I'd like feedback on my article: Aeroponics How To

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   Don Erra Andersenposted 5 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks
   
   Rune Andersen
   Here is my article: Aeroponics How To (must be signed in to view)

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      theraggededgeposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Hi Don, there are many issues with this article but the main one is that you have not written to the title. It's supposed to be a 'How to', but it isn't. It's just a description. Ask yourself, could someone with no knowledge of the topic, read your article and immediately know how to set up such a system? Do you see what I mean? If I am writing a 'how to' about making a rose garden, I'm going to give the reader logical step-by-step instructions.
      
      Your first sentence: 'learn' should be 'teach'. You don't learn someone, you teach them.
      
      Don't direct readers off the page to another article, they may not come back. In fact, they definitely won't.
      
      Those Amazon capsules will be snipped by the editors. You need to discuss the items in depth in the text and use an inline link. Also restrict your Amazon links to just one to start with.
      
      The article ends very abruptly. It's as if you just stopped in the middle of a section.
      
      Use proper paragraphs. At the moment you are just pressing Enter at the end of every sentence. It's not the right way to do it. A paragraph should contain one or more sentences that focus on one main idea. As I have done here.
      
      There's a lot of work to be done here to get this featured. I suggest you spend some time at the Learning Center: https://hubpageshelp.com/
      
      Research other articles on the relevant HubPages' network site here: https://dengarden.com/gardening/ They will help you to understand what is required.
      
      Use the free apps Grammarly and Hemingway. The first will help improve your grammar; the second will help with style.
      
      Good luck and welcome to HubPages.

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      OldRosesposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      As a gardener who is familiar with aeroponics/hydroponics, there are some big problems with your article.  The two things that jumped out at me immediately are your claims that soil is dirty (it is not) and that anything can be grown aeroponically/hydroponically which is also not true.  There is a lot of controversy in the horticultural world over these two methods of growing plants.  You don't address that controversy either.  And then there is my own personal pet peeve which is that in a world with a rapidly dwindling supply of potable water, using that scarce resource to grow plants makes no sense when there is a better alternative, namely growing plants in soil which takes much less water.

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   Don Erra Andersenposted 5 years ago

   Thank you so very much for this feedback, I understand alot better now.
   The reason it seems to end rather abrupt is that it is an article I have written on a sales page selling hydroponic equipment, so I had to leave out a bit that was about that...and I ofc should have added some other stuff instead...there is enough to take off in this topic for sure.
   Everything you say is gold! Thx!

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      theraggededgeposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Ah... well, one thing you can't do here is reproduce writing that has already been published. It has to be new, original content.

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         Don Erra Andersenposted 5 years agoin reply to this

         Oh..even if its written by me?

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            theraggededgeposted 5 years agoin reply to this

            Yes, even if it's your own. There's nothing preventing you writing on the same topic though. And in this case, why don't you write something that reflects the title? Give your readers step-by-step directions.

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