QAP Please tell me why this article is not working

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   Doneta Wrateposted 6 years ago

   The wording is too steeped in Zodiac terminology.  You have to understand Zodiac ideas quite a bit before you can follow the thought.  I read the first paragraph and was lost, could not follow it.  If you want to write for the general public,  you need to break it down into smaller ideas and explain them in more detail.

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   Doneta Wrateposted 6 years ago

   Most people have never used acupuncture or traditional Chinese medicine.  Those two things are of the minority counterculture.  Most people have no idea what chi of qi means.

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   theraggededgeposted 6 years ago

   Tess, you have asked for feedback. Doneta has kindly offered her viewpoint, but yet again you disagree with the review offered.
   
   Of course you can disagree, but if you don't want to read the views of others, then don't ask for them.
   
   This is why I never respond to your requests any more.

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      TessSchlesingerposted 6 years agoin reply to this

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         Jean Bakulaposted 6 years agoin reply to this

         Tess,
         I am well versed in tropical astrology, and I perfectly understood your first few paragraphs. I think the audience is lazy and some of them don't like to read too many facts. I break up many of my more complicated astrology articles or metaphysical ones with a lot of pictures, although it looks like you did that as well. I believe your writing is above the average person's head. I've found I've had to write in simpler terms on some articles, people don't want to think, they want to be spoon fed.

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         theraggededgeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

         Okay, I'm not talking specifically about your hub, but about you dismissing Doneta's suggestion. She's trying to do you a favour by explaining how it appears to her. If you don't think she's correct, then just let it go. You don't have to argue or tell her you're 'flabbergasted'. It puts people off if they feel the time given to reading the article and then commenting is wasted. They feel dismissed and as though their opinion is worthless.

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            TessSchlesingerposted 6 years agoin reply to this

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               theraggededgeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

               Tess, you don't have to appease or be grateful beyond merely saying, "Thanks for taking a look and for your suggestions." That's all. Nothing more required.
               
               No one attacked you, far from it. You asked for help and Doneta tried to explain that she thought it was a bit complex.
               
               You don't need to be sorry, I do understand why you respond in that way, I'm just trying to explain that people can be put off. Maybe wait a little, think it through, and then, if the suggestions don't work for you, use the phrase above?
               
               

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                  TessSchlesingerposted 6 years agoin reply to this

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                     theraggededgeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

                     Well, I can try. It's not that your posts are upsetting, more like they are a little abrasive and defensive.
                     
                     I like straight talkers because I am one. I don't pander to those who expect tons of praise if they write crap. You don't write crap, you are a competent writer. If you find yourself defending vehemently, take a step back and try to work out if the person is actually attacking your writing or making a suggestion. And like I said, all you have to do, if you don't want to implement their advice, is thank them for taking a look and then carry on as usual.
                     
                     Edit: I am glad that you have taken this in the best way and that you are willing to adjust your responses

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