Please check my hub. :) Thank you. It's a personal one.

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  1. TessSchlesinger profile image93
    TessSchlesingerposted 21 months ago

    Hi all,

    My sister regularly gets peeved because people make commetns like "Oh, you're just thin because your'e a dancer.' I get regularly peeved because I'm told that my ID must be fake and I can't possibly be a senior. So we put our heads together and decided we would share with the world how we remain young and slim. (Well, I'm just in the process of dropping those few extra pounds again.)

    http://hubpages.com/health/Remain-Young … g-After-40

    This is, however, something different to what I normally do - very personal. I don't want to come across in a negative way, so please be honest with me and tell me if this piece sounds conceited, or if there is anything else that needs to be fixed.

    Much appreciated.

    1. SakinaNasir53 profile image96
      SakinaNasir53posted 21 months agoin reply to this

      The hub is great! I loved reading it. Not at all conceited. My mom is in her early 40s but she just looks like a university student. People call her a liar when she says that she has 2 big daughters. She gets that a lot by the parents of her class children; she is a school teacher. I showed your pictures to my mom too. She says you and your sister look great and so young! ☺

      1. TessSchlesinger profile image93
        TessSchlesingerposted 21 months agoin reply to this

        Thank you. smile Your mom obviously lives a healthy life! smile

        1. SakinaNasir53 profile image96
          SakinaNasir53posted 21 months agoin reply to this

          Yep! You are welcome Tess! ☺

    2. sallybea profile image97
      sallybeaposted 21 months agoin reply to this

      I enjoyed reading the hub and learning about your secret to a long and healthy life. 
      I found several typos in the text.
      Not sure if HubPages would approve of your saying  'this is number 1 or this is number 2'  They keep on telling me that I should write Step 1- etc., so that might be something to consider.  One of the number words has a  typo in it.
      I would cut and paste the text into word as there seem to be a few other spelling and grammatical errors too.

      1. TessSchlesinger profile image93
        TessSchlesingerposted 21 months agoin reply to this

        I just took a quick glance at my Word copy (I write in word and copy and paste onto Hubpages), but I couldn't find any typos. I wonder if you would be so kind as to find them for me. Typos generally show up in word in red, and nothing shows up in red. Also, grammar errors generally show up in blue, and nothing shows up. Also, could you give me an example of a grammatical error.

        Step One, etc. sounds great. It does, however, not mean the same thing as number one.  Step one is the beginning of a process you need to do in a particular order while number one just means it's one of several. It's the difference between an ordered list and an unordered list. I was also in two minds to say 'This is number one.' However, I've said that there are six habits so I have to have a number in there somewhere. Do you think that I could say "Habit number one?" etc. smile

        Thanks for taking time to read through it.

        1. sallybea profile image97
          sallybeaposted 21 months agoin reply to this

          I put the text into my copy of word and these were the suggestions below. 
          None of my late mother’s twelve sisters or brothers look (looks)as young as my sister and I do. 
          By 40 (this was the word suggestion)
          6 Habits to Aways (Always) Look, Young
          Remaining young in late life has a lot to do with how one lived one’s earlier life?
          Actually, no, Charmaine does 97 sit ups (the hard ones) every morning.
          The doctor asked me if I was a sportman  (sportsman) or woman!
          Killing off Unhealthy Bacteria
          This is numbr three. (number)
          I can’t say that they have worked for me;
          When you eat all the time or when you snack every two or three hours (consider fragmenting)
          ¼ to ½ avocado pear (s)
          Dip filleted fish in hemp flour.
          Avocado, green onion, and celery
          whether we are going to live a disciplined life. Highly nutritious food prepared from scratch in small quantities plus daily exercise is the basic (basis)for remaining young and healthy.
          Highly nutritious food prepared from scratch in small quantities
          Yes, if it hasn't slipped too far.
          I did (kid) you not.

          Word is a funny thing, it showed me a few examples of where you could consider fragmenting a few sentences but I have left some of them out and did not want to seem to picky:)  Hope that helps anyway.

          I think I have read somewhere on HubPages that it is better to use the actual number instead of the word number,  I think it might have more impact if you say Habit No.1 for example but not sure what others would advise.

          1. TessSchlesinger profile image93
            TessSchlesingerposted 21 months agoin reply to this

            The number rule is that anything under twenty is written, and eveything over it is used as a figure. However, that was in the 50s and 60s. Maybe it has changed.

            None of that showed up in my Word. I'm not quite sure why. I did test it by writing a wrongly spelled word and it showed up. I'm going to have to take another look.

            Thanks for the list. I'll fix it up.

            Soooooo very much appreciated.

            Thank you soooo much for your input. smile

 
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