I'd like feedback on my article: Why to need to constantly "Why"

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   kkapkaaposted 6 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: Why to need to constantly "Why" (must be signed in to view)

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      theraggededgeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Hi there,
      
      Welcome to HubPages.
      
      I took a look at your article. To be frank, it has a lot of issues.
      
      Firstly it's way too short. Needs to be around 1000 words.
      
      Secondly, I can't understand it. What is the premise of the article? What are you trying to convey?
      
      I was expecting you to address the question in the title, but the conclusion seemed to be to keep off the internet and go for a walk.
      
      And you've used a table capsule for a sentence? What you need there is a call-out capsule instead.
      
      Read through the Learning Center to find out more about writing at HubPages: https://hubpageshelp.com/
      
      Good luck.

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   kkapkaaposted 6 years ago

   Thank you for taking time to reply on this. This will be really helpful to do better. Let me fix it.

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   Rupert Taylorposted 6 years ago

   The title seems meaningless to me and so does the text. HubPages looks for unique, informative, magazine-style articles.
   
   Offering should be accompanied by rich media content that is free of copyright restrictions.
   
   As the raggededge says you need to spend time at the Learning Center.

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      fcmosherposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      It could work great at a poetry slam. Maybe the right place for this article is in LetterPile.

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   kkapkaaposted 6 years ago

   Thank you folks for your immense contribution to guide me. I am new in this and open for criticism to learn as I always had. I am working on this to fix. Thanks again

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   kkapkaaposted 6 years ago

   Hello everyone, I have made changes, please take some time to comment/criticize/appreciate.
   I am glad, i am here and have so much support from experts.

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   theraggededgeposted 6 years ago

   OK, have you done some reading of the Learning Center articles? This is a useful one: https://hubpageshelp.com/content/Learni … y-of-a-Hub
   
   My suggestions are:
   
   Change the title to something that people are searching for. Remember that your readers do not come from within HubPages, but via search engines.
   
   Add a short introduction explaining what the article is about.
   
   Break up large blocks of text. Most people will be reading on their phones, and a wall of text is off-putting.
   
   The content is still very muddled. You jump from ancient Rome to evolution to logic (no need to enclose in quotes). Instead of allowing your thoughts to ramble on the page, break the article down into logical sections. Each paragraph should address a single idea.
   
   Use subheadings as the framework for the article and write around 200 words in each text capsule.
   
   Also determine who you are writing this for? Who is looking for the information? What will they take away from it?
   
   Let me share my process, it might help.
   
   An idea for an article occurs to me. I do some research as to whether people are looking for the info. I might type the topic into Google to see what turns up in 'related searches'.  There's a site called Ask the public which is excellent for ideas for titles and subheadings.
   
   I plan out the article from intro through to a conclusion (never call them 'introduction' and 'conclusion' though -- use proper subheadings). I know that five subheadings will give me a 1000 word article, but many of mine run to several thousand words.
   
   I start writing. I make sure I stay on topic. I make sure I'm answering questions that readers are looking for. I make sure I include relevant images sourced from legal sites. If I add an Amazon product, I make sure I refer to it in the text in a way that is natural.
   
   If you follow these guidelines, your articles will be approved.

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   kkapkaaposted 6 years ago

   Wow! Thanks so much for sharing so much. I will definitely do better this time. All your suggestions are GOLD to me. Let me start. Thanks a ton again.

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   Natalie Frankposted 6 years ago

   Why are there two threads for this?

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      kkapkaaposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Yes, I realize, I clicked all links received through email. This is the original one. Working on the other one to delete. Thank you.

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   kkapkaaposted 6 years ago

   Hi all,
   
   I have fixed it again but still it have not been cleared, what am i missing? please suggest. I changed the heading also included callout capsule.

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