I'd like feedback on my article: Best Cheap Goalkeepers Fifa 19 Ultimate Team

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   Mr Awberyposted 6 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: Best Cheap Goalkeepers Fifa 19 Ultimate Team

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      quotationsposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      I am confused by your title. How can a goal keeper be Best and Cheap?
      
      And then in your first paragraph you state:
      
      
      
      What does that mean? What is a budget option for a position? If you define it later in your article, it should be right at the beginning to explain the thesis of your article. I stopped reading soon after that, bewildered by what seems to be irrelevant adjectives and superlatives. Maybe I just don't understand soccer jargon, but this really stood out for me.

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         theraggededgeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

         It's a computer game

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            quotationsposted 6 years agoin reply to this

            So is the best and cheap referring to buying these players within the game? If so, I think that should be expanded on.

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               Mr Awberyposted 6 years agoin reply to this

               I appreciate the feedback.
               
               The best cheap goalkeepers was intended to suggest who in the game was the most quality on a budget. It’s a computer game and players cost more/less, so the article is trying to help those who are on a budget find the best options. Would budget be a better word than cheap?
               
               I’m not sure how this affected my quality control application, which I was really looking to resolve, but I take on board the criticism and will attempt to address your issues!

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                  quotationsposted 6 years agoin reply to this

                  Please forgive my confusion. I was unfamiliar with this game. I see now what you are getting at.
                  
                  It might be better to frame the title as a question, and then answer it in the body of the article. For example, you could say "How to get the best FIFA goalkeepers at the lowest price" (not quite like that, but generally as a question. You should play around with the wording. Use phrasing that a person googling this question might actually use.) Then answer the question the article.
                  
                  An article that clearly answers the question in the title will score better on the quality assessment.

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                     Mr Awberyposted 6 years agoin reply to this

                     Oh I absolutely understand. Thanks for that.
                     
                     So I could frame it as “who are the best value for money goalkeepers in FIFA ultimate team?”

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                        quotationsposted 6 years agoin reply to this

                        That sounds good to me. However, before picking the exact wording I would suggest that 1) you use Google's search suggestion tool to see what kinds of phrases develop based on your initial word combination. For example "best Fifa ultimate team goalkeepers" and use these suggestions to brainstorm. 2) search for what you are writing about to see how other people have named their articles or phrased the question. It is also a good way to brainstorm and come up with the best wording.

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                           Mr Awberyposted 6 years agoin reply to this

                           I appreciate the feedback.
                           
                           I do, however, not really understand how impactful this will be for my articles being featured. Is the title really that important when it comes to their decision to feature or not?

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                              DrMark1961posted 6 years agoin reply to this

                              From a QA standpoint:
                              1. Title is not in an APA format.
                              2. Second subtitle is too long. If you need to learn more about titles and subtitles then I suggest reading lobobrandon´s article on SEO for Hubpages.
                              3. That section, which should not be titled overview (most readers are just going to skip over it) should have those features broken down in a bullet list. The details you include are hard to follow.
                              4. Have some captions on your photos. WHo are they?
                              5. Explain where those numbers come from. Who determined that Donnarumma has an 87 handling? What does that mean if I want to pick him for my game?
                              If you need more ideas go to the Levelskip site and look at the most popular articles there. Ultimately you are only going to do well here if your article is moved to that site, so make sure it is acceptable now. Getting past QAP will be no problem.

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                              quotationsposted 6 years agoin reply to this

                              It's not just the article but the congruence of the text with the question posed in the title.
                              
                              My initial concern was that the subject of your article was confusing. Even ignoring the title for a moment, the opening paragraph should state the premise of what the article is about. For example: This article explains how to ... In your case, the opening paragraph did not seem to mesh with your title. So I am suggesting making it clearer, starting with the title, but then clearly and succinctly in the opening paragraph explaining what the article is about. This will achieve two things: It will let any human reviewers better understand and evaluate your hub and it will let any artificial intelligence programs figure out what this is about in order to catalogue it in search databases and also rate its quality.
                              
                              Others may disagree with me on this, but I think the need to write in a way understandable by an AI is important. AIs are not as intelligent as humans yet and so in order for them to understand a text, it is best to tell them explicitly what it is about. Otherwise they, like humans, may become confused. Any difficulty in figuring out your argument will  downgrade your quality score, whether the hub is assessed by a human or an AI bot.

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   Mr Awberyposted 6 years ago

   These have been really insightful, I’ll definitely go away and Address the concerns you’ve raised tonight.
   
   Thanks!

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