I'd like feedback on my Hub: Learning to Trust in a Dry Time

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   Thirtysecondthghtposted 7 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub Learning to Trust in a Dry Time (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

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   pen promulgatesposted 7 years ago

   Thirtysecondthght - hello
   Welcome to Hubpages. Good luck with your venture!
   To begin, the evidence of your faith is visibly pronounced throughout the article. One can very much feel your genuine intentions.
   However, the article doesn't justify the title.
   Predicaments of the affected in the examples have been given more emphasis than the trust factor. When it comes to faith, I know trust is deem understood, but not all can relate equally or similarly.
   
   In the first capsule 'faith,' In the beginning you mention prayers are never answered in low times - It gives a negative start contradicting to 'keeping faith.'
   Though later on, the article talks about a miracle. But that doesn't connect with the strong show of faith mentioned earlier (read below more please)
   Then you talk about the story; the brother dies - Jesus comes- sisters cry and run to him - Jesus asks to keep trusting him - seeing the love of the sisters - Jesus helps the brother come back to life. In all this, the writing sounds more of a miracle done through 'compassion' than 'faith, or trust.'
   Had it been mentioned, the sisters didn't lose faith and were still optimistic that faith would bring back their brother, it could sound different.
   Again, as I said the intention is clearly visible but in writing it didn't look convincing. 
   In the example of widows:  the tough time was there, the result was miraculous, but what trust was placed and how faith overpowered the situation are missing.
   In the little boy's lunch: it sounds like a little boy happened to be there with food and that satisfied all. A generic message is given to trust. How did trust and faith work in that situation is unclear, e.g., - did the boy have trust that food will be sufficient for all, was there a strong show or lack of faith by people, etc. The specific reasoning is missing.
   The blind man example just says he begged faithfully and got blessing from Jesus. How did his faith make him extraordinary?What goodness of God was displayed through his blindness?What glory was showed/received, and how his trust in Jesus made him get the blessing, etc. are missing.
   Lastly, I am sorry for the ill health of your wife, and for your hard time too. I am confident you will come fine through it. In fact, I can see a hub related to your title in your situation. You could write about 'how your trust holds you strongly' in this tough time, perhaps. Tc

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   Thirtysecondthghtposted 7 years ago

   Thank you for your good feedback and kind words.  I really appreciate it.

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   pen promulgatesposted 7 years ago

   Your welcome. I will wait to read your hub

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