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   GeorgeneMBramlageposted 5 years ago

   I'd like some feedback on this article Review: The Snow Goose: A Story of Dunkirk. An editor wrote a note about this piece in which she said that some parts are smarmy.  I've edited to take out what I thought were smarmy pieces.  However, I'd appreciate more eyes on the piece.  Thank you.

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   Marisa Writesposted 5 years ago

   I think you mean "spammy elements"?  I have never heard of smarmy elements.
   
   If it is "spammy elements", that has NOTHING to do with your text.   It always refers to links to websites. 
   
   Your link is incorrect.  If you post the correct link then I can take a look and tell you which links would be classed as "spammy"

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      DrMark1961posted 5 years agoin reply to this

      https://hubpages.com/literature/the-sno … ex-marshes

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         GeorgeneMBramlageposted 5 years agoin reply to this

         Thanks for writing this out for me!  It has been several years since I've done formatting like this.

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   Marisa Writesposted 5 years ago

   Thanks Mark!
   
   Can you change the link to Camel so that it links to the actual music?  Do that if you can. If you can't, I would remove the link.
   
   I would also remove the link to mark042683's Youtube channel.   It's not necessary because the videos are all linked to Youtube anyway.  There's no need for the reader to visit his channel for anything else.
   
   You can embed a Vimeo video in a video capsule, so I would do that rather than link to Vimeo.
   
   You are reviewing "The Snow Goose", so the link to that book is fine.   You are not reviewing the book about Dunkirk, so that link is more debatable. 
   
   I think it would be worth trying to keep the link, but preface the paragraph with something like, "If you want to know more about the historical events against which the Snow Goose is set, I recommend the documentary "Dunkirk".  Then make the name of the book a text link to Amazon, instead of using the Amazon capsule. 
   
   Although HubPages still offers the Amazon capsule with the produce image, the moderators don't seem to like it!  They are muchmore likely to approve a text link than an Amazon capsule.
   
   If the Hub gets rejected again, then you'll have to remove that link - but it's worth a try.

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      GeorgeneMBramlageposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Marisa, Thank you very much for going over the article.  All great suggestions!  I did not know that we could do a text link to Amazon.
      Interestingly, now that I know, that spammy refers to links to web sites!
      The Hub was not outright rejected, I was just told to correct a few things and the spammy bits!

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   Rupert Taylorposted 5 years ago

   Smarmy - adjective - "ingratiating and wheedling in a way that is perceived as insincere or excessive." Methinks it is a particularly British word; certainly I heard it growing up on the Sceptered Isle.

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      Marisa Writesposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      I'm famliiar with the term "smarmy" (perhaps because I'm British originally). I meant to say that I'd never heard it used in the context of HubPages.

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         GeorgeneMBramlageposted 5 years agoin reply to this

         Marisa and Rupert,  the word "smarmy" just seems like a weird choice to use when describing outside links.

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            Marisa Writesposted 5 years agoin reply to this

            If that is really what the email said, then I suspect the spellcheck changed 'spammy" to "smarmy" and the moderator didn't notice.
            
            The correct term is definitely "spammy".

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      GeorgeneMBramlageposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Rupert, your definition of  "smarmy"  was exactly the way I was using the word.  I do think Marisa was correct with the term "spammy" and its definition.

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