I'd like feedback on my Hub: This is the woman she taught herself to be

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    felixderrickposted 9 months ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub This is the woman she taught herself to be (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

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      theraggededgeposted 9 months agoin reply to this

      Hi there,

      Your hub needs to be put in the Creative Writing category. You've placed it in a section that is for factual articles.

      I'd suggest that you don't switch view points within the same paragraph. Either stay in her head or his. You can't tell your reader how his eyes make her feel, and then switch to telling us that he knew he messed up. If you don't understand what I mean, then do some research on writing points-of-view.