Breathe - A Tritina Poem

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Breathe


I plant my feet and take a deep breath

I tell my brain to be quiet

Raising my arms, I salute the sun


I lift my heart to the sun

Filling my lungs with breath

In and out, my mind quiets


I am centered in the quiet

Inhaling and exhaling, I reach to the sun

Hearing only the sound of my breath


Breath slow and quiet, I give thanks to the sun.


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How to Write a Tritina Poem

With just 10 lines, the tritina is a less complicated version of the more well-known and challenging sestina. For those new to poetry and seeking to experiment with different forms, the tritina provides a simple yet elegant structure for a creative exercise.

The tritina consists of three tercets (three-line stanzas) and a concluding line. Each tercet uses the same three end words, one for each line. The end words are used in a different order in each tercet following a recurrent pattern. The closing line contains all three words.

The pattern, known as a lexical repetition, is as follows (the numbers represent the three end words):

1

2

3


3

1

2


2

3

1


1 2 3

There is no rhyming scheme and the lines may be of any length, as long as they follow the lexical pattern. The end words may be varied slightly, as in changing the tense of a verb or making a noun plural.

To write a trintina, choose the three end words first. Concrete nouns and active verbs work best. Then write out the end words for each of the three stanzas, following the pattern set out above. Build out each line and tercet as you tell the story your chosen words evoke. Finally, capture each end word in the concluding line.


Additional Reading

For another example of the tritina form and a truly beautiful poem, you will enjoy reading Embracing the creative wonder of solitude:an inspirational tritina poem by midget38.

Learn about other Poetry Forms from Daisy Mariposa.

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Deborah Brooks 4 years ago from Brownsville,TX

what a beautiful; poem... I am so glad I found this I may try it soon

Blessings

Debbie


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DeborahNeyens 4 years ago from Iowa Author

Thanks so much, Debbie. I was a little nervous about publishing my first poem. I'm glad you enjoyed it.


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Pollyannalana 4 years ago from US

Your first wow! I think I will try it too. I am so long winded in mine, I need to learn something about less said!


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DeborahNeyens 4 years ago from Iowa Author

Thanks so much for the comment, Pollannalana. I wanted to write a poem for National Poetry Month and the tritina applealed to me because of its simplicity and because it provided a structure to work within. You definitely should give it a try. It's a fun creative challenge.


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billybuc 4 years ago from Olympia, WA

I will leave the beautiful poetry to you. Well done my friend; simply lovely!


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DeborahNeyens 4 years ago from Iowa Author

Thank you, Bill. I'm not much of a poet (I haven't written a poem in years), but with all the beautiful poems I've been reading here on HubPages, I wanted to give it a try. I really appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. Glad you enjoyed it!


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Curiad 4 years ago from Lake Charles, LA.

Beautiful Deb! I never studied poetry and found that your description of the type of poetry and the rules interesting. When I write poetry I just write what I feel with no regard to any conventions.

Voted Up!


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bravewarrior 4 years ago from Central Florida

Curiad pretty much took the words out of my mouth! I was not aware of this type of poetry. Mine has always been non-structured and seems to just spill out of me. A first line pops into my head and it just flows from there. Sometimes I rhyme, sometimes I don't, but they usually take no more than a few minutes to write because the thoughts just seem to spew out of me! Nonetheless, this particular poem is absolutely beautiful! I say, write more!


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DeborahNeyens 4 years ago from Iowa Author

Thanks, Curiad. Since I haven't written much poetry, it made it less intimidating to have a structure to work within. Like a sodoku with words. : )


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DeborahNeyens 4 years ago from Iowa Author

Thank you, braviorwarrior. I'm happy I experimented with poetry and definitely will write more!


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Rosemay50 4 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

Beautiful poem and a very interesting format.


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aviannovice 4 years ago from Stillwater, OK

I was not acquainted with the tritina.


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Tams R 4 years ago from Missouri

Interesting. I learn so much about different types of poetry here on HP. I'd never heard of tritina. Thank you for the educating experience and beautiful poem.


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DeborahNeyens 4 years ago from Iowa Author

Thanks for reading and commenting, Rosemay, aviannovice, and Tams. I hope I've inspired you to try writing your own tritina. It's a fun exercise.


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ChristyWrites 4 years ago from British Columbia, Canada

With a simple structure your poem tells of a powerful message - sit back and relax. Your photos are great too Deb!


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DeborahNeyens 4 years ago from Iowa Author

Thanks, Christy! One of the best things about publishing this poem as a hub was being able to use some of the photos that I love.


