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Updated on February 9, 2016



Lying alone

feverish with want

praying like a hardcore sinner

that someone might bend inside my

angles and shift against my planes

until we both feel that unmistakable

click that means we fit together

with the same dumb sudden luck

that drops an odd little puzzle piece

into a corner of a picture yet unseen.

You handle me with reverent fingers,

the thought of leaving makes me

more beautiful. Rising quietly,

you wrap me in an itchy Mexican blanket

to make up for the lost warmth of your body.

You pursue me in much the same way

a child might close in on a sandpiper.

But fragile creatures are the most skittish—

able to sense the slightest shift of air

perceive the tiniest darkening of shadow.

Fearing is a part of their nature

therefore they cannot be fooled

even by the gentlest of men.

© 2010 susan beck


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      Justin W Price 

      6 years ago from Juneau, Alaska

      you're a gifted writer. this was terrifically delightful!

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      Marlin 55 

      6 years ago from USA

      You are very gifted with words. The descriptions create a every real image in my mind. This kind of lyrical writing found in narratives in novels is what makes them great poetry outstanding pieces of work. Up and beautiful.

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      Cathy Nerujen 

      7 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space

      If ever words flowed naturally and gracefully, yet with meaning and universality...then this is it. You are a great poet. I am now a fan. :)

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      Rob Welsh 

      7 years ago from Tomorrow - In Words & NZ Time.

      Don't you dare run away SF... don't be that skittish one that you describe so masterly in this piece of awesome, emotive perfection. You are so talented... I want you to know that, so you never forget that you were told this.

      You be well and never doubt your ability to craft great works.. some of us really, really appreciate your presence here. Take Care.. PD

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      7 years ago

      Always good to catch a new poem. As always, enjoyed the realism that touches us all to different degrees.

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      susan beck 

      7 years ago from drexel hill,pa

      Never, Mickey!

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      Micky Dee 

      7 years ago

      Very nice! Don't be fooled my dear!

    • Steele Fields profile imageAUTHOR

      susan beck 

      7 years ago from drexel hill,pa

      thank again, a.h. I really appreciate your lovely comments. PS that analogy took a long time to develop. I played with the words many times before I had what I wanted. CHeers to you!

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      7 years ago from Australia

      Right I'm back. Refreshed and wondering how you can make such a neat analogy with one simple piece of a jigsaw. That's the essence of creative writing isn't it? We'll never run out of originality with you to guide us. Cheers

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      7 years ago from Australia

      Hi steelfields i'm too tired to comment very lucidly. I liked your poem and i shall read it again tomorrow when my noggin isn't empty. cheers

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      susan beck 

      7 years ago from drexel hill,pa

      Tim-- thanks for reading and commenting. You're right about the mistrust-- a sad byproduct of bad relationships.

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      Tim W 

      7 years ago

      Really like this, fitting together like puzzle pieces, dont we at times? Or not! and I sence a bit of fear, misstrust, in that fragile creature.

      Tim W


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      susan beck 

      7 years ago from drexel hill,pa

      Thanks so much for reading, Tom. I appreciate your comments.

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      Tom Rubenoff 

      7 years ago from United States

      This works well as one poem, but would work equally well as two. Love the imagery and sensuality.

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      susan beck 

      7 years ago from drexel hill,pa

      Thanks, Leni. NIce to have you on board. Thanks for reading and commenting.

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      Leni Sands 

      7 years ago from UK

      Brilliant poem. I too love the idea of the jigsaw puzzle relationship. Great writing.

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      susan beck 

      7 years ago from drexel hill,pa

      Thanks, Wayne. Always good to have you there.

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      Wayne Brown 

      7 years ago from Texas

      I love the reference to the jigsaw puzzle and how everything clicks into place...such a relationships that work. You paint the cautions taken in opening yourself up to love very well using the nature reference. There is a mood here that holds throughout...the same feeling I use to get listening to Rod McKuen's writing in the 70's. I liked it. WB


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