Puffing: Poem

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Here's a short little observational poem that popped into my head while I was looking out my window. I hope you enjoy it!




Puffing


a wool hat

and puffy red snow

jacket plodding through

a cold path I know

gloves bumming cigarette

mask puffing for show.





all rights reserved. copyright 2/15/2012



My poetry collection

Thanks for Reading.

A FREELANCE WRITER, HONORS STUDENT AND GOVER PRIZE FINALIST, JUSTIN W. PRICE (AKA, PDXKARAOKEGUY) CONSIDERS HIMSELF A POET FIRST AND FOREMOST BUT IS ALSO A SHORT STORY, BIOGRAPHER AND HUMOR WRITER. HIS POETRY COLLECTION,DIGGING TO CHINA, WAS FEBRUARY 2ND, 2013 BY SWEATSHOPPE PUBLICATIONS AND IS CURRENTLY AVAILABLE ON AMAZON, BARNES AND NOBLE AND THROUGH YOUR LOCAL BOOKSELLER.

HIS WORK WILL ALSO BE FEATURED IN BEST NEW FICTION (2014 EDITION), AND HAS APPEARED PREVIOUSLY IN THE RUSTY NAIL, EFICTION, BURNINGWORD, THE CRISIS CHRONICLES, THE HELLROARING REVIEW, SEE SPOT RUN AND THE BELLWETHER REVIEW. HE CURRENTLY SERVES AS MANAGING EDITOR OF EPOETRY MAGAZINE AND THE BRIDGE ONLINE NEWSPAPER.

HE WORKS AS A FREELANCE WRITER, EDITOR, AND GHOST WRITER, AND IS WORKING TOWARDS HIS PH.D. HE LIVES IN A SUBURB OF PORTLAND, OREGON WITH HIS WIFE, ANDREA, THEIR LABRADOODLE, BELLA, SCHNOODLE, SAUVEE AND BLACK MOOR GOLDFISH, HOWARD WOLOWITZ.

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PDXKaraokeGuy 3 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks Lesley. I appreciate the visit!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 3 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks so much, Cyndi. I appreciate the comment!


Lesleysherwood 3 years ago

I love this poem, its succinct and beautiful. I conjure up an image in my mind and wonder if you have the same picture as me.. Thats whats so good about reading, we all have our own versions of one and the same thing. Voted Up and sharing.


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Cyndi10 3 years ago from Georgia

Bad habit, but oh the mystic and imagery that surrounded it for so many years. Madison Avenue sold it well! Such a short poem, yet so visual. Excellent.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Marcy, I've written several poems about tobacco use, including my poem Leave Black which is about my enjoyment of pipe tobacco.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks crumple. I enjoy your response immensely!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks for your comment Jeremy


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Audrey, thanks. I've always liked this one. It's just simple and fun :-)


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Marcy Goodfleisch 4 years ago from Planet Earth

I grew up around people who were hooked on these nasty things - what an interesting theme for a poem! You are so creative!


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rcrumple 4 years ago from Kentucky

Many years past habit begun

Dad provided very first one

Two packs a day

I toke away

Tried to quit but now weigh a ton

I'm guilty. Times change and so do attitudes. Sometimes, people don't.

Enjoyed the poem. Up & Interesting


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goego 4 years ago from Loserland

Good time to show... up


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AudreyHowitt 4 years ago from California

Nicely done Justin! But I love the shorter forms!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks Till. I always appreciate your reads and comments!


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tillsontitan 4 years ago from New York

I obviously can related. Nicely done both as a poem and a fact ;) Voted up.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

molo, enjoy your puff... and sharing is caring... even if it is cancer sticks


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molometer 4 years ago

All puffed out, I'm off for a puff lol. Cool Poem Justin


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks Sue. I'm pleased that you enjoyed this!


Sueswan 4 years ago

I found this one very humorous. Loved the imagery.

Voted up and funny.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Easy Rider was a terrific movie. Thanks for reminding me I need to watch it again! Thanks for reading and commenting


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks Lady E. I'm pleased


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Alastar Packer 4 years ago from North Carolina

Yeah, it is kinda zen like. Don't bogart that j***t my friend, pass it over to me....Holy Model Rounders song from the Easy Rider sound track.


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Lady_E 4 years ago from London, UK

Lovely Poem. I tried to picture what you wrote.

Thanks


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

LOL, Thanks Gypsy. I actually really enjoy the smell and flavor of tobacco, but I generally only smoke a pipe or the occasional cigar these days.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

racin, you and Cardisa are both seeing cowboys!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Vinaya, me too..


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks deborah! I'm glad you can see his naughtiness


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

thank you audrey! I'm following your blog now. you should follow mine. I try to update it everyday


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

bobbi, that is very kind and what an astounding compliment. Thanks very much!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks Susan. I wasn't worried about her comment.. ignorance doesn't bother me. But, leaving an ignorant comment and then not even reacting to my piece.. that's ridiculous.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thank you cardisa. obviously she doen'st. And the reason I don't write on Triond is because they reject everyone of my poems for not havign enough content. It's not a good forum for poems. hubpages is


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

ae, she already said she thought the poem was short, duh! ;-) I'm glad you enjoyed it. I'm also appaled that someone who refers to herself as hubpage gal doesn't understand how hubpages actually works, apparently. I should call myself Physics Guy and then act befuddled at this albert einstein fellow...


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

subron, does digital mean an e rader? i don't have an e reader, but I'd be happy to review... even if you could send over a paper manuscript. I work better with paper :-)

That's Joh Cusack in the picture


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

exactly


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

thanks cc. I'm glad you enjoyed this and the image! I tried to use exact, concrete images. plus, I rhymed. I rarely rhyme...