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jonmcclusk 4 years ago from Cinnaminson, New Jersey

This poem is inspirational and calming, a good read at the end of a a long hard day. I thank you for sharing this with us.


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Victoria Lynn 4 years ago from Arkansas, USA

Wow! the poem is peaceful, and the photos are beautiful. I enjoyed the lesson and may have to try this type of poetry sometime!


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AudreyHowitt 4 years ago from California

Lovely feel to this! And Great use of the form!


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Movie Master 4 years ago from United Kingdom

What a lovely poem, I am keen to try this style, thank you for explaining the structure.

Loved the photos too!

voted up/awesome


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Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

Voted up and beautiful. Great poem and thank you for much for the information. Lovely pics.


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DeborahNeyens 4 years ago from Iowa Author

Thanks, jonmcclusk. The funny thing is I wrote it one day when the power went out and I couldn't do anything with my computer so I got a pen and paper and started writing. So that's maybe where calming feeling came from, because I wasn't plugged in.


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DeborahNeyens 4 years ago from Iowa Author

Thanks, Victoria Lynn. I hope you do try it some day; I'd like to read the results! : )


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DeborahNeyens 4 years ago from Iowa Author

I'm glad you stopped by Audrey. It was because of your National Poetry Month challenge that I wrote this. I said there was no way that I'd be able to write 30 poems, but I wanted to try writing at least one. And I enjoyed doing it so much that I probably will write more! Thanks for inspiring me.


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DeborahNeyens 4 years ago from Iowa Author

Thanks, Movie Master! I'd love to see what you can do with the tritina form. And it feels great when one of the best photographers on HubPages compliments my photos. : )


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DeborahNeyens 4 years ago from Iowa Author

Thanks so much, Gypsy Rose Lee. I'm glad you enjoyed it and hope you use the info for your own poem someday.


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Nell Rose 4 years ago from England

Well I learn something new everyday! lol! such a simple method of poetry, and yet your poem was lovely! I will definitely have to try this, wonderful! voted up and shared! nell


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Sunshine625 4 years ago from Orlando, FL

Way to go Deb! Thank you for the tritina lesson. I just might give this a try. One day. Awesome poem and photos!


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Just Ask Susan 4 years ago from Ontario, Canada

I really like this style of poetry and will have to try writing a tritina.

Beautiful Poem!


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fpherj48 4 years ago from Beautiful Upstate New York

Deborah....I am always in awe of poets and the intriguing ways they use words to form phrases that tell a wonderful story...that all have profound meaning and decorate our souls. Thank you..


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DeborahNeyens 4 years ago from Iowa Author

Thank you for reading and commenting, Nell, Sunshine, Susan, and fpherj48. I appreciate the votes and shares. I'm no poet, given this is the first poem I've written in probably 25 years, but I'm delighted it's been so well received. I enjoyed the creative process and will be looking for other poetry forms to explore.


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Ruchira 4 years ago from United States

Deborah...you captured breathe well in this poem. Tritina style sounds exciting. Will give it a try!!!


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DeborahNeyens 4 years ago from Iowa Author

Thanks so much, Ruchira. I can't wait to read your tritina!


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vocalcoach 4 years ago from Nashville Tn.

Thanks for teaching me about the tritina form for poetry. This is beautiful and so inspiring. I completely resonated with "I am centered in the quiet

Inhaling and exhaling, I reach to the sun

Hearing only the sound of my breath."

Thank you and voting up and across except for funny!


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DeborahNeyens 4 years ago from Iowa Author

Thank you, Audrey. I appreciate your support. The response to my little poem has been so positive and encouraging that I have a feeling it won't be too long before I try my hand at another one.


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Vinaya Ghimire 4 years ago from Nepal

I'm new to this poetry form. Thanks for sharing the descriptions. I loved your composition.


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Jools99 4 years ago from North-East UK

Great poem Deb. I find the less complex the form, the harder it is to do -I'm too wordy :o)

Voted up, etc.


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DeborahNeyens 4 years ago from Iowa Author

Thank you both for reading and commenting, Vinaya and Jools. I enjoyed working within the structure of the tritine. It was like putting together the pieces of a puzzle with words.


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Docmo 4 years ago from UK

Great work here Debs- beautifully chosen tierces that unravel a gentle ,natural cadence. A really mellow chanting that warms the heart. Very well done indeed. Voted up!


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DeborahNeyens 4 years ago from Iowa Author

Thanks, Docmo! I appreciate the read and comment.


