets smaller closing in no room for me I find a bigger one I go there but it doesn't feel safe It scares me They tell me to stay there.
Try it for a while there is room for new ideas But I worry how will I recognize them? How will I know if they're good or if they're bad? And where should I put them when I find them?
They float before me but when I reach for them they fall apart like charred bits of paper rising from a bondfire. I touch them and they shatter in my hands.
I press them to my head and wait, hoping they will seep inside to someplace deep within my mind, entwining and combining to form new ones.
Comments
This is an interesting style. It flows. It has rhythm. It is poetry!
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Of course it's poetry, that's what I do. :=) Thanks for noticing. I would have posted it in better form but didn't have time to fool with the html to get it right.
Beautiful thoughts expressed so beautifully...
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Thanks for the nice comments.
Love it - too funny though - like you didn't notice it was poetry...love the picture too. I like the idea of fragmented ideas coming together to form a really good one and I strive for that!
...great that they are combining to form new ones! thank you ma'am for sharing.. :)...
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You're welcome and thanks for the comment
A wonderful hub, I think I have been there but could never have told anyone about it as beautifully as you have.
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Maggs, Thank you so much for such a wonderful comment.Glad you enjoyed the poem.
I like how you ask questions and keep an open mind in this poem. This poem shows you are always investigating the world around you, and that is a good thing :).
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Thanks, SP. Glad you enjoyed the poem.
That's lovely, alekhouse. I enjoyed it's stream of consciousness style, not sure if that was the intent, however. It's a great look into the inner mind of creativity. Nicely done!
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"...consciousness style, not sure if that was the intent..." Yes that's exactly what it was. Thanks for getting it and commenting. Glad you enjoyed it.
Consciousness style... thank you Laura (Wordscribe) this certainly is a fine example of that style. I think this poem crys out to be heard... now who can find to read it out loud? Thank you for sharing this.
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Thanks again, Pearldiver. I'm really honored you took the time to read so many of my poems.
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