I'd like feedback on my Hub: Simple Nail Art Ideas and Tutorials with Stamping i

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   Jasmeetkposted 9 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub Simple Nail Art Ideas and Tutorials with Stamping in 2016. What can I do to improve? Thanks!

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      VerityPriceposted 9 years agoin reply to this

      You have some really helpful pictures and your formatting is good.
      What is letting you down is your grammar & sentence structure, for example: "You can find easily a nail art salon your nearby" should maybe be something like "You can easily find nearby nail salons".
      Also you seem to be stuffing the article with your key word and it doesn't seem natural. You mention the term 'nail art' 7 times in your first five sentences, that's just too much and makes it hard to read.
      
      Otherwise, your tips are really helpful and you name each product and colour that you use, which is awesome!

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         firstcookbookladyposted 9 years agoin reply to this

         Or: you can find easily a nail art salon you're nearby.

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            theraggededgeposted 9 years agoin reply to this

            That's grammatically incorrect
            
            In fact, the whole premise that anyone can find a nail salon nearby is incorrect. Not everyone lives near one - I don't.

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            firstcookbookladyposted 9 years agoin reply to this

            The sentence doesn't say "lives" near by.... it says you can find one you are nearby, unless your nails are blinding you, then, perhaps you'll miss it. Incorrect, or not.

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         Jasmeetkposted 9 years agoin reply to this

         Ok.. I will check my hub for grammatical errors. Can you guide me more for it? Nail art is not my keyword, it came naturally as per the requirement.

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            firstcookbookladyposted 9 years agoin reply to this

            I think that the grammar is just fine. I love the photos. A photo says a thousand words.

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   erorantesposted 9 years ago

   I like your hub. The pictures look great. You need to check how many pictures can you have in your hub.Then, you can select the pictures.Remember, organization with your words is important to the readers.Your hub is beautiful and creative. Congratulations to you. I love it.

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   psycheskinnerposted 9 years ago

   The grammar is not fine. Almost every sentence has an error. Each error is minor in itself but the combined effect will make a hub fail QAP.

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   psycheskinnerposted 9 years ago

   Ass an example here is the first section
   
   One of the popular fashion in 2016 is Nail Art. Nail art is everywhere in the air of fashion these days. You can find easily a nail art salon your nearby, but how about creating unique nail arts yourself at home? I simply love to do nail art at home by myself. There are lots of nail art ideas you can do at home and one of these is stamping nail art.
   
   Should be something more grammatical and conversational and less keyword dense like:
   
   One of the most popular trends in 2016 will be nail art. Nail art is already very much in the air if you are paying attention to fashion. Many people can take advantage of nearby nail salons, but have you considered creating unique nail art for yourself at home? I simply love to create my own fabulous nail art, and many fashion forward designs can be created at home using stamping techniques.

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      Jasmeetkposted 9 years agoin reply to this

      Thans for the suggestion. I will check it for grammatical errors.

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