I'd like feedback on my article: What do you know about Eid al-Adha

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   Ismahane Saadiposted 5 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: What do you know about Eid  al-Adha (must be signed in to view)

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      theraggededgeposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Hi there,
      
      Your English is not yet up to the standard HubPages requires.
      
      Sidenote: I have been absolutely shocked and horrified at images of animal slaughter during this 'celebration'. Men jumping on beasts until they die, and cattle and sheep tortured while men and boys laugh.
      
      https://animalrecoverymission.org/opera … r-footage/

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   Ismahane Saadiposted 5 years ago

   Hi
   Please identify the linguistic errors I made,in order to correct them
   
   I have not seen all the video you have sent, because it shows through commentary that it's just an amplification, a meaningless exaggeration.
   Your comment about torturing animals during slaughter, prove that you didn't read all the article ,I explained the correct Islamic and human way of slaughtering the sacrifice.
   Didn't you see how the Spaniards tortured and killed bulls such brutality?

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      theraggededgeposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Sorry, I can't identify the errors because they are too numerous. And it's your job to edit your own work to make it presentable.
      
      It cannot be a 'meaningless exaggeration' if those things happened. If it's there on camera, then it is wholly factual. It's all over social media right now.
      
      I condemn bullfighting in exactly the same way, but your article wasn't about bullfighting. And it's not about degrees of torture either. ANY torture of any living creature is barbaric. 
      
      Anyway, I don't want to continue this discussion, so I won't be revisiting this thread.

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         Ismahane Saadiposted 5 years agoin reply to this

         It doesn't matter what social media says, it also talks about crimes in Palestine and Burma, and that's not the subject of discussion.
         You can't compare murder in Spain and slaughter in Muslim countries, and where is it for brutality?
         Is she slaughtering with mercy, or hitting the animal on the head for epilepsy, and killing him?
         Surely you won't understand until you analyze it objectively, not in a racist way

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   Rupert Taylorposted 5 years ago

   It's not possible for us to identify the grammar errors, there are just too many. I counted 10 in the first sentence alone. It is the job of the writer to present an article in near-perfect English.

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      Ismahane Saadiposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you very much

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   Indelible whisperposted 5 years ago

   Besides, there is much misinformation about the festival.

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      Ismahane Saadiposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Right, there's a lot of information and shaded pictures, and there are those who don't know the truth about this holiday, and there are those who don't recognize who it is

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