WHILE REDEEMING MY SOUL: Chapter 4 - An Interlude Serenity

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Chapter 4: An Interlude Serenity

Before I would have read any further, I was informed that someone is on the phone line for me. I put the book on my bed, and started to creep towards the phone. In my heart, I knew who must have called me. I picked up the phone, and I didn’t need any voice to recognize the person behind that, the silence was enough to say it all. After all, it was the same silence that made me fall in love once upon a time, how I could ever forget that. It was my wife, Aisha.

Things really have changed a lot. I always dreamed of spending my whole life with her, but nobody knows what future brings in for you. As there is a famous saying:

“A person often meets his destiny on the road he took to avoid it”

I never thought I would spend these last days of my life in her absence. But I don’t understand why...

“Hello? Tauseef! Are you there?”

My wife helped me to overcome my depression once more.

Me: “Hello. Yes I’m here. How are you?”

Aisha: “I am fine. What about you?”

Me: “Yeah. Me too”

We both lied to each other and then the long familiar silence came over us. It has become quite a custom in recent days. And she understands it quite well that I am not strong enough to talk.

“Tauseef” She continues.

Me: “Yes?”

Aisha: “It has been done.”

Me: “What?”

Aisha: “I am coming from the bank. The account has been settled. Finally, the entire amount has been withdrawn in 17 cheques and everyone has been reimbursed.”

Me: “Oh! That’s a great news Aisha!”

I could sense the grievous feeling on the other side of the phone line. She was choked, tensed and frightened. So, I decided to continue.

Me: “That really was very kind from your side Aisha. I am really thankful to you.”

She was still quiet. In a hesitating voice, I somehow continued talking.

Me: "I really miss you Aisha, I wish I could spend these days with you. You have always been a wonderful support to me, and you made all those decisions so simple for me to make.”

Before I could say any further, the line had been disconnected, and the Jail Superintended told me:

"Time is up. You can now go to your prison cell again.”

Chapter 5: An Oblivious Revelation:

(You can read chapter 5 from the above link)

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Binaya.Ghimire 5 years ago

I'm truly enjoying the story.

Some suggestions:

Even though this is a series, try to make it self contained.

Try to make each part little longer and include something substantial.

From what I have read until now, I applaud you for the perfect ending in each part. It makes the readers want to read more.

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pheona402013 5 years ago from Toledo

This is great material. I just recently found the very thing your character is searching for. It is unbelievable the power of this fictional character in the truth about the tormoils of this life. Stay on the path of the lessons of life, Liberty, and the pursuit of Happiness this story gives and you will reach millions. Keep writting from your heart. I will be following your story to the end, because I have experienced the same kind of hell in my life, just not to that extreme. God blesses your talents. I have a feeling you already know this, or you wouldn't have started writing.

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homesteadbound 5 years ago from Texas

I liked how you used "made me fall in love once upon a time". It makes me feel like it was indeed a long time ago. I really appreciated your quote, "A person often meets his destiny on the road he took to avoid it”. So true, so true. No matter what we do, we are bound to meet a destiny. We really have no choice.

I really liked the turn of events at the end of the chapter where we found out that he was imprisoned.

I am looking forward to reading the rest.

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Sueswan 5 years ago

Hi Hunbbell

I just finish reading 4 chapters of your story. I am very impressed with your writing.

I cried when I heard that Benazir Bhutto was assassinated.

I look forward to reading the remaining chapters.

Voted up and awesome.

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Hunbbel Meer 5 years ago from Karachi, Pakistan. Author

@Binaya: Actually this story was written last year, so everything has already been done, I am just publishing the chapters now. Though, I will seriously consider your sincere suggestions whenever I will write anything next time :)

And I am glad that you are enjoying the story :)

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Hunbbel Meer 5 years ago from Karachi, Pakistan. Author

Pheona: I thank you for such kind words of appreciations you made for me, it made me feel better :)

I hope you'll enjoy this story, because you mentioned that you can somehow relate to the character. I will be expecting more comments and feed backs from your side :)

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Hunbbel Meer 5 years ago from Karachi, Pakistan. Author

@Homesteadbound: Thank you for noticing such minor things and appreciating me on them. Actually, about the 'destiny' quote, I would suggest you to keep the quote in mind. In the last chapter, you will be revealed that the main character, Tauseef, actually did something to avoid his destiny and to be with his wife. I am spoiling a little surprise here, but I think it will add to the curiosity :P

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Hunbbel Meer 5 years ago from Karachi, Pakistan. Author

@Sueswan: I am so glad to know that you have read all the chapters and awaiting for the rest of them :) Thank you so much. 2 chapters are still remaining, making up the climax of the story. I hope you'll like them as well. :)

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homesteadbound 5 years ago from Texas

But, perhaps what he did to avoid his destiny, he was actually destined to do to find his true destiny.

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Hunbbel Meer 5 years ago from Karachi, Pakistan. Author

Yes you can say that; it was something like this. You will get to know it in a couple of days anyways :)

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