KDuBarry03 4 years ago

beautifully and heartwarming, Deborah! Yes, you are right, the sestina is much more of a challenge, but I think a tritina can be just as challenging to convey a message. I see you had no problem there, though! Well done :) I enjoy your poetry.

-KD


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DeborahNeyens 4 years ago from Iowa Author

Thanks so much, KD. I enjoyed my tritina experiment, but I'm not sure if I'm ready for the sestina just yet!


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xstatic 4 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

Wonderful poem and great explanation of the form. Saw a comment on Chris Hugh's Hub and wanted to see your work.


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DeborahNeyens 4 years ago from Iowa Author

Well, thank you, xstatic. It's nice to meet you. I'll check out your work, too.


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b. Malin 4 years ago

Very Interesting form of Poetry Deborah. I've always Enjoyed learning, and Expressing myself through my Writings. I Enjoyed your Beautiful Poem, and Explanation of how it's done. It's Amazing how many Wonderful ways we have to Express ourselves.

I now look forward to Following your Hubs.


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DeborahNeyens 4 years ago from Iowa Author

Thanks, b. Malin. I'm glad you enjoyed my poem. I look forward to checking out your work, too.


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girishpuri 4 years ago from NCR , INDIA

An awesome piece of poetry, voted up


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DeborahNeyens 4 years ago from Iowa Author

Thank you, girishpuri!


iamaudraleigh 4 years ago

I have never written a a tritina ...hmmm

You did a nice job of writing one while incorporating such pretty pictures!

I like this..thank you!


ignugent17 4 years ago

This is very refreshing and I love the pictures too. Thanks DeborahNeyens for the information I might try to write a tritina.


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DeborahNeyens 4 years ago from Iowa Author

Thanks to you both, imaudraleigh and ignugent17. I hope I have inspired you to try your hand at a tritina. It's a fun exercise.


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rasta1 4 years ago from Jamaica

Thanks for the lesson. I really enjoyed the poem too.


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midget38 4 years ago from Singapore

Deb, I love this, and so need to read it this morning! I feel the peaceful vibes within. Thanks for sharing and making my morning so much better with this. Sharing!


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Denise Handlon 4 years ago from North Carolina

Deb-this is beautiful and interesting. I've never heard of this type of poetry and followed Michele's poem to yours. It is something I'm interested in trying...a nice challenge. Your poem is lovely. Thanks for the explanation in this article. UP/A/U/I/B and shared.


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DeborahNeyens 4 years ago from Iowa Author

Thanks for reading and commenting, rasta. Glad you enjoyed it.


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DeborahNeyens 4 years ago from Iowa Author

Michelle, thank you so much for the nice comment. And thank you for linking to my poem from yours. I've added a link back to your poem.


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DeborahNeyens 4 years ago from Iowa Author

Thanks, Denise. Please do give it a try. It's a great way to challenge yourself as a writer.


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cclitgirl 4 years ago from Western NC

I absolutely loved the poem, but I also loved the explanation for a tritina that you gave - I want to get into writing poetry and have no idea where to start and this gives me some great information. Plus, the fact that you include what a tritina gives it even more meaning for me. :)


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midget38 4 years ago from Singapore

Deb, thanks for the linkup!! A fantastic poem I'm sharing again.


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Angelo52 4 years ago from Central Florida

Very nice. Enjoyed the reading very much. The explanation on how to make your tritina poem is also very useful.


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DeborahNeyens 3 years ago from Iowa Author

Thanks for the comments, cclitgirl, midget and Angelo. I'm glad you enjoyed the explanation. It's a fun exercise to write a tritina.

Midget, thanks again for sharing and linking.


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Peggy W 3 years ago from Houston, Texas

I had never heard of this type of poetry but now thanks to you I have had a most beautiful introduction. I liked your thoughts as well as your beautiful photos. Thanks! Up, useful and interesting votes.


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DeborahNeyens 3 years ago from Iowa Author

Thanks, Peggy. Glad I could teach you something new. I appreciate the lovely comment and the votes.


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ocfireflies 3 years ago from North Carolina

As one who must remind herself to breathe, I especially enjoyed your poem. Voted up. Kim


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DeborahNeyens 3 years ago from Iowa Author

Thanks, Kim. Welcome to Hubpages!


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Vellur 2 years ago from Dubai

Beautiful poem and clearly explained. Voted up.


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DeborahNeyens 2 years ago from Iowa Author

Thank you, Vellur. I appreciate you reading and commenting.

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