I'd like feedback on my article: When Comments Become the Article 3

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   Rodric29posted 6 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: When Comments Become the Article 3

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      theraggededgeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Similar observations as with the other article, Rodric, with some additional comments.
      
      I can't stress the need for a proper title. Your title is what shows up in search engine results. If you aren't too worried about traffic or earning money, It's not so important.
      
      This intro: "Debating if I should start off with some anecdotal story that is happening in my life, I decided to start this article out with some anecdotal story that is happening in my life!"
      
      I think that is supposed to be funny, but it's really just confusing. You must have a proper introduction to explain to your readers what they can expect. We need to know what we will be reading about.
      
      So I'm six paragraphs in and I still don't know the topic. Now I'm skimming through and I still can't work out what I'm reading. It's religion-based, but about what, I have no idea. Is it about racism?
      
      It seems that this was written 'off the cuff'. With no structure or framework to help it flow. That is very difficult to carry off in an article. You end up with all kinds of divergences and little dead ends.
      
      So, think about what message you are trying to get across here. List at least four subheadings that will take you from the introduction to a conclusion. Think structure. Think flow.
      
      You must make sure that your images are legal to use. You can't take images from the internet and republish them here: https://hubpageshelp.com/content/Learni … -image-use
      
      I see you have a ton of articles here already, and many of them are on the network sites, so perhaps I'm teaching granny to suck eggs here With all your experience, you must be able to discern the problems with these two articles?

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         Rodric29posted 6 years agoin reply to this

         Thanks. I see the points that you are making. I did not put to paper what I had in my head. Sometimes comments can be the subject of their own articles. In this case, it needs much work to shape it into that. I will re-edit with the suggestions you provide in mind. Sometimes, even with so many featured hubs, I need to be schooled in the basics of writing.

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   psycheskinnerposted 6 years ago

   The title makes me expect an article on how to convert interesting comments into articles, and what I got was something about Mormonism?  Seemed like a personal blog post not a hub.

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      Rodric29posted 6 years agoin reply to this

      pscheskinner, my hub was supposed to be about comments that make good articles on their own. I did not do a good job of presenting that for the last two hubs. I did a better job on the first one with this title. I need to go back and make each article stand on its own. I am taking comments from articles I have written and making them into hubs. It is trial and error.  These are the error parts. Also, I do write a lot about doctrines from The Church of Jesus Christ of Latter-day Saints. I prefer not to be referred to as a Mormon or my religion referred to as Mormonism. Thanks for your insight. I really appreciate you being honest about reading and expected. I will edit. If that doesn't work I might have to delete and rethink I going to turn my comments into articles.

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   Natalie Frankposted 6 years ago

   The main thing I think is that they don't like articles that sound like they're in a series even if they can stand on their own.  Typically, they won't move them to niche sites unless they have unique titles though you can link them to each other as long as they're on niche sites and not linking from a niche site back to HP.  The title doesn't seem to really represent what the article is about anyway.  If the article is on Mormonism, you need to indicate that in the title.  People who think an article is about one thing and start reading just to find out it's on something else often get annoyed especially if the something else involves religion. Good luck.

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      Rodric29posted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Thank You Natalie. I am considering changing the nature of the articles so that I can do a series where each article can stand alone. I did not give this much thought and detail. I saw it occurring with another hubber and tried to copy. I have to work out my approach. I want to keep the title, so I will have to find another way to keep potential readers from getting annoyed. I had to change the title s to one of my other series because it annoyed me! I want to push with this one for as long as I can, the title.

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         theraggededgeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

         The problem is that the title is meaningless. And while it is so, the articles will probably keep being rejected. Your title HAS to reflect the content.
         
         Also, do you think anyone is searching for that title? If you retain it, you are essentially wasting your time. You can work on the content all you like, but if the title is naff, the content is never going to be found, or read.

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            Rodric29posted 6 years agoin reply to this

            I think I mournfully will have to change the titles then. I did not want to do it because one of my favorite hubbers does a series that just reached over its 200th article! I was hoping to start a following like that writer. He is a dynamic writer and has a huge following. However, he does not worry about whether his articles are featured or not.
            
            I will take you advice and change the title. I changed the content drastically. That was not enough. Thanks for your advice. I am so grateful that you were direct and not beating around a bush too.

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   Kenna McHughposted 6 years ago

   It seems you tried something different than what you usually do. That is adventurous and takes more work. What are you trying to say? Once you have your message, organize your article to get your message across to the reader.

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      Rodric29posted 6 years agoin reply to this

      It is something different. I am going to need to change the titles to reflect explicitly what is in the article. I like being featured.

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   psycheskinnerposted 6 years ago

   I read the article and it doesn't match the title at all.  If you wanted to write about how to spin articles from comments, this is not it.  You don't tell people how to do this with their own topics using general principles.

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      Rodric29posted 6 years agoin reply to this

      I get it. You are right. I am going to change the title. I wanted to have a long series only changing the number. I might be able to write an article about change a comment into an article after your help.  Thanks so much for this.

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   kiylahskiesposted 6 years ago

   I personally really like it, the personal vibe I get from it kind of makes me want to read more, but i agree with the past title problem

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      Rodric29posted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Thanks, kiylahskies. I changed the title and spruced it up a bit.

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   Hannah Kuykendallposted 6 years ago

   I really like the article, The only problem I had was the title. because like someone else said, you have it as a series and if I was trying to find an article on this topic, the title would have detoured me because it seems like a series.
   Id love it if you would check out my first article and give me some feedback as well!
   https://hubpages.com/health/Living-with … lk-allergy

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      theraggededgeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Hannah, if you need help with an article, post a separate thread. People will be glad to help. Posting a link to your own on someone else's thread is frowned upon.

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