Love Forevermore

hiya are you tuning in at all..... nice to read this again

Just make sure to live up to your poem! You'll be set for life.

Oh Wow, What a beautiful tribute to making an effort to rekindle love... Unfortunately, poetry seems to be given such low scores on HP. I'm rating this one up because true love always deserves a second chance! :)

What a beautiful gesture wesley. I'm assuming I'm reading the edited version, judging on the comments above? And did it work - was she taken with your poetry and the fact that's it for her, about her?

This is really lovely. A woman wants to be in love with the man she chose, the man who is the father of her children. Let her know every day that you love her and that she is the most important part of your life. This poem is a great start...keep it up.

Being that I write poems about love all the time I say that is beautiful. But Ralwus is right about one thing. Love that has grown old sometimes goes out and is SO hard to rekindle. But as long as you try and as long as their is spark left in her heart that longs for the way things used to be between you and her....then I say It never hurts to try. A woman's heart can endure much heartache and is capable of redoing it all over again, but when she is hurt by a man's choice of something over her unconditional love then sometimes the resentment can outweigh whats left of her love for that person. BUT AGAIN...the poem is beautiful and I hope the best for you and that she loves it and welcomes you home with loving and open arms to re-share that "love" again.- JJ

I am no poet but I loved it I would agree with Candie as for me endure sounds like something you have to put up with while cherish is something you delight in.

I agree with everyone here in that, yes, please give this to your wife. The opinion edits here are very wise. Please consider these suggestions.

Overall, nice, Wesley. Never lost the opportunity to express how much you love someone. I wish you both the very best.

Beautiful! (on a technical note.. maybe change "endure" with "cherish"?? ) I know putting your heart on your sleeve is tough, but you did, and did it nicely!

Wow. My husband never cared enough to write anything for me. You really love your wife. That is so sweet. She should appreciate those words.

Wonderful heartfelt poem, wesleycox. She'll enjoy and appreciate the your admittance to your sensual side. However, I would suggest that you not use overreaching words (archaic language) such as "tis,""hath," and "alas" as they are vague and unnecessary when simple, clearer words will do. Just pretend she's standing right in front of you and looking into your eyes when rewriting this. Believe me, it'll have much more meaning, to both you and her. Hope you don't mind the advice! Good luck.

If its from the heart and you read it to her she will love it.

love dying is kinda negative isn't it

no need to say the flame of our love has dwindled in a poem, concentrate on it re igniting that's only my opinion.

I know I would love it, if it was given to me. However wonderful the words are, I hope you have a plan of action to back them up! Even loving words can hurt if the actions do not match. :D

i THINK SHE WILL LOVE SOME OF IT.... but not necessary to put the negativity in about her thinking it was dying.... just reassure it's beginning ... don't forget the flowers... You have now joined the ranks of the poets, well done. Can't actually believe you are a novice... just finished one myself... check it out... it is about me missing poems on hubpages...

Well it can't hurt, and it is beautiful. I do hope it works for you. Sometimes it takes much more than a love grown old to rekindle than it does to kindle a new one. Been there myself a few times. Thanks for sharing.

Yes, go for it =] she'll love it.