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   Misbah786posted 3 years ago

   I need to submit an article to Owlcation but not sure if it is worthy enough to be accepted there
   I Need feedback on my article, please, as its the first time that I am sending any article to a network site
   a lot of my articles are on LetterPile but, I never submitted them
   They were moved by HP
   Thanks in advance
   Blessings
   
   Here's the link
   https://discover.hubpages.com/education … man-empire

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      manatita44posted 3 years agoin reply to this

      Assalamu Alaikum!
      
      I've already read and commented on this article, which I thoroughly enjoyed. The rather charming, 'theraggededge', is generally right, in my opinion. There are minor grammatical errors, which creeps into some of your other articles as well. You are intelligent enough to correct them.
      
      Both Ann Carr and Linda Crampton are exceptionally good writers, yet I always feel that they keep re-reading their work. Spend more time on your articles, even if you write less.
      
      Now your question should also be related to the criteria for publication in Owlcation, as HubPages would only put it there, if its fits their rules. Otherwise, it would naturally be moved to a 'niche' site soon, all being well. Salaam!

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         Misbah786posted 3 years agoin reply to this

         Wasalam, Manatita
         I respect your and Bev opinion
         I edited the article to remove the grammatical errors
         if any of you can check again after five minutes as it takes time to reflect

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            manatita44posted 3 years agoin reply to this

            Vale, mi Dulce. Solamente por tu. Fine! My Sweet! Only for you.

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               Misbah786posted 3 years agoin reply to this

               Muchas gracias, manatita
               bendiciones -- Thank you very much, manatita, blessings

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                  manatita44posted 3 years agoin reply to this

                  I have started. Unfortunately your work requires a detailed read. It would be nice to pay attention to what I have corrected so far, as you tend to over use words sometimes. I have altered the heading slightly and shortened a couple of sentences. You lack 'flow.' The mistakes mentioned by Beverley are also still there.
                  
                  I'm here again to say that I'm hungry, so I'll go and eat. This means that you run the risk of your work being moved into a niche site, after which you will only be able to edit from your account.
                  
                  Send me your address. My way of helping people, is to take the whole thing and copy into Microsoft. I then read and highlight as is necessary. ceeccil@hotmail.com

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                  manatita44posted 3 years agoin reply to this

                  Done. Too big to post here. Send me an email. Cheers. - Manatita

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                     Misbah786posted 3 years agoin reply to this

                     I am so sorry, Manatita
                     I was away
                     was not on HP
                     but I send it to you now
                     sorry for the inconvenience
                     and Thanks a lot for being so kind and nice
                     God Bless You, My spiritual Brother

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                        manatita44posted 3 years agoin reply to this

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                           Misbah786posted 3 years agoin reply to this

                           Manatita, Check in spam/Junk, please
                           I sent you an email a few days ago as well
                           It also might be lying there
                           blessings
                           
                           
                           

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                           Misbah786posted 3 years agoin reply to this

                           @Manatita, I send it again
                           Hope you will find it now

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                                 Misbah786posted 3 years agoin reply to this

                                 Thanks a lot, Manatita
                                 I sent it now via HP
                                 No worries take your time

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                     Misbah786posted 3 years agoin reply to this

                     Thank you so much Manatita
                     You helped me a lot
                     I appreciate your efforts and kindness
                     God Bless you always

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                        manatita44posted 3 years agoin reply to this

                        A joy to work with you. Allah has given you a Heart of beauty and simplicity. Stay well and blessed.  Salaam!

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                           Misbah786posted 3 years agoin reply to this

                           Thank you so much Manatita
                           I am blessed to have you, my friend
                           You are a beautiful soul
                           God bless you
                           I am thankful to you

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   theraggededgeposted 3 years ago

   I'd say remove the first word, 'European'. You don't need it twice. Also, that's a claim that might need to be backed up with evidence. How do you know that study/teaching of the Ottoman Empire is ignored?
   
   "However, the Ottoman Empire was a huge empire in which Europe had been in conflict..."
   
   Should be 'with which', or 'against which'. Remove 'However'.
   
   I can't go through it all, but there are a great number of minor grammatical errors. For instance, you have used 'wanted' when you probably mean 'waned'.
   
   It needs a detailed proofreading before you can submit it.

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      Misbah786posted 3 years agoin reply to this

      Oh Thanks BevG

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         manatita44posted 3 years agoin reply to this

         Thanks Beverley. Done, I believe. Stay well and blessed. - Manatita

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   theraggededgeposted 3 years ago

   I would be deleting those personal contact details. HubPages is not a closed forum - anyone can access it.
   
   
   

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      Misbah786posted 3 years agoin reply to this

      I think, the forums should remain closed to the outsiders
      That’s just my opinion

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      Misbah786posted 3 years agoin reply to this

      @Manatita see what I found on google
      A poem you dedicated to me
      I am glad it came upon searching my HP profile on google
      
      
      
      
      

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         manatita44posted 3 years agoin reply to this

         Yours is called Spirituality Made Simple. You have commented on it. This one is for Brenda Arledge, I believe.

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            Misbah786posted 3 years agoin reply to this

            Yes you are right Manatita

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               manatita44posted 3 years agoin reply to this

               Ok. I'll send you a poem today

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                  Misbah786posted 3 years agoin reply to this

                  Thanks a lot for the poem, Manatita
                  I have sent you an email now
                  I hope you received it
                  Blessings

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