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Amy, I love that story. That's a perfect poetic metaphir.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thomas, Thanks. I miss driving through Reno. I used to live in vegas, so I'd go through reno often.

Certainly your hubs are irreverent, but substandard? hardly...


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanksd Martie. I'm glad this made you think


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

r9, one of my favorite stories is from Ezra Pound when he wrote In the station of the metro. it began as a thirty line poem. The final draft is a famously effective two line poem. Sometimes less is more...


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Violetsun, I appreciate the zen aspect :-)


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks Linda


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks for your comment, Pooh


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Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

Yeah all those cigarette puffin cool dudes. We got them here too and I think they all have bats in their belfries. Our guys walk down the street, wild wind blowing, smoke into the face of the person behind them. lol


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raciniwa 4 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

well, all i can see is the cowboy walking down the street in movies...haven't seen one in real life...nice one Justin...


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Vinaya Ghimire 4 years ago from Nepal

I feel like smoking!


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Deborah Brooks 4 years ago from Brownsville,TX

hey real cute.. I can see the dude smoking..

thanks for sharing

voted up

Debbie


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AudreyHowitt 4 years ago from California

Cute piece Justin!


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PurvisBobbi44 4 years ago from Florida

Hi,

It was refreshing and delightful. Good job.

Your talent outshines any comments that is not positive,

rise above it.

Because we know the shortest sentence in the Bible--and these two words said it all---Jesus wept. We did not need a paragraph to comprehend the meaning.

You are the master of your poems. The artist of your thoughts and words. Your feel it, your write it, and you claim it.

Bobbi


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sholland10 4 years ago from Southwest Missouri

PDX, I love it. It is vivid and speaks to the senses.

@Hubpage Gal: Substandard? Really? You must not know poetry very well. Maybe she is unknown to you, but I believe Emily Dickinson is quite famous and studied in schools and universities around the world.

PDX, take heart... Dickinson had her critics, too. Obviously wrong, but critics just the same. GREAT HUB! GREAT POEM!


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Cardisa 4 years ago from Jamaica

Hubpage Gal, there are no limit on text for poems, if so that would mean that many poets would be turned off from posting on HP. Do you know what an epigram or a Haiku is?


AEvans 4 years ago

Whimsical little hub! I enjoyed!

@HubPage Gal: What did you actually think of the poem? The poem was written on a whim and in jest, we shouldn't be determining if it is substandard or not. It was merely a humorous share by PDX. :) All of us tend to have some fun once in awhile. :)


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SubRon7 4 years ago from eastern North Dakota

Very interesting (and short!) poem, KaraokieGuy. and that guy really looked familiar but I can't place him.

By the way, Les Paul is at Amazon now, digital only, $0.99, title "The Light at the End of the Tunnel." Wouldn't mind seeing a review (good or bad) from you....


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tsmog 4 years ago from Escondido, CA

I like. Reminds me of , , ,


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cclitgirl 4 years ago from Western NC

Hehehe...this makes me think of a little boy with a red jacket and one of those "driving" caps and a sled...smoking with his older brother. This is incredible! It's great how it conjures up so many visions and points of view from everyone! Voted up and SHARED!


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Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO

I remember when my home was on the market. The real estate agent loved "all" the antiques and our decorating style. While I had many comments from buyer's regaling my decorating, it derailed the emphasis on the house. The real estate agent suggested scaling down to capitalize on the architecture of the home. In many instances, "less is more". Your select verbiage paints a perfect picture in your distinctive style.


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ThoughtSandwiches 4 years ago from Reno, Nevada

Justin...

It snowed last night in Reno and when I was walking my dog this morning...I lived this poem! Great Job...sharing like a ciggarete on my break! Hubpage Gal...yikes...substandard...um...yeah...you won't want to look at any of my hubs...lol

Great job Justin!

Thomas


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MartieCoetser 4 years ago from South Africa

Pretty picture! Smoking is indeed a way of hiding... masking... diving into a cloud of smoke where reality cannot tear the skin off our bodies. Voted up and thought-provoking :)


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R9139 4 years ago

Great work as always, nothing wrong with the poem at all. If you were to write a full length 2,000 word poem you would look a bit mad ....or talented, but for the most part mad.


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VioletSun 4 years ago from Oregon/ Name: Marie

Enjoyed this as a few simple Zen like words, gets the message across. Voted up!


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Sunshine625 4 years ago from Orlando, FL

Interesting and inspiring poem:)


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Poohgranma 4 years ago from On the edge

Hubpage Gal, you are correct. Poems are a completely different medium than articles just as finger painting differs from works of art.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks, Eddy. glad you enjoyed this!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks ,Aurelio


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Hubpage gal, I have seen entire hubs that were just a haiku poem (17 syllables) so I would assume it's obvious the standard is different. what's the point of leaving a comment like the one you left?


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

lol, cardisa. That's funny!


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Eiddwen 4 years ago from Wales

Great work and thanks for sharing.

Very clever an dhere's to many more to share onhere.

Take care my friend.

Eddy.


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alocsin 4 years ago from Orange County, CA

You made me see the scene! Voting this Up and Interesting.


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Hubpage Gal 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

I am surprised that the Hubpages staff did not consider this poem substandard because of the lack of text. Maybe the rating criterion is different for writing poems instead of writing an article.


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Cardisa 4 years ago from Jamaica

LOL, I am trying to picture someone smoking and can only think of a cowboy, how weird is that! Never seen a real cowboy but Clint Eastwood comes to mind....lol

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