I'd like feedback on my article: How To Make Your Relationships Stronger

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   Pearly Juneposted 6 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: How To Make Your Relationships Stronger (must be signed in to view)

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   Natalie Frankposted 6 years ago

   Hi Pearly June - A few things that might help.
   
   Come up with a better title that won't have tons of competition.When I googled your topic I came up with  125,000,000 results.  This also suggests your topic is over saturated if your dead set on this topic you should try to come up with things that aren't in other articles.
   
   Make sure you have properly formatted subheadings.  Don't number your level 2 subheadings after an unnumbered level 2.  Don't use all caps in your subheadings.
   
   This article looks more like a blog post than an article.  Ex. "Girls have been "I want someone that is handsome and has toned body", and boys are "Oh shoot! That's a one hot chick, man! "  HP wants hubs that answer questions that readers are searching for and that are written like articles.  Add some research and write it a bit more formally.  Related to the above - also make sure you are using standard English.
   
   You need to watch out for run on sentences.  For ex.
   'Being in love is something we can consider as a gift because you are happy with the person you care for, you realize things that makes you a better person, you learn to appreciate all things that seemed worthless to you, and you learned to love, to care, to sacrifice for someone important to you."
   
   Watch out for incomplete sentences ex. "Not only means accepting their appearances but accepting their attitudes, what they think, what they have."
   
   Get rid of extra space.
   
   Make sure you proofread carefully and edit appropriately.
   
   Spend some time in the learning center to be able to write using the guidelines and resources to improve your writing style and ability.  Good luck!

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      Pearly Juneposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you Natalie! I'm so happy that you took time to read and give suggestions about my work. I certainly will do what you've suggested. More power!

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         Natalie Frankposted 6 years agoin reply to this

         You're welcome.  Good luck to you.

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