I'd like feedback on my article: Headspace: Should You Get a Subscription?

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   CherishWilson1posted 4 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: Headspace: Should You Get a Subscription?

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      quotationsposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      The article was for the most part grammatically correct but it reads as a sort of company press release. As such it is not useful or on target to answer the question that you ask in the title.
      
      I would suggest restructuring the article. Talk about how meditation is good for you but that many people find it challenging to engage in it without guidance. Headspace offers guided meditation. Run through the features they offer and the benefits they provide. Then, if this is really an unbiased opinion and not the company's marketing effort, talk about some of the negatives and compare headspace features and price to some other similar companies. Otherwise, it's not an article but PR.

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   theraggededgeposted 4 years ago

   Hi there,
   
   It's a little short and bland. I get the Headspace ads on YT all the time and wondered about buying the app, but I need more information. I disagree with Quotations somewhat - I want to see more enthusiasm and more benefits of having the subscription. Yet I want to read the negatives as well. How much is it? What do you get for your money? Have others said it's difficult to cancel the subscription? What are the general takeaways from the app reviewers?
   
   TBH, your review from the perspective of someone using the free version is not convincing. To make this article work, you need to have experienced the full paid app.

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   CherishWilson1posted 4 years ago

   Hi thank you for your feedback! I wrote this article while was trying to pass boot camp and for some reason shorter, straight to the point articles seemed to be easier when getting featured.
   The questions you are asking are actually great and I didn’t consider those angles. I’ve been focusing so much on not having “spammy elements” that it’s really been hurting my writing style. How do you over come this problem in your writing for Hubpages?

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      theraggededgeposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      'Spammy elements' are just promotional links, i.e. too much Amazon, or advertising your business, or an obviously sponsored article.
      
      Longer articles are better (as long as they aren't full of filler and waffle) because it keeps the reader on the page long enough for an 'impression' to be registered and therefore you'll get paid for it

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   CherishWilson1posted 4 years ago

   Thank you all so much. The advise has been really useful!